Unit 2 Assessment Unit 2 Assessment FeedbackFeedback

General FeedbackGeneral Feedback

Steps in the right directionSteps in the right direction• Improved structureImproved structure

Prewrite!Prewrite! Follow directionsFollow directions

• Most points were lost for this reasonMost points were lost for this reason• Hand in what you will be graded onHand in what you will be graded on

Use the outline!Use the outline! Prove your thesis!Prove your thesis!

Thesis and OutlineThesis and Outline

If you are going to give an example If you are going to give an example contrary to your thesis, you must contrary to your thesis, you must prove it wrong or incomplete.prove it wrong or incomplete.• Your job is to prove Your job is to prove your your thesis.thesis.

Use the outline provided!Use the outline provided!

StructureStructure Say what the source is and if it’s biasedSay what the source is and if it’s biased

• Paul Revere’s engraving is biased because of its Paul Revere’s engraving is biased because of its coloring, incorrect details, and title.coloring, incorrect details, and title.

Explain your examples.Explain your examples.• The colors are dark on the colonist’s side which reflects The colors are dark on the colonist’s side which reflects

their depressed mood and economic condition.their depressed mood and economic condition. EXPLAIN THE SIGNIFICANCE OF YOUR EXPLAIN THE SIGNIFICANCE OF YOUR

EXAMPLESEXAMPLES• What is the influence on the audience?What is the influence on the audience?

Because this photograph only conveys one side of Because this photograph only conveys one side of the argument, the viewer is likely to believe that the the argument, the viewer is likely to believe that the incident at Kent State was extremely violent and fight incident at Kent State was extremely violent and fight against the Vietnam War.against the Vietnam War.

Concluding SentencesConcluding Sentences

3 Jobs (not 1)3 Jobs (not 1)• Summarize what you saidSummarize what you said• Tie back to your thesisTie back to your thesis• Lead into the next paragraphLead into the next paragraph

A great place to state implications A great place to state implications too!too!

Structure of a Conclusion SentenceStructure of a Conclusion Sentence

Thus, “21 Guns” is a biased source. Thus, “21 Guns” is a biased source. If people listen to this song, they are If people listen to this song, they are led to believe that the war in Iraq is a led to believe that the war in Iraq is a disaster. Not only are songs biased, disaster. Not only are songs biased, engravings can be influenced by engravings can be influenced by humanness as well.humanness as well.

Cool DevelopmentCool Development

Stating implications in conclusion!Stating implications in conclusion!• Wow!Wow!

SpellingSpelling

TheirTheir• possessionpossession

They’reThey’re• They areThey are

ThereThere• placeplace

Places to go, people to seePlaces to go, people to see

Mr. McLaughlinMr. McLaughlin Ms. MordenteMs. Mordente Block 1- Allegra Craver (examples and Block 1- Allegra Craver (examples and

prewriting)prewriting) Block 3- Michelle Kumpf (transitions and Block 3- Michelle Kumpf (transitions and

essay structure)essay structure) Block 4- Defne Sement (conclusions, work Block 4- Defne Sement (conclusions, work

ethic)ethic) Block 5- Marina Lilieholm (essay structure Block 5- Marina Lilieholm (essay structure

and detail selection)and detail selection)