Objective:

To plan your descriptive writing controlled assessment

• Identifying our current grade and how we will take the next step

• Marking a piece of work and feeding back to the student

• Selecting our titles and unpicking the scenes for ourselves

What’s the next step?

1. Look at ALL your feedback from me this year

2. Using the purple pen, answer this question: based on your targets, how will you guarantee that you achieve your target grade in your descriptive writing?

CHALLENGE: analyse your target grade on the marksheet- where’s your area of weakness?

Big Picture

We are working on our

descriptive writing skills

• There are a number of key skills we need to develop

1. Using the senses2. Similes and

Personification3. Describing

feelings4. Zooming in and

out of a scene: planning

5. Using a variety of sentences

New title: Bringing a Scene to Life

You have been given one of two pieces of description.

These are real pieces of work from the coursework titles that you will be working with!

TASK:

What grade would you give it?

Highlight the good points in blue and the bad points in red

Feed back to the student at the end using the DIY LEARNING wall

Your titles (four paras at least)

• The scene in a busy supermarket• The scene in a railway or bus station• The scene at a funfair• The scene on a beach in the summer• The scene in a school playground at

the beginning of the morning

Sounds? Smells?

Sights?Metaphors?

Openers?

Personification?

Feelings?

Small

details?

Zooming

Out?

Vocabulary?

Stage 1:

Stage 2: Use the grid method to pick out the four key aspects you want to describe

Stage 3: With the person next to you, write the topic sentence of each paragraph

Home Learning

•Due thursday