8/18/2019 Rubric - Descriptive Paragraph Form

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Show – don’t tell!

  Descriptive Paragraph

Global concerns Points1. Description - captures the essence of its subject using sensordetail and "showing# the reader $1% points&  '(o))ents*Okay, Bara’a. You’ve done a great job of using some concrete, sensory detail andgurative language in your subjective description of your mother.

 Your objective paragraph, however, suggests that you still don’t understandclearly the dierence between objective and subjective. !ost of the description isyour objective paragraph is subjective. "t is not a neutral description# it re$ectsvalue judgement and opinion more often rather than observation. 

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+. Paragraph – has clear direction support unit coherence, $1%points& '(o))ents*

 Your opening sentences provide some direction to your paragraph. 'ow might youhave made them stronger by providing a clearer controlling idea for eachparagraph(

 You provide a set of supporting details for each paragraph.'ow could you have established stronger coherence using logical order and

transitional signals(

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ocal concerns. (ontains careful concise language $/ points& '(o))ents*)atch out for cliche, hyperbole *language that uses e+aggeration or is over-and $u, likea precious gift from /od,- " love her more than anything-)ork on showing rather than telling0 how could you show that she is responsible,good, well1dressed(

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0. Shows a clear grasp of nglish gra))ar spelling andpunctuation $/ points& '(o))ents*3lease double space4

)ork on correct use of pronouns, word forms and eliminating run1ons. You willneed to do some intensive work on your own to get up to speed with yourgrammar, Bara’a. Begin with the posting on 5itaj 6+tra 'elp with 7entence7tructure- *88 October for guidance. "f you need further help, please see me orcontact me via 5itaj.3lease keep one1inch margins on both sides of your paper.

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