Teen Ink as a mentor text: inspiring students to revise
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Teen Ink as a Mentor Text: Inspiring Students to Revise
Teen Ink as a Mentor Text: Inspiring Students to Revise
By Lisa Bright
Damonte Ranch High School
Teen Ink as a Mentor Text: Inspiring Students to Revise
Rationale
Most teachers will acknowledge that revision is one of the most difficult aspects of
teaching the writing process. Students, as a population, are not motivated to revise and edit their
writing. They will often change a sentence or two when threatened and/or tricked by the teacher,
but many times they don’t even read their own writing before hitting the print button and turning
the paper in. We know that proficient adult writers revise their work over the course of many
drafts. However the opposite is true for most American students.
In Best Practices in Writing Instruction, Charles A. MacArthur (2007) states that young
writers and especially struggling writers typically limit their revisions to minor wording and
grammar changes. Unless directed by the teacher regarding what to look for and how to fix it,
students often do not know what types of changes to make when editing or revising. This is
where mindful, direct instruction must come into play. The question is how do teachers make
this type of instruction meaningful for students?
Connections to Common Core Standards
There are quite a few writing standards that may apply when discussing writing and revising,
however, the following three standards seem to be the best for my purpose. It is certain that
additional standards can be added bases on type of writing and skill focus.
1. W.9-10.1: Use words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections of the text, create
cohesion, and clarify the relationships between claim(s) and reasons, between reasons and
evidence, and between claim(s) and counterclaims.
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2. W.9-10.5: Use appropriate and varied transitions to link the major sections of the text,
create cohesion, and clarify the relationships among complex ideas and concepts.
3. W.9-10.5: Develop and strengthen writing as needed by planning, revising, editing,
rewriting, or trying a new approach, focusing on addressing what is most significant for a
specific purpose and audience.
Review of the Literature
Research over the past 10 years states that in order for students to become proficient at
writing, and revision they must first understand what the expectations and purpose of a writing
task are. Second, they must have specific criteria to look for in their own writing. Third, they
must know how to critically read and evaluate their own (and most likely a peer’s) writing and
fourth, must make appropriate changes and corrections (Graham, Schwartz & MacArthur, 1995).
Certainly, teaching students to evaluate their own writing using a specific set of criteria is time
well spent in the classroom (MacArthur, 2010). It is probable that some of these criteria will be
conventions and sentence fluency. It is also probable that many English and Language Arts
teachers have struggled to find the right method to teach the related skills, whether they pertain
to revising or editing. Many teachers have struggled to explain the difference between these two
skills.
Revising and Editing
Webster’s New World Dictionary defines the verb “edit” as the following: 1. to prepare
for publication 2. To revise and make ready. It defines” revise” as: 1. To read over carefully as a
manuscript, published book, etc. or, 2. To change or amend (1993). It is certain that these terms
are very similar. In his 2011 book Write Like This, Kelly Gallagher defines revising as “re-
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seeing” or “making better”. He defines editing as “making correct” (p.222). I’ve never
differentiated between the two of these terminologies in much my own classroom, because often
student’s papers are correct, for the most part, but they often lack the sentence variation and
concise language necessary to make a student’s writing honest, interesting and/or original. In
other words, a student’s writing may need to be prepared, revised, changed, and amended many
times. Gallagher concedes that a paper may be correct, but may be edited (thus revised) and this
very well may change the author’s meaning or tone entirely (2011).
One of the most challenging obstacles regarding student writing improvement is the
integration and transfer of knowledge and skills. Acknowledging this, Kelly Gallagher cites
Judith Langer’s 2002 study of 25 schools and applies these findings to his classroom methods.
Langer’s research shows that the highest performing schools were able to transfer skills they
learned in one context and apply these skills to another area--their writing (Langer, 2002).
Inspired by this study, and Jeff Anderson’s Everyday Editing (2007), Gallagher has come
up with an excellent method he calls “sentence of the week” (SoW) to help with this transfer of
skills and knowledge. His lessons support Langer’s idea of designing a “purposeful activity”
that uses student’s knowledge and skills and applies them to another context (2002). Gallagher
fuses grammar instruction, sentence practice, and sentence imitation and then asks students to
apply these skills to their own writing. He also asks students to mark on their papers where
they’ve integrated a particular skill into their writing. (See figure A).
Gallagher’s method is exciting because it encourages students to play a role in their own
learning—in other words make meanings and connections. In addition, this strategy fits the
Understanding by Design (2005) model in that it begins with the essentials skills and ends in
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assessment of mastery of these skills. Most importantly, Gallagher’s idea is an example of how
to create a meaningful and authentic activity that encourages students to evaluate their own
writing. The next step is to motivate students to move beyond the “one-and-done mentality”
when it comes to their writing (p.203).
Inquiry
How can teachers motivate students to thoroughly revise and edit their writing? My
premise is that a different type of mentor text --published teen writing--- can be used very
effectively as a resource. Students need to understand purpose or “why to write” before they buy
in (Gallagher, 2011, p.8). Furthermore, writing instruction in a genre-specific context helps
student writers understand expectations while examining what the author did well (MacArthur,
2007). Clearly, using mentor texts has been a best-practice for teachers for a few years now, but
what if some of the mentor texts weren’t “exemplar” texts? What if texts were written by
teenagers and not adult writers? In other words, what if the published writing by teens was good,
or even great writing, but still had a little room for improvement?
Elizabeth Friese, in School Library Journal (2010) recommends using internet resources
available to librarians and teachers and using these as real-world mentor texts (Friese, 2010).
However, there may be an additional untapped resource available for teachers. After seeing the
power of the online and print literary magazine for adolescents, Teen Ink, I wondered how I
could use this publication not only for publishing student’s work, but also as a mentor text and
practical revision tool. Of course, student writers are often exposed to a variety of mentor texts
which serve as examples of a particular genre of writing before becoming motivated themselves.
Perhaps I should try using relevant, real-world mentor texts to inspire my students to revise as
well?
Teen Ink as a Mentor Text: Inspiring Students to Revise
In an article on the National Writing Project website, Senior editor Art Peterson discussed
the success of Teen Ink, which is becoming known as “The New Yorker for Teens,” (Peterson,
2011). Some interesting facts about Teen Ink are: It has been around for over two decades and
has published over 55,000 works by teens; it offers publication opportunities for writers and
artists across many genres; it is not uncommon for writers to receive over 400 comments on their
pieces; teens respond to each other’s writing and authors make corrections based on these
comments and, teachers are not involved in any part of this interaction (2011). However, high
school and college educators rave about the authentic nature of an online and print magazine
designed exclusively for teens (Peterson, 2011).
The possibilities of using Teen Ink as a classroom resource are many. Pondering these
possibilities and drawing a blank, I immediately subscribed to Teen Ink’s print magazine and
printed out the teacher guidelines for usage in the classroom. And, even after reading them, I
wondered where to begin. Yes, many of my students had been published in Teen Ink over the
past 5 years; many had been voted #1 in a student poll for a few weeks, and one student had even
been included in the quarterly print version of the magazine. In my classroom, audience and
purpose had been taken care of since I began requiring students to submit their work for
publication. Unfortunately, besides reading and responding, I was out of ideas. (It was May, and
my creativity had run out.) Thankfully, one teacher’s recommendations caught my eye. This
teacher uses the essays in the magazine for discussion about a writer’s style. Students discuss
what they notice about word choice and author’s tone. This teacher and many others had great
success using Teen Ink as a revision tool classroom. (See figure B). Therefore, I decided to try
something similar. My students had been working with phrases and clauses, but hadn’t had time
for much practical application. I wanted to see what would happen if students used skills from
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previous instruction and practice and applied them to their own writing inspired by authors
published in Teen Ink. (See figures C & D).
I had students read the two articles on the general topic of Fear. (See Figure B).
Immediately, I had them do a quick, timed write responding to the article, analyzing their own
fears, other’s fears, or the concept of fear, etc. The next day, students took out all of their
resources on phrases and subordinate clauses and we looked at both Teen Ink both authors’
syntax and sentence structure (See Figures F-H). Next, students were given the task of changing
the author’s sentence beginnings by rephrasing--using 3 prepositional phrases, 3 participial
phrases, and 3 subordinate clauses. They were then asked to indicate where in the text they made
the changes and to rewrite the sentences on a separate sheet of paper. I then called on students
randomly to share one of each revised sentence. Mistakes were corrected and confusions were
cleared up and we moved on to integration of skills.
For this integration activity, students paired up to write a cheesy story. The requirements
were that each pair had to include specific sentence beginnings in their stories: six sentences had
to begin with the following: two prepositional phrases, two participial phrases, and two
subordinate clauses. I used this story to formatively assess students and I was generally pleased
with students’ grasp of these concepts.
I would have liked to have practiced more, but the end of the year had arrived and I
decided include revision on the student’s final exams. For final exam preparation, students were
told that they would be assessed on how well they revised their writing about fear. I also let them
create a post-it sized “cheat sheet” ( hoping they’d think to write down pertinent information
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about phrases and clauses) and explained that they’d be doing sentence revisions that were
similar to what we’d practiced recently in class.
Data
Having never experienced a situation like this, students responded a few ways: Some left
their first drafts at home; some didn’t make a cheat sheet and therefore were unable to revise
appropriately; some ran out of time to revise and turned in their original draft; And thankfully for
me, some revised and turned in both pieces of writing at least partially completed. (See Figures
D--F.) This being said, I considered any revision a student completed and turned in a success.
Simply getting students to apply their knowledge of phrases and clauses and integrating it into
their writing a week after direct instruction, was a milestone for me as a teacher.
In one the student samples shown in figures E & F, a student starred where she’d add in
phrases and clauses as sentence beginnings and attached the revisions on the following pages. By
doing this, she re-examined and amended her essay. For example, instead of just summarizing
what the prompt said, this student used a participial phrase and said, “Reading this article, I
could relate very personally.” She also revised the sentence “Just the scare of being faced with
the chance that you might die really makes you appreciate life a million times more.” And
revised it to: “Feeling like you might die, can give you a new outlook on life.” Were both of
these changes for the better? Not necessarily, but this student was playing with her sentences, re-
arraigning, and rephrasing. Most importantly, this student was taking grammar instruction (that
prior to this time had existing only in a simulated setting) and integrated it into her writing.
In my next student sample, the student was able to revise and rewrite her entire essay
with the addition of the phrases and clauses assigned. She used sentences like “As many of you
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may know, I’m LDS.” and “Dying or living doesn’t really worry me.” In addition, she got rid of
the cliché “What doesn’t kill you makes you stronger.” I was generally happy with these
revisions and that she too, seemed to put some genuine thought into what she was changing in
her essay.
Future Practice
I’m excited to try a more holistic approach in the future. Kelly Gallagher’s (2011)
sentence of the week (SoW) and integration of skills demonstrated in a writing portfolio is a
method I will be using immediately in my classroom. In the past, my students’ transfer of skills
from grammar instruction to their writing has been haphazard at best. Using the SoW idea will
help me organize and plan for this transfer instead of just hoping for it. The nature of the SoW
method encourages backward planning and this is something I’m continuing to work on in my
teaching practice.
Furthermore, using Teen Ink as a classroom resource will serve at least four (if not more)
purposes for learners in my classroom. First, it contains many high-interest, pieces across many
genres, that students may more willingly read than, say a newspaper. This type of exposure to
multiple genres of writing can only be beneficial to students. Second, it is an accessible mentor
text that is less intimidating than something written by an adult essayist; also, Teen Ink is filled
with authentic writing that is easy for students to imitate and build upon. And third, it is an
excellent textual resource for examining and discussing good writing-- which may then be used
as a springboard for many activities having to do with editing and revision.
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SENTENCE OF THE WEEK CHECKLIST
1. Please place a check next to the skills that can be found in your portfolio.
2. Write the page number where that skill can be found in your portfolio.
3. Highlight and number each of the skills in your portfolio.
Check
Page#
Check
Page#
1. Identify a subject and a verb.
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Figure A: SoW--Created By Kelly Gallagher
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Figure B: Teacher Guide
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Figure C: Teen Ink Mentor Texts
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Figure C: Student Revision
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Figure D-E: Student Drafts
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Figure F: Essay Draft
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Figure G: Revised Essay
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Figure H: Prepositional Phrase Resource
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Figure I: Subordinating Conjunctions/Clause Resource
articipial phrases are formed from verbs using ed or ing. (Present and Past Participial).
These phrases are used as adjectives, nouns, or adverbs.
EXAMPLES:
Eating her ice cream cone, the little girl smiled contentedly.
Exhausted from lack of water, the hiker continued his climb up the canyon.
Figure J: Participial Phrase Resource
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