RE-envisioning your writing

RE-envisioning your writing

Dialogue, Complication and RevisionDialogue, Complication and Revision

A love storyA love story

A Medical MetaphorA Medical Metaphor

Revision is NOT something that is exclusive to English class.

Revision is NOT something that is exclusive to English class.

What is this picture?What is this picture?

Gastric/Duodenal UlcersGastric/Duodenal Ulcers

Originally diagnosed as a result of too much acid.

Patients forced to stop eating citrus and chocolate, stop drinking coffee and OJ, stay away from tomatoes and allow their “bowels to rest.”

Those suffering bleeding were destined for surgery if antacids failed

Originally diagnosed as a result of too much acid.

Patients forced to stop eating citrus and chocolate, stop drinking coffee and OJ, stay away from tomatoes and allow their “bowels to rest.”

Those suffering bleeding were destined for surgery if antacids failed

Thus, Peptic Ulcer disease was treated like this for decades.

Then, in the late 1980s and early 1990s, medical practice started to perform upper endoscopies (EGD_esophago-gastro-doudenoscopy)

Doctors noticed a strange organism in many of those suffering the disease – enter helicobacter pylori

Thus, Peptic Ulcer disease was treated like this for decades.

Then, in the late 1980s and early 1990s, medical practice started to perform upper endoscopies (EGD_esophago-gastro-doudenoscopy)

Doctors noticed a strange organism in many of those suffering the disease – enter helicobacter pylori

Through a stroke of luck and intrigue, doctors noticed that if this assumed benign organism was killed in those suffering the disease, there was no reoccurrence of the condition.

This leads to fewer operations; less cost;fewer infections and deaths

SO WHAT???

Through a stroke of luck and intrigue, doctors noticed that if this assumed benign organism was killed in those suffering the disease, there was no reoccurrence of the condition.

This leads to fewer operations; less cost;fewer infections and deaths

SO WHAT???

The REVISEDREVISED medical concept is that ulcer diseases are, in part, bacterial infections and not dependent upon ingestion of acidic foods

The REVISEDREVISED medical concept is that ulcer diseases are, in part, bacterial infections and not dependent upon ingestion of acidic foods

Need more convincing?Need more convincing?

Cervical Cancer was once thought to be random or genetically determined and a result of an abnormal accumulation of cells

PAP smears became the answer for catching the cancer earlier than later. That was the only answer

By the 1990s, research suggested a potential correlation between HPV and cervical cancer

Cervical Cancer was once thought to be random or genetically determined and a result of an abnormal accumulation of cells

PAP smears became the answer for catching the cancer earlier than later. That was the only answer

By the 1990s, research suggested a potential correlation between HPV and cervical cancer

By 2007-08, an HPV vaccine (Guardasil) became commercially available to women

Research suggests vaccinating against HPV should result in fewer cases of cervical cancer

SO WHAT???

By 2007-08, an HPV vaccine (Guardasil) became commercially available to women

Research suggests vaccinating against HPV should result in fewer cases of cervical cancer

SO WHAT???

The REVISEDREVISED medical concept is that cancer in some cases is associated with viral infection ANDAND by preventing the viral infection you can

prevent the cancer – in short, a vaccine against cancer

The REVISEDREVISED medical concept is that cancer in some cases is associated with viral infection ANDAND by preventing the viral infection you can

prevent the cancer – in short, a vaccine against cancer

By Continually revising, we have the opportunity to beneficially complicate our work. When done well, this results in a more expanded,

or understood, idea/concept. When you revise your writing, you are simply working to expand (improve via modification) the concept you

are addressing. In theory, these complications or expansions yield better products.

By Continually revising, we have the opportunity to beneficially complicate our work. When done well, this results in a more expanded,

or understood, idea/concept. When you revise your writing, you are simply working to expand (improve via modification) the concept you

are addressing. In theory, these complications or expansions yield better products.

The Twitter Version: Revision makes things The Twitter Version: Revision makes things better.better.

How to go about Revision?How to go about Revision?

The #1 way is to incorporate source material

The #1 way to do that is to use and cite source material

When you work with source material, you enrich your argument/presentation

The #1 way is to incorporate source material

The #1 way to do that is to use and cite source material

When you work with source material, you enrich your argument/presentation

Citing APA StyleCiting APA Style

One-stop shop for online reference to APA style:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/01/

Science and mathematics tend to refer to more than quote from directly. Learn how to refer to studies to help bolster your own argument

Citing is a means of showing engagement within your field – A means to Dialogue with your published peers

One-stop shop for online reference to APA style:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/01/

Science and mathematics tend to refer to more than quote from directly. Learn how to refer to studies to help bolster your own argument

Citing is a means of showing engagement within your field – A means to Dialogue with your published peers

When to use source reference or citation: Whenever an idea is not your own.

Source citation is a guidepost for your readers. Help them out.

When to use source reference or citation: Whenever an idea is not your own.

Source citation is a guidepost for your readers. Help them out.

At the beginning: According to Jerry Blahblah (1999), vitamin D causes freckles.

At the end: Vitamin D causes freckles, at least according to a study by Jerry Blahblah (Blahblah, 1999).

In the middle: While many stores still sell controversial homeopathic medicines – like vitamin D causing freckles (Blahblah, 1999, p. 342) – others have been scared away by the hype.

Each one of these helps your writing in different waysEach one of these helps your writing in different ways

At the beginning: According to Jerry Blahblah (1999), vitamin D causes freckles.

At the end: Vitamin D causes freckles, at least according to a study by Jerry Blahblah (Blahblah, 1999).

In the middle: While many stores still sell controversial homeopathic medicines – like vitamin D causing freckles (Blahblah, 1999, p. 342) – others have been scared away by the hype.

Each one of these helps your writing in different waysEach one of these helps your writing in different ways

Citation ExamplesCitation Examples

Helpful Road Signs or Lead-InsHelpful Road Signs or Lead-Ins

According to . . .

As presented by . . .

In a study that dealt with . . .*

Some studies have suggested . . .*

While ( ) has found that _________, there have been many studies suggesting otherwise.

There are so many different waysThere are so many different ways

According to . . .

As presented by . . .

In a study that dealt with . . .*

Some studies have suggested . . .*

While ( ) has found that _________, there have been many studies suggesting otherwise.

There are so many different waysThere are so many different ways

Ways to Get StartedWays to Get Started

Re-read each paragraph. If there is no source engagement, ask “Should there be or could there be?”

Look at your use of terminology. Is it generically understood? If NOT, put in source citation or reference

You want to use as much terminology as is reasonable: Doing so identifies you with the field of knowledge.

Re-read each paragraph. If there is no source engagement, ask “Should there be or could there be?”

Look at your use of terminology. Is it generically understood? If NOT, put in source citation or reference

You want to use as much terminology as is reasonable: Doing so identifies you with the field of knowledge.

Ways to Get Started, Continued

Ways to Get Started, Continued

Gloss your paper, write in your margins, track comments to yourself, read out loud

READ OUT LOUD

READ OUT LOUD

Oh, and try READING OUT LOUD. As you read out loud, note the spots you have trouble with while reading

Gloss your paper, write in your margins, track comments to yourself, read out loud

READ OUT LOUD

READ OUT LOUD

Oh, and try READING OUT LOUD. As you read out loud, note the spots you have trouble with while reading

Science is super Science is super cool.cool.

Science is super Science is super cool.cool.

In science and In science and math, you have math, you have

graphics.graphics.

In science and In science and math, you have math, you have

graphics.graphics.

In academic writing, those graphics can In academic writing, those graphics can translate into paragraphstranslate into paragraphs

In academic writing, those graphics can In academic writing, those graphics can translate into paragraphstranslate into paragraphs

Use them to your advantage as Use them to your advantage as textstexts

Use them to your advantage as Use them to your advantage as textstexts

AddendumAddendum

Sentence length

format

organization (you use a good set up already)

Passive vs. Active in science and math

Sentence length

format

organization (you use a good set up already)

Passive vs. Active in science and math