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REAL REVISION:
Sharing Authors’
Strategies with Students
http://www.katemessner.com
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Revision should not be a
surprise.
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Assignment:
Write for one minute, describing a place that you love.
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WHAT REVISION ISN’T…
Spell Checking Hiring a professional editor Solitary A process with a single
correct solution or end point
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WHAT REVISION IS
BrainstormingFree-Writing(and maybe
starting over)
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Princess Marty Frog-Slimeand the
Nutcracker Ballet
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Confessions of a Sea Monster
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“Well…This is funny. But it sounds more
like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for
kids.”
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Draft 1
Draft 2
Draft 3
Draft 4
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Time to
Write!Sometimes poem…
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Time to
Write!Sometimes poem…
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WHAT REVISION IS
Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
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This book is about _________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
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My book is about a figure skater from a small-town maple farm who earns a scholarship to train with the elite in Lake Placid & discovers a world of mean girls on ice.
But underneath that, it’s really about making a decision to follow your own dreams instead of the dreams that are chosen for you.
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My book is about a future world where killer tornadoes are widespread and four kids at a science camp who are trying to stop them but discover a terrifying secret.
But underneath that, it’s really about using your powers for good.
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This paper is about _________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
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If your poem/essay/personal narrative/ research paper could talk back to you right now, what would it say?
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WHAT REVISION IS
Charts, maps, timelines, & outlines
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More Ideas…
• Map the setting – note important events
• Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling
action• Outline (after writing) to
identify weak chapters
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WHAT REVISION IS
Considering all five senses.
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Time to
Revise!Sometimes poem…
Add SMELLS
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WHAT REVISION IS
Returning to Research
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WHAT REVISION IS
Details and Word Choice
Be specific.Be surprising.
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Look for delicious details
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Look for delicious details
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Google Maps – Street View
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Role Play!Replace Tired Body
Language
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** Role Play! Replace Tired Body
Language
ANGRYFRUSTRATED
ANXIOUSSCARED
JOYFUL-EXCITEDDEPRESSED
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WHAT REVISION IS
Being a Word Ninja
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veryreallyjustthat
“what looked like”
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JUSTANDRATHERBEGAN TOAS THOUGHTHENBUT ALWAYS
GLANCEDIN THAT MOMENTSO A BITI GUESSMAYBETHATVERY REALLY
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Watch for “pet” stories, ideas,
themes, phrases…
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Brainstorm: What words,
phrases, & pet stories are on your personal
“MOST WANTED” list?
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Time to Revise!
***Sometimes poem… Cut at least 20 words
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WHAT REVISION ISBeing Social
-Critique Groups/Partners
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Post-It Note Critiques
ORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!”
GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
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WHAT REVISION IS
Making Lists……and getting to
work!
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Five Reasons Kids Don’t Want to
Revise(and what teachers
can do about it)
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REASON #1
“But I just FINISHED. And I
like my paper the way it is.”
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SOLUTION:
Start the revision conversation
early.
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After We Write…
REVISION – PART I REVISION – PART 2 REVISION – PART 3
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REASON #2
“I already ran a spell check. I’m
good.”
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SOLUTION:
Teach students the difference
between revising and editing.
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REASON #3
“I don’t know where to start.”
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SOLUTION:
Have a revision checklist ready…
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Student Critique Partners• Trade papers with a partner•Use highlighters to indicate the following:• Pink = Consider cutting this part.• Green = I’m confused now.• Orange = Use more vivid details/precise language.
• Yellow = This part works really well!•In the margin next to each color (or on a Post-It note), write a note explaining your highlighting and making suggestions.
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REASON #4
“Everybody says I’m a great writer.
Great writers don’t need to
revise.”
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SOLUTION:
Use published authors as role
models, through text examples and
Skype visits.
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GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS?
14!
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REAL REVISION:
Sharing Authors’
Strategies with Students
http://www.katemessner.com