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Revising From Wide Shot to Close Up
Part 2: Medium Shots
Wide Shot to Close Up review
Wide shot = big picture
Medium shot = paragraphs
Close shot = sentences
We’ve already practiced revising from the wide shot
Here’s a quick review:
For wide shot (big picture) revising, consider:Did you answer the essay prompt question(s) correctly and thoroughly?
Did you remain focused on answering the prompt question(s) throughout your entire essay?
Let’s quickly review how directors use wide, medium and close shots to tell a story
Here’s short clip of the opening scene from Ray (2004) directed by Taylor Hackford
Here’s short clip of the opening scene from The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly (1967) directed by Sergio Leone
Now let’s transition to medium shots and learn about how you can use them to “direct” your writing
Medium Shot (Paragraphs)Does each paragraph remain focused on one topic?
Because this is a research essay, the topic is usually a single source.
Example:
In your evaluation essay, does each paragraph focus on how well a single source answered your question and/or the strengths and weaknesses of a single source?
Only the transition/intro paragraph should deviate from this focus.
Let’s take a look at an example paragraph and see if we can revise to make it a strong medium shot in the student’s “movie”
Two quick reminders:
1 - We know the student’s research question is "What are the effects of teen suicide and how can it be prevented?"
2 - We’ve read the abstract of the source the author evaluates in the example paragraph
Let’s break this paragraph down line by line, then we’ll decide how to revise
So let’s think about the big patterns we noticed
Patterns:
Plenty of information about the source’s content
Some digressions into personal opinion
Good evaluation, but not always 100% clear
Before you revise in groups, think about the essay prompt
Prompt (excerpt):
The main purpose of this Essay is to evaluate the arguments made in your sources. By “evaluate,” I mean that you should offer a critical opinion on them (evaluate their strengths and weaknesses).
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
The two big tasks for this essay were:Which sources offer the best answers to your research question? Why? How?
Point out strengths and weaknesses in your sources.
see: http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
Now that we’ve broken down the essay, get into your learning groups and try to revise the paragraph so it stays on topic and fulfills the essay prompt
When you’re done revising, we’ll look at each group’s work
We’ll choose two and put them in the slideshow, which I’ll re-post on the blog and Canvas (I’ll tweet a link as well)
View this slideshow on the blog (using the slideshare viewer) at the blog here:http://eng102isfun.blogspot.com/2013/09/essay-2.html
note to self: have actual link above when it’s finished
You can also download it from the blog or Canvas and find a link on the class twitter feed