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Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases.

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Your writing should be as clear and concise as possible. Eliminate unnecessary words and phrases.
Can you spot the unnecessary words in this sentence?
I am of the opinion that the reason why our air quality is declining is due to the fact that not enough people in this day and age drive fuel-efficient vehicles.
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Use the following strategies to revise wordy sentences. Click on the strategy you want to explore.
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Eliminate padding
Delete repeated ideas
Reduce the number of modifiers
Change clauses to phrases
Remove unnecessary information

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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.
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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.
because of the fact thatthe reason isI believe thatthe point iswhat I mean is
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Phrases to watch out for include the following:

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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence?
The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.
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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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Eliminate Padding
Which phrase can be eliminated from this sentence?
The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.
Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.
The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.
The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.

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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.
The bus was late because of the fact that it had a flat tire.

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The bus was late because o the fct tit had a flat tire.
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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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The bus was late because of fit had a flat tire.
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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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The bus was late because it had a flat tire.
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Be sure your sentences dont contain empty or unnecessary phrases.

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Delete Repeated Ideas
Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways.
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Delete Repeated Ideas
Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways.
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Delete Repeated Ideas
Which idea is repeated in the following sentence?
At 7:00 A.M. in the morning, we were waiting at the bus stop.
Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways.
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Delete Repeated Ideas
Sometimes you may repeat the same idea in two different ways.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Where are the modifiers in the following sentence?
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Which modifiers could be removed?
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Which modifiers could be removed?
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Which modifiers could be removed?
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
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The strong word blazing already implies hot and bright.

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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Which modifiers could be removed?
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.

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The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
The bright, hot,
Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
The bright, hot, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
The bright, blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Reduce the Number of Modifiers
The brigblazing sun beat down on the travelers.
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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The blazing sun beat down on the travelers.
Reduce the Number of Modifiers
Too many modifiers can actually decrease a sentences effectiveness.
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Change Clauses to Phrases
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Change Clauses to Phrases
The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
In the following sentence, which clause could be changed to a phrase?
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Change Clauses to Phrases
The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase?
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Change Clauses to Phrases
The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
How could you rewrite this clause as a phrase?
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
Change Clauses to Phrases
Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase.
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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The police officer, who is a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
Change Clauses to Phrases
Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase.
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Change Clauses to Phrases
Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase.
The police officer, who a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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The police officer, a ten-year veteran, was given a certificate of appreciation.
Change Clauses to Phrases
Delete the introductory words to turn the clause into a phrase.
Clauses that begin with who is, that is, or which is can often be reduced to simple phrases.
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Remove Unnecessary Information
Only include information that is important for your reader to know.
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Remove Unnecessary Information
What information could be removed from the following sentence?
My best friend, who lives across the street, builds functioning robots.
Only include information that is important for your reader to know.
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My best friend, who lives across the street, builds functioning robots.
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Only include information that is important for your reader to know.
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The fact that the friend lives across the street has nothing to do with his building robots. Those words should be removed.
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What information could be removed from the following sentence?