Microsoft PowerPoint - Thieu Nang - Session 8

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ENGLISH WRITINGhiu nn

Session 8

Module IInstructor: H L V

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OVERVIEW

Review

Linearity development: Homework solution

Vietnamese-English translation: Vng c

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song

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Previously on Thiu Nng

Essay comparison differences in TP pattern distribution manner of exemplification use of explicit cohesive ties

Genre factor narrative vs. argumentative texts

Thematic distribution improvement techniques Linear idea development (part 1)

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Feedback Q: vic c MC dng sai tuy...nhng. Liu c hi kht khe khng khi ph bnh c

ny ? Nu l vn vit th ng l ng ch, nhng nu l vn ni th em ngh ncng khng phi l li qu ln. y l chng trnh truyn hnh trc tip bucMC phi c kh nng phn x v ni tri chy, nn nu mc li cng c th tmchp nhn .

A:1. Spoken language vs. written language: less time and chance to monitor

one s speec an mprove n ng an near y.2. The use of structures such as tuy...nhng in spoken language: fluency vs.

linking3. This is not about criticizing the MC or nitpicking. Its about critical thinking!

Make it second nature to you.

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Sent-in homework 1 feedback 45 people submitted on time.

incorrect file name and/or email subject, no Word file struggling with linearity and implicit linking (esp. in revising Paragraph 9) misrepresenting the authors intended meaning

many are pretty good at identifying repeat ideas Many skip stages and take shortcuts in the early stage Note: Nguyen Thu Hang & Hoang Thi Kieu Anh???

My favorite: L Thy Chi My other favorites: Nguyn Qunh Chi, Nguyn Ngc Nam, Nguyn Thu

Thy

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Sent-in homework 1 feedback

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Sent-in homework 1 feedback

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HOMEWORK

For example, my colleague, instead of attending a prestigious universities universityas many of his peers did(1), he followed in his fathers footsteps (2) and chose anormal school to become a teacher(3). This is understandable since living with hisfather(4) helps him to see his fathers standards of morality and the values ofteaching(5). Consequently, becoming a good teacher like his father(6) is always hislife-long dream (7).

Note: (2)=(6)

father is a [good] teacher (*+6) being brought up by his father (4) grewto a reciate the values of teachin 5 dream career is teachin 7 tofollow in his fathers footsteps (2+6) chose a school that allows him to

become a teacher (3) disregard some fancier schools (1) Note: (*) indicates an added idea (due to implicit linking)

* 4 5 7 26 3 1

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LINEAR IDEA DEVELOPMENT

father is a [good] teacher (*+6) being brought up by his father (4) grewto appreciate the values of teaching (5) dream career is teaching (7) tofollow in his fathers footsteps (2+6) chose a school that allows him tobecome a teacher (3) disregard some fancier schools (1)

Tip: combine ideas that can go together to form more complex sentences Being brought up by his father, who is a teacher (*+6+4) my colleague grew to

appreciate the values of teaching (5) his dream career is teaching to follow in ,

schools, he chose one that allows him to become a teacher (1+3).

again, there are often more than one good solution when it comes to lineardevelopment

but you should NOT skip stages and take shortcuts in the early stage

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HOMEWORK

A good example of this is Julian Assange and Wikileaks (1). Before beinginternationally known for his work with WikiLeaks (2), Assange was a hacker(3).Upon this websites disclosure of secret information (4), the website and its creatorimmediately became the focus of a worldwide debate (5) over confidential messagesregarding Americas global diplomacy(6).

Note: (2)=(5) was a hacker (3), who subsequently decided to set up WikiLeaks (*) a

website dedicated to disclosing secret information (*+4) Such a caseis (*) confidential messages on Americas global diplomacy (6) thewebsite and its creator immediately became the focus of a worldwide

debate (2+5) Note: (*) indicates an added idea (due to implicit linking)


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HOMEWORK

This is very different from the time when I was a child(1) and my mother was sobusy at work(2) that she could only served my family with meals of one or twodishes (3). The lack of food diversity in my familys meals (4) was, besides the lack of

preparation time (5), also due to the fact that the only kind of food that was alwaysavailable in every house at that time without refrigerators was dried fish (6). Otherkinds of food needed to be purchased on every single day(7).

when I was a child (1) the only available non-perishable food was driedfish (6) but we had no refrigerator (*) other types of food must be

purc ase a y un or una e y my mo er was so usy a wor no time for grocery shopping (*) and meal preparation (5) only servedmy family with meals of one or two dishes (3) the lack of diversity in myfamilys meals (4)

Note: (*) indicates an added idea (due to implicit linking)

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when I was a child (1)

the only available non-perishable food was driedfish (6) but we had no refrigerator (*) other types of food must bepurchased daily (7) unfortunately my mother was so busy at work (2) no time for grocery shopping (*) and meal preparation (5) only servedmy family with meals of one or two dishes (3) the lack of diversity in myfamilys meals (4)

1 6 * 7 2 3* 5 4

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FOOD FOR THOUGHT

A common linearity mistake:A (leads to) B (R-T) B (also caused by)C

(A + C) (both lead to) B

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FUN ACTIVITY

Listen to a Vietnamese singer singing Vng C inEnglish What could be problems?

Lyrics:Do u know I love you and miss you so much

Youre leaving me because of moneyI do know I who have nothingI just love you by my heart, my soul.I don't know what to do, no car, no job, no money, no home

I will die very soonHoney come back u can save my life

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Linked ideas Questions:

Chiu C Mau ti thm ai lm ra chiu? Cng ti cc kh b cng ra lm ci g?

Chiu ny khng bn vy th lm g? Tm c khng gp nhn vt "c" l ai, ng vai tr g trong cu

TRANSLATION TASK

c uy n n y Gi u mi m gi u ci g? Ti sao li lm th?

Answers: Ti l ngi lm ra chiu

Ti b cng sc nhiu lm chiu Chiu lm ra khng bn m tng cho c, ngi ti thm yu Nu khng gp c, ti dng chiu gi u mi m nh n c

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Linear development of ideas Ti b rt nhiu cng sc lm ra mt ci chiu rt

p nhng li khng bn m lm qu tng chongi con gi ti yu nu chng may khng c dp gp li

c y th ti nh dng chiu ny gi u hng m nh v ngi con gi y.

TRANSLATION TASK

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A sample solutionH chiu C Mau nhum mu ti thmCng ti cc lm ma nng di duChiu ny ti chng bn uTm c khng gp, ti gi u mi m

TRANSLATION TASK

,come rain or sunshine...to make such a nice mattress, colorful and bright.Its not for sale, but for you, the girl in my dream, as a gift.If we dont have another chance to meet,

this would serve as a pillowlulling me soft asleep

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A sample solution (TP improvement)Ive been working day and night,come rain or sunshine...

to make such a nice mattress, colorful and bright.

TRANSLATION TASK

, , ,which would serve as a pillow...lulling me soft asleepif we dont have a chance to meet again.

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HOMEWORK

Firstly, young children are meant to learn very fundamental skills for their daily lives.At such an early age, their intelligence as well as awareness, not to mention theirpatience and skills, are not good enough for a new language. A five-year-old child,for instance, who may not know how to use his mother tongue appropriately, is notlikely to be attracted by a new language. As a matter of fact, it is not natural foryoung kids to learn a foreign language. At their very early stage of life, they shouldbe taught to brush their teeth, to put on clothes, etc. Such things are good enough atkeeping children busy. A foreign language for young kids is merely something thatwill cause them confusion.

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A sample solution: Main ideas: Learning commitments vs. time commitments

Main concern: how to link the two main ideas Idea re-arrangement: fundamental skills (e.g., teeth brushing, self-dressing, speaking the

mother tongue) are (a) necessary for children to survive and also (b) a prerequisite forthem to learn more complex skills such as learning a foreign language (*) hence childrenshould learn these skills first unfortunately, learning these basic skills already takes upmost of their time and energy no time for extra activities therefore, they should not

earn a new anguage a suc a young age.

Note: if you address two separate ideas in the same paragraphs, the linking between thetwo must be explicit.

Linear development:

Point A Point B Point C Point D Point E

Basic skillsare vital

Need to learnthem first

Time & energyconsuming

No time forother activities

Delay learningan L2

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Try to help make sense of Phi Thanh Vns Da Nu slammed by many critics as a disaster of V-Pop watch the clip

Da nuEm sng trong kht khaoDa nu

Em sng trong c aoMan n nhn c ao

WRAP-UP

Mang n nhng kht khaoLn da nu, Ln da nu, Ln da nu

- listen to Phi Thanh Van defending her song does it sound convincing to you?

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Try to help make sense of Phi Thanh Vns Da Nu Watch a parody clip by Thanh Loc.

Em c mt c aoEm c mt kht khaoLn da tru, ln da tru

Ln da em en nh con tru

WRAP-UP

oes s vers on ma e more sense o you Your own version?

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Da nuEm sng trong kht khaoDa nuEm sng trong c aoMang n nhng c aoMang n nhng kht khaoLn da nu, Ln da nu, Ln da nu

A sample interpretation

WRAP-UP

I yearn for a tanA perfectly tanned complexionItd make my dream come true

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LAST LAUGH

See how non-linearity (and unmotivated New Themes) can be used forhumor effects in English comedies

watch a sample video clip

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