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Stephanie Beniek
Malaurie Heidenescher
Albert Crichton
Julie Dix Jack (Curtis) Greene II
Ashlin Idemoto
Leilani Akana
Christian (David) Lam
Projection Cart
Valerie Lane Bryan Jason Maderas
Justin Maunupau
Carina Pelletier
Kamele Manoa
Joshua Nishimoto
Cody Okada-Krueger
Anissa Pasion
Teachers’
Hitsa Pham Courtney Piche
Charlette Joy Ragudos
Taliau (King)Tavela-Afalava
Renay Dayton-Gerona
Desk
Seating Chart (Period 2)
SEATING CHART(Period 5)
Mahlon Kapule III
Heather Corpuz
Adam Denis Preston Matteo Donato
Leonard Firme Jr.
Kristen Joy Foronda
Petrice Goto Pualani Howard
Lazarus Jove
Projection Cart
Courtney Ledesma
Arianna Lee Johnathan Lonso
Jovy Manzanares
Michael OMeally
Emily Moses Derrick Ogawa-Staples
Joshua Pangayan
Shonnel Patao-Galacgac
Marcus Sabado
Teachers’
Jonnel Santos
Keani Sayles
Miurina Soyon
Ahley Ferreira
Desk
Opening: Bell Work
Four Corners Game
How to play:
• Read the question • Decide on an answer• Move to the corner that you think is the answer
Question 1
Correct Answer: A
Explanation: This is an example of a type of error known as comma splice. You cannot use a comma to link two complete sentences: use a semicolon.
Question 2
Correct Answer: D
Explanation: Misplaced modifier. Including seems to refer to job when it should refer to steps.
Question 3
Correct Answer: C
Explanation: After a present tense in the if clause, we need a future tense in the main clause. Would should be changed to will.
Question 5
Correct Answer: C
Explanation: Change have to has because the number requires a singular verb.
Question 8
Correct Answer: A
Explanation: This is an example of a dangling modifier. It implies that coconuts were shipwrecked. To correct the sentence you could change Shipwrecked to “When he was shipwrecked.”
Question 13
Correct Answer: C
Explanation: You cannot say very unique. [Just as you cannot say more superior.]
Question 14
Correct Answer: A
Explanation: Kind is singular so we should use this or that, but not these or those.
Question 15
Correct Answer: D
Explanation: The words “do the same” are ambiguous. Change to “take early retirement” or something similar.
AgendaSeptember 2, 2010
• Objective: We will be able to… Edit our personal narratives
• Opening: Bell Work SAT prep questions
• Editing Activity• Closing: Exit Pass
Explain the changes you have made or will make to your 3rd draft.
Editing Activity
Note:
You will need your personal narrative 3rd draft
and
a colored pen other than black or blue
Group 1 Group 2 Group 3 Group 4 Group 5 Group 6
King Charlette Justin Hitsa Cody Julie
Ashlin David Malaurie Mele Anissa Bryan
Valerie Carina Renay Courtney Curtis Leilani
Joshua Stephanie Albert
Directions: Pass your personal narrative to the left.
Directions: Pass your personal narrative to the left.
Group 1 Group 2 Group 3 Group 4 Group 5 Group 6
Emily Jonnel Shonell Petrice Leonard Arianna
Marcus Mahlon Miurina Adam Courtney Joshua
Derrick Michael Kristen Preston Lance Heather
Ashley Pua John Jovy Keani
Capitalization
Search for errors in capitalization
Rule: Capitalize the first word of a quoted sentence.
Examples:
He said, "Treat her as you would your own daughter.”
"Look out!" she screamed. "You almost ran into my child."
PunctuationSearch for errors in punctuation
“Quotation Marks”
Rule: Periods and commas always go inside quotation marks, even inside single quotes.
Examples:
The sign changed from "Walk," to "Don't Walk," to "Walk" again within 30 seconds.
She said, "Hurry up."
She said, "He said, 'Hurry up.'"
Punctuation
Search for errors in punctuation
Commas,
Rule: Use a comma to separate two adjectives when the word and can be inserted between them.
Examples:
He is a strong, healthy man.
We stayed at an expensive summer resort. You would not say expensive and summer resort, so no comma.
PunctuationA comma splice is an error caused by joining two strong clauses with only a comma instead of separating the clauses with a conjunction, a semicolon, or a period.
A run-on sentence, which is incorrect, is created by joining two strong clauses without any punctuation.
Examples:
Time flies when we are having fun, we are always having fun. (comma splice)
Time flies when we are having fun we are always having fun. (run-on senstence)
Correct: Time flies when we are having fun; we are always having fun.
Time flies when we are having fun, and we are always having fun.
Time flies when we are having fun. We are always having fun.
Drafting
Based on what you’ve learned today, make changes to your 3rd draft.
Note: use a different colored pen.
Closing: Exit Pass
Explain the changes you have made and/or will make to your 3rd draft.
HW (write in your planner):
Bring a hard copy of your personal narrative final draft to class on Tuesday, Sept. 7, 2010.
typed, double-spaced, size 12 Times New Roman font
Also, draw a picture that will go with your personal narrative final draft. This is also due on Tuesday, Sept. 7, 2010
Be prepared to do a read aloud of your personal narrative. This will count as an oral presentation grade.