Assignment 11 A

Group PresentationDraft 4

Kaya Sumbland Sanel Homer

Rahel Fasil Gia Alveranga

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DRAFT 2 FEEDBACK

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DRAFT TWO FEEDBACK

TEACHER ASSESSMENT (draft 3)

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PEER ASSESSMEN

T (draft 3) BY

DEBBIE, M

ARIA & M

ILKA

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Record of Grade for draft 1 (Individual)

Kaya Sumbland - DWhat Went Well:• Clear presentation and organisation• Excellent structure • Good understandingEven Better If:• More detail• Use more images• Take real pictures of charactersTargets to Improve:• To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images.

Sanel Homer - UWhat Went Well:• Good organisation• Nice diagrams• Good understanding of chosen themeEven Better If:• Relate my pictures to the words• Less text• More detailTargets to Improve:• Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.

B

Record of Grade for draft 1(Individual)

Gia Alveranga - UNo work handed in

Rahel Fasil - EWhat Went Well:• Short brief pointsEven Better If:• Use titles for slides• More detail• Make sure I present my knowledge more clearlyTargets to Improve:• Use more images and less text

B

Kaya & Sanel Record of Grade for draft 1GroupPresentation Level – D-

What went well?• Showing progress and achievement• Slides have good organisation• Good effort and creativity• Good start to conventions

Even better if?• Colour code should be background• Title all the slides• More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia• Don’t read from the screen

Targets to improve…• To make sure all group members contribute• Write our presentation with more detail and understanding• To word our idea’s better

B

Decisions and RevisionsKaya & Sanel

Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot.

C

DRAFT 1 : • Thriller genre• Based on a girl who had schizophrenia and thought she

was possessed• Too complicated and sent out the wrong message about

the mental illness.

DRAFT 2 : • Completely same idea• Mental illness taken out – wrong message • Replaced with actually being possessed

Decisions and RevisionsKaya & Sanel C

CHANGE IN IDEA : • We decided to change idea completely• Drama genre• We did research again on conventions• We want to connect with the audience• New idea was a girl’s life on drugs and her hallucinations

ALTERED IDEA : • Idea suits more to a thriller• Change drugs to mental illness• Hallucination - > Bizarre delusions• Change to psychological thriller• Alter flashbacks to match new concept• Girl with schizophrenia who is being emotionally

connected to toys from her real parents

Decisions and RevisionsKaya

C

HOW THE CHANGES HAVE HELPED: • Explored various genre’s creating a varied

understanding of the differences• Wider understanding of different themes and

topics• Exercise our creativity and to stimulate greater

idea’s each time

Our changes in pictures!!

Kaya & Sanel

Genre – Psychological Thriller

• Our genre has changed because all of our thriller and drama ideas always somehow turned into a psychological battle for the character

• We feel psychological thriller is the most interesting genre for most

15 + audiences

• We all agreed that doing a psychological thriller would be the best genre for us because we can relate it to real life while still adding a bit of controversy.

D

KayaGenre – Psychological thriller

Psychological :

Thriller :

Psychological Thriller :

• Related to the mind or process of the mind

• Suspense comes from one character

• Conflict with their or others mind

• Focus on intense action or plot

• Emphasized character or plot for suspense

• Character rely on their mental recourses rather than physical

• Battle for equilibrium in their own mind

• Suspense is created through characters mind or upon their mind

Example of a psychological thriller film

Donnie Darko - 2001

Kaya D

Daunting bizarre delusional

character only seen by the main

character

Being told what to do from the

delusional character thinking

its right

The main character doesn't realise the difference between reality and pretend

The Black Swan (2010)

Example of a physiological thriller film

This is a physiological thriller film because Nina the swan princess had a trauma-based mind control where what she was imagining seemed real and so the mind control in the Black Swan can relate to reality as we could understand how they can interconnect and relate to some of the harsh realities of professional entertainment industry.

Sanel

D