Year 13 Lang/Lit

Paper 2

Writing About Society

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Year 13 Lang/Lit

Paper 2

Section A

Recast a section of The Kite Runner

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Year 13

AO2: Analyse ways in which meanings are shaped in texts

AO4: Explore connections across texts, informed by linguistic and literary concepts and methods

AO5: Demonstrate expertise and creativity in the use of English to communicate in different ways.

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You should spend around 1 hour and 20 minutes on Section A.

There are 25 marks for the recast and 30 for the commentary.

You need to write around 300 words for the recast and 400 for the commentary.

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The Recast - establish a clear style

- Produce a cohesive text - Make it thoroughly convincing

- Represent speech & thought carefully - Be brave & use your imagination!

- Use the base text wisely; keep some words/phrases and replicate the style of the character but be original too

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Writing is imaginative in parts, but

some aspects are

also derivative/ unoriginal.

Sustain style(s) of writing in

most of the text. Use base text with some success.

Some flair and

originality. Sustain a chosen

style(s) of writing

strongly. Use the

base text mainly

convincingly

Show a high degree of flair and originality. Sustain a chosen

style (s) of writing

throughout.Use the

base text convincingly

A05

Level 3 Level 5 Level 4

21-25 16-20 11-15

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Show a high degree of flair and originality. Sustain a chosen

style(s) of writing

throughout.Use the

base text convincingly

For Level 5 (A* - A)

AO5

From whose perspective(s) is the recast text? What is

the best narrative style?

You must know the characters well & be

convincing in your adoption of a ‘style’, recreating a

section of the text Hosseini never wrote.

You must make choices of language and narrative about

which you can comment effectively in your

commentary.

Consider the connotations of your

word choices & ensure you are aiming for the

right effect

Use your study of The Kite Runner to develop

a writing style; look for things like very short sentences and

learn to emulate them

Look very carefully at the requirements of

the question.

Show rather than tell, e.g. “The mother was angry” OR “The mother glared at her sleeping husband, her eyes narrow and stormy”

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Show a high degree of flair and originality. Sustain a chosen

style(s) of writing

throughout.Use the

base text convincingly

For Level 5 (A* - A)

AO5

Keep clear notes on how speech & thought is

represented.

Revise your notes on narrative each time you write a recast; use the

terminology!

Each time you plan a recast, plan your commentary too – this ensures you think about effective choices before you

write!!

Revise your terminology for the commentary,

especially that learned during your study of The Handmaid’s Tale.

Keep clear notes on the events in the novel – know what

happens when (both chronologically and within the narrative

structure)

Create clear character logs with a wide

selection of quotations from the text from them/about them.

Revise the ways in which speech is correctly written in narrative texts; you will probably need to do this in your exam.

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Provide perceptive accounts of

how meanings are shaped,

by judiciously selecting & identifying significant language

features and by evaluating the choices you made.

Offer perceptive

insights about

particular aspects of

language and likely

effects produced in

the base text,

compared with your

transformed text.

Produce a commentary which is well

organised and

accurately written.

For the commentary, Level 5 (A* - A)

AO2 AO5 AO4

5 9-10 13-15

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In the commentary, AO2 rewards

you for making

analytical comments about your own writing.

You do this by identifying

the language choices you

made & offering a

rationale for your

decisions.

In the commentary, AO4 rewards you for your

ability to make

connections between your writing & the

base text. You must

refer specifically to the nature of the base text

in order to achieve a

comparison & target A04.

Here, you are assessed on your writing expertise in producing a commentary on the re-writing you did in the 1st Q. Writing expertise is assessed via: • creation of a well organised text • accuracy of writing.

For the commentary

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AO5

…comment on the style of narrative chosen and from whose perspective this is (I presented …using a heterodiegetic

narrator …filtered through …perspective ….

….explain how you’ve interpreted the base text (To demonstrate

…I focused on …)…

…give examples from your recast….

…comment on any shift in narrative perspective (The change to Mary’s

perspective…) ….

Continue this, commenting on: links

between base and recast, examples,

language choices etc.

Indicate clearly what your intentions are (I

intended to….) …

…comment on any attitudes you reveal in your recast and give examples, using terminology (…attitude…using pre-modifiers…)…

Provide perceptive accounts of

how meanings are shaped,

by judiciously selecting & identifying significant language

features and by evaluating the choices you made.

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Year 13 For Level 5- Making connections

AO4

Use your knowledge of KR; here, the student has referred to Alex’s ‘real

name’ & how ironically he & Gallien’s son (invented)

have the same name.

….explain your choices by linking to the base, e.g. here, the ‘physicality’ of Gallien which is clear is

transformed to his physical actions rather than an

ability to talk

…give examples from your recast….

Fill in some narrative gaps in the base text, e.g. here,

the student provides reasons for Gallien’s reactions in the base

Develop your points in the same way as in the commentary…

Use some words/phrases from the

base, e.g. ‘kid’

…comment on any attitudes you reveal in your recast and give examples, using terminology (…attitude…using pre-modifiers…)…

In the commentary, AO4 rewards you for your

ability to make

connections between your writing & the

base text. You must

refer specifically to the nature of the base text

in order to achieve a

comparison & target A04.

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Year 13 For Level 5- Analyse your writing

AO2

…plan to include specific language choices – this

will make your commentary easier to

write!

…comment on your narrative choices….

…grammatical choices…..

….exical choices, including patterns of language….

…remember the rules of analysis – Point, explain, support,

expand, link

This is basically about analysing your own

writing….

…don’t forget such important elements as

deixis…..

In the commentary, AO2 rewards

you for making

analytical comments about your own writing.

You do this by identifying

the language choices you

made & offering a

rationale for your

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Look at this task:

ReadtheopeningofChapterOnefrom‘JimGallienhaddrivenfourmilesoutofFairbanks’to‘hecouldn’twaittoheadoutthereandgetstarted’.Herethewriterdescribesthemee6ngbetweenGallien,aworkingmantravellingtoAnchorage,andAlex,whoishitchhiking.Recastthisdescrip6onintoanaccountthatGallienmightgivetohiswifelaterthatevening.Youshouldwriteabout300words.Inyourtransforma6onyoushouldconsider:•Gallien’sperspec6veofthemee6ng,hisviewsonAlexandaOtudestowardstravellers•Gallien’srela6onshipwithhiswifeinthewayheconveyshisrecentexperience

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Read the student response to this.

Identify the elements which are taken from the extract.

Note that Gallien is a minor character in the book and his wife never appears at all. The son is invented by the student too.

Can you see how the student has interpreted the question?

Make a list of the things the student has done which satisfy AO5.

What would you pick out to use in the commentary?

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Read the examiner’s comment on this.

AO5Thisisacompleteandcohesivetext,whichiswhollyconvincing.Thestudentmakesuseofathirdpersonnarra6vefilteredlargelythroughtheconsciousnessofGallien,butshiSingtowardstheendforeffecttothatofhiswife.Therepresenta6onofspeechandthoughtisconvincingandoriginal,andisusedtogoodeffecttodevelopthecharactersandexploretheirrela6onship.Thestyleismaintainedthroughoutthepiece,withveryfewifanylapses.ThebasetextisusedconvincinglytocreatetheaccountthatGalliengivestohiswifeabouthismee6ngwithAlexandtoexploretheirrela6onship,theirhistory,andthesugges6onthatAlexisareminderoftheirownson.

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Look at this task:

WriteacommentaryexplainingthedecisionsyouhavemadeintransformingthebasetextforthisnewaccountandtheeffectsofreshapingKrakauer’soriginaldescrip6on.Youshouldwriteabout400words.Inyourcommentaryyoushould:•considerhowyouhaveusedlanguagetoshapeyourintendedmeaning•demonstratetheconnec6onsbetweenthebasetextandyourtransformedtext•structureyourwri6ngclearlytoexpressyourideas.

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Students should explain their own language choices and analyse their intentions in reshaping the writer’s original material.

Students develop the skills to explain the what, the how and the why of the construction of the new text, focusing on the critical decisions made to

achieve it and the adaptation of the base text. The aim is to demonstrate conceptual understanding of the choices made and the effects created, as well as demonstrating an understanding of the original

text. This might include an exploration of why the original writers made the choices in order to present characters, scenes and events and how these had

to be adapted for the student’s own text.

Read the student commentary and annotate by highlighting/underlining key areas of the text which satisfy the Aos.

Look at what the examiners say about what a commentary should do:

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Year 13

Look at this task:

ReadChapterOneofTheKiteRunner.Here,thewriterdescribesAmir’sreac6onstoRahimKhan’sphonecall.Recastthisdescrip6onintoanaccountthatRahimKhanmightgivetoaclosefriendlaterthatevening.Youshouldwriteabout300words.Inyourtransforma6onyoushouldconsider:•RahimKhan’sperspec6veofthecall,hisviewsonwhathappened•RahimKhan’srela6onshipwith,andaOtudestowards,theothercharacters

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This task would be impossible to complete now, even with Chapter 1 before you.

You need to know: • What Rahim Khan’s relationship is like with Baba, Amir, Hassan, Ali • What happens in the novel (the aftermath of the phone call is not revealed until Ch 15-18) • What Rahim Khan’s attitude is towards the events and Amir’s part in them • How Rahim Khan’s speech and thought are presented • What narrative gaps are there which you can complete

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