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Jenna Price

Mrs. Caruso

ENGL1101

30 October 2011

Genre Recreation

The iPhone is very popular and several people may not know what the device is capable

of doing. It is a highly intelligent piece of technology that needs very little improvement. When

asked to change the iPhone 4 to a different genre it was a struggle because the iPhone 4 appears

to be perfect. It seemed smart to recreate the iPhone into a text that presented itself to be just as

smart, if not smarter.

For the genre recreation, the iPhone 4 is a GPS. This presentation will not present the

GPS, as well as the iPhone, and will advertise the iPhone by having the same characteristics as

the GPS. It will be able to do the exact same thing as the iPhone, but the GPS part is highlighted

making it the main topic. The things a GPS is capable of doing makes it almost as smart as the

smartphone. Simply type in an address to the desired destination and depend on the GPS to get

you there in the least amount of time possible. The GPS allows you to choose your desired

routes, or it can be programed to always take you the quickest route. The GPS is smart enough

to detect heavy traffic and reroute to a faster direction. For someone who attends a particular

vacation spot often, but still struggles to learn the directions; type in the address one time to your

intelligent GPS, press “add to favorites” and the address will never have to be typed in again. On

every GPS there is a “home” button. Program the GPS to your home address and no matter the

location, press the “home” button and the GPS will go straight back home. Young people need

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Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:11 PMComment [1]: Take  this  out.  You  should  not  include  references  to  your  other  assignments.  

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to become more knowledgeable about what exactly a GPS is capable of doing and how important

it is to have one. Therefore, more attention needs to be brought to this talented device.

With a GPS, getting lost is no such thing. The GPS presented in the short story will

contain all of the same features that the iPhone 4 has except for the main function will be to give

direction instead of a device to make phone calls. It will be quite smaller than your normal sized

GPS and come in many different colors. This is brought to the audience’s attention because the

iPhone can only be bought in black or white. This GPS that will be presented is the same size of

an iPhone 4.

The GPS is going to be presented through a short story. Dan, a young boy who just

received his license, will receive a GPS for his sixteenth birthday. His parents struggled with

what brand of GPS they should buy for Dan or if they should even buy one at all. Dan’s parents

debate on whether or not he will value the GPS and actually use it or if it will be a waste of their

money,A friend of the family recommended they buy one of his old GPS’ that he had in the

basement before buying a brand new one, just to make sure Dan will truly use his GPS. Dan’s

parents thought that was a brilliant idea.

Dan is supposed to be attending a school event while all of his friends take off to the

beach for spring break. Dan has no ordinary GPS. This particular GPS begins to speak to Dan

and carry on a conversation. Dan is a bit freaked out at first. This GPS reads Dan’s mind and

reroutes him to the beach! Slowly, Dan starts to figure out he can just tell the GPS where to go

without typing in the address. Whether Dan is in a hurry or not, the GPS will already know!

Dan tries multiple times to show his friends the “talking” GPS, but of course he looks somewhat

dumb because the GPS will only speak for Dan. Eventually, Dan and his GPS become extremely

close. It becomes a huge ordeal when Dan’s parents try to buy him a brand new GPS.

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Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:16 PMComment [6]: Rather  than  concentrating  on  the  features  of  a  GPS  in  your  defense,  work  on  discussing  how  the  GPS  technology  is  featured  in  the  short  story.  Jenna Price� 12/6/11 1:31 PMDeleted: A

Jenna Price� 12/6/11 1:31 PMDeleted: The boys name is Dan.

Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:17 PMComment [7]: Rather  than  beginning  with  summary,  work  to  begin  your  paragraphs  with  your  main  ideas.  Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:17 PMComment [8]: Combine  these  ideas.  

Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:18 PMComment [9]: This  paragraph  is  mostly  summary.  Split  up  this  paragraph  according  to  idea  so  you  can  discuss  each  at  length.  

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Using a short story to portray the idea of the GPS would be more efficient because it

would grasp the attention of the audience, making them more interested about the topic. By using

a short story, the many ideas about the GPS can be creative and make the situation more

enjoyable. Imagination is unlimited within a short story and the story can be fictional. You are

really able to branch out and show creativity. The main audience for this short story is middle

school and high school students. This is the chosen audience because they will just start to

become familiar with driving if they haven’t already. The short story should be to their

advantage. This short story will help students learn the importance of a GPS and become

familiar with the features of one while providing entertainment as well.

The TomTom is an extremely popular GPS in today’s society. Through personal

experiences, the TomTom does not seem to give accurate directions. The fact that the directions

are not given very accurately helped with the idea of what the short story is going to be about.

The purpose behind the short story pertains to the GPS being somewhat unreliable. The short

story is intended to be funny and of course, fiction. The GPS in the short story gives very

accurate directions, but it might not necessarily be where you need to go. This very rare GPS

reads minds and tends to carry on a conversation! Like I mentioned before, the GPS will have

all of the features that the iPhone has, including making a phone call and playing games! The

intentions that are expected of the short story is to let the students know that they can never get

lost and how important it is to own a GPS.

The viewers should expect to become more knowledgeable in knowing about a GPS

when they finish reading the short story. They will also gain knowledge in the iPhone and learn

how the features in the iPhone and the GPS are the same. Anyone who reads this short story

should not expect every GPS to be like the one in the story. In reality, a GPS cannot read your

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mind and reroute you to where you really want to go without typing in the actual address. It

would be extremely cool if a GPS could read minds, but that could result in a problem for some

people. They could be thinking about somewhere they would like to go, but not necessarily want

to show up at that specific place! Hopefully, the audience is extremely entertained throughout

the reading of this short story. As mentioned above, the story will not represent a normal GPS

because it will be able to talk and read minds. The rules are going to be somewhat bent.

Therefore, the story is not going to be a true story.

The advantage of presenting this new genre will help students become familiar with ways

that they can actually get around if they are not good with directions. As expected, students who

receive their license do not realize that they may not know the way to their local walmart. A

GPS will seriously save them from getting lost (if they use it correctly). A disadvantage of this

short story would be if a student is aware of a GPS and cannot afford one. That could be a bit of

a challenge for the student to face. A GPS tends to be very high tech and expensive. It takes a

lot of patience to learn how to work one. Another disadvantage with writing a short story is not

knowing if it will really catch the readers attention. It is very likely for the audience to become

bored with the story and not see the true point behind the short story, which is to teach people the

importance of a GPS. Many people already own or know everything about a GPS. This would

not help the outcome of the short story because no one would be interested in reading it. They

would already know everything they needed to know about the GPS.

In all honestly, this short story is going to really help some newly experienced drivers

who get lost often. It is going to be a fun way of learning and that is what’s important. Whether

or not a lot of people will gain knowledge from this story cannot be determined. What is known

is that someone somewhere will gain something to his or her advantage after reading this story.

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Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:21 PMComment [13]: Rather  than  focusing  on  you  at  the  end  of  your  paper,  focus  on  the  main  idea  of  your  defense.  Beth Caruso� 11/14/11 8:26 PMComment [14]: Jenna,    You  have  a  great  short  story,  and  you  certainly  work  toward  presenting  your  ideas  well  in  your  defense  paper.  In  order  to  streamline  those  ideas,  I  would  suggest  that  you  work  to  take  out  any  unnecessary  information,  combine  sentences,  and  keep  your  paragraphs  focused.  This  will  help  you  convey  your  ideas  in  a  more  succinct  manner,  and  it  will  also  help  you  find  different  ways  to  incorporate  transitions.  Let  me  know  if  you’d  like  any  help  with  your  revisions.  I’m  looking  forward  to  seeing  what  you’ll  do  in  your  portfolio!    -­‐Ms.  C  

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