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locutionissue 2
Locution Magazine strives to become a platform from which new
writers gain valuable experience and credit in the publishing world,
by providing new writers with access to a respectable publishing
opportunity.
Good writing is no guarantee of being published, and being pub-
lished is no guarantee of good writing; there is an unnecessary bar-
rier between those who create and those whose writing becomesrecognized. We feel that this inconsistency is detrimental to creative
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fer a passionate, active community of writers, as well as a plethora
of resources to assist in the creative process.
Locution Magazine strives to recognize and foster the ingenuity,constancy, and beauty of poetry and prose that are essential to the
creative spirit.
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Dear Reader,
Welcome to the second issue of the Locution magazine.
These last eight months have been a dificult, but rewarding
experience for us. We have put countless hours into promoting,developing, discussing, and improving ourselves and our work.
What sits in front of you now is the result of all that effort. It is the
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Our forums grow more active every day. Our IRC channel constantly
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the greatest strides were certainly taken in the community. Weve
invited new members, received new works, and consolidated our
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We have our share of disagreements, but in the end we all look
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With that, I present to you the second issue of the Locution
magazine, featuring prose, poetry, and art from an international
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Yours truly,
James ZhaoManaging Editor
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I almost time for you to break up with me. I can tellbecause youre already beginning to play the games girls playwhen they want to break up. Youre not sitting next to me in the car. I
grip the steering wheel a bit harder and edge the accelerator toward
the loor. The trafic on the highway is a bit heavy, but youre the only
reason I grind anger between my teeth while weaving in and out of
trafic. I want you over here by me.
I recall the night after the big dance. My irst date with you, andthe irst time you sat next to me in the car. I was driving the speed
limit then, to waste a bit more time before you had to be home. The
1970 Ford Torino, which I lovingly referred to as The Wafle Mobile
in homage to the innumerable dents it had received in my more
unlikable moments, had big beautiful bench seats. The perfect thing
for an eligible teenager in high school, this having been discovered
after my dad had explained the positive effect a bench seat could
have on the male ego while driving down the street with one hand
on the wheel and the other around your beautiful sweetheart. That
night I had relayed to you, in not so masculine terms, the advantages
of a bench seat. You giggled like honey and held me in a full embrace
for the rest of the drive home. Then you kissed me; irst on the cheek,
and after a moments anticipation, lip to lip.
Hugs and KissesDale Warkenten
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Since then, everywhere we went, you sat right next to me in the
car, but now you sit with your hair lying out the passenger window.
I mash the accelerator so I can dust some poor lunky in a Yugo. I
cant believe youre denying me this simple pleasure. I turn to look at
you, your brown hair beats violently in the wind, and the sun makesyour naturally bronze skin seem a bit darker. Shelly, how bout you
scoot over?
You respond to me with the straightness of your brown hair, No,
I dont want to, Rick. And slow down, your driving scares me.
Your cold response sends a chill up my spine, like the time I
unknowingly kissed you in front of your parents. Why wont you sit
by me? I ask as I swerve amazingly close to a slower car. Is there
something wrong? Im trying to look calm, but Im getting so madthat I want to scream as loudly as the time when you left me without
kissing me.
Upon witnessing an unfortunate accident with my car, your
parents escorted you back to your house before I even had a chance
to comfort you. I was so mad at my car. There was always something
wrong with it. I wanted to make it feel sorry for what it had done to
me, so I kicked the fender and made another large dent in it.
The resurfaced memory makes me want to scream even more.Just another missed opportunity with you. I look over to you
expectantly. But instead of making me happy, you make the next play
in the break up game by asking if Im mad at you. First you distance
yourself from me, and then you try to make me mad at you so that I
will break a promise.
You think I forgot, but I still remember. You had been waiting for
me to get my car running. I lost my temper. I wanted to take you out,
but I was running out of time and no matter what I did, my stupid carrefused to run. I reached the limit of my tolerance, and you watched
in horror as I pounded relentlessly on various parts of my car. After I
calmed down a bit, you asked me if I would ever get that mad at you.
I promised with all my heart that I never would, no matter what you
would do to make me angry. You made me promise twice, and then
braved the grease and kissed me.
So now, as I sit idling at the top of the exit ramp waiting for the
light to change, you know that if you can make me mad, I will have
broken my promise to you and youll have the excuse you need to
break up with me. I peal out just before the light turns green and the
thick smoke rolling from the wheel wells blows sheet-white anger
into my rearview mirror.
But I answer your question cool and slow: Why would I be mad
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at you? as I whip sideways around the corner and speed up your
street.
You brace yourself expectantly for a quick stop in front of your
house and say, Youre mad because I was late for you to pick me up
today. I just got caught up with Margie.I let my anger escape with a sigh and reply honestly, No, Im not
mad at you for being late.
We used to hang out after school in the spare bedroom with theTV in it until it was time for me to go to work at the grocerystore down the street from your parents house. But now youre
ignoring me as I sit here in the living room on the couch, and watch
you play Tetris. I hate Tetris, and I know you know that but you insiston wasting all the precious time that I have before I go to work,
sitting way over there on the loor, staring at that mindless game.
In order to regain your attention, I reach across the arm of the
couch and visually measure the distance from my ingers to your
bare bronze neck, like a snake coiling for attack. I strike and wriggle
my two ingers into the leshy part of your neck as though trying to
inject venom. Tickle, tickle, tickle.
You brush me away like a gnat. Stop that! Rrrahh, you made melose my game!
I remember when you used to laugh that off, but now youre
serious. I sit back on the couch and watch you restart the game. You
resituate yourself on the loor and let your brain go to mush, and I
have to go to work soon.
There was a time when nothing could remove your attention
from me. Not even your brother, who was more nosy than his own
good would account for, when he sat wide-eyed in the few inches youhad inadvertently left the door open. I got up and walked out to the
hall. I opened the door and grabbed him before he had a chance to
get away. I had him by the ankles, so I just turned him upside down
and carried him into his own room.
This had the unexpected result of causing him sheer joy, and he
asked me to do it again as he squealed. So, I promised him that I
would hang him upside down any time he wanted as long as he didnt
bother us anymore. When I came back, you pulled me back onto the
futon, nothing but smiles, told me how sweet I was for playing with
your brother, and asked me where we had left off.
I speak without thinking, reveling in the memory, I love you,
Shelly.
But you reply without feeling. Me too.
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Cold reality sets in. I have to go to work now.
Okay, Ill see you later. You lash me a grin, blow a kiss at the air
and hug your controller.
Can I see you tonight? I search for the answer in your eyes and
see enough hope to cause my heart to lutter.Well, me and Margie...
I speak in a huff without thinking. Margie and I.
Were going to see a movie at seven.
Seven oclock?! Oh great, thats perfect, thanks for tellin me. For
a brief moment I think I see triumph in your eyes, but if it was ever
there, you have covered it up with hurt, so I add, Well, Ill see if I can
get off early; this job is driving me nuts anyway.
I dont want you going if youre gonna be that way about it. Withthat, you turn your attention back to your Tetris game and remain
silent.
I have a nearly overwhelming urge to give your cat lying lessons,
but I defer to slamming the door on my way out.
After three rings, a timid familiar voice chimes, Hello?Hey Margie, whatcha doin answering the Foltons phone?I say with a teasing lilt, knowing that Margie is as much a familymember as Shelly.
She giggles. Because I knew it was you. Hows your life been
lately?
Dont ask. Is Shelly there?
With a dramatic gasp and mocking tears, she replies, You mean
to tell me that youd rather talk to her than me?
My masculine laugh peals through the phone, giving me
conidence. Not even. I would much rather talk to you right now;however, as Fate would have it, I need to talk to Shelly.
Well, ine then. Just a minute: shes up in her room. I hear the
phone hit the table.
I can hear you coming from across the room even though you are
walking on carpet, and I inger my bat, preparing myself to make a
play on offense in your little game.
Finally, I am lifted until you say, Hello. I thought you were
supposed to be at work. You sound as though you were forcing
every word through your teeth.
Play ball! Well, lets just say, I got off early. It was a bad day.
You shouldnt have done that.
The wind up. Never mind, thats not the point. Whatre you doin
tonight?
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I told you that I was going out with Margie.
The pitch. I have to see you.
Why?
I need to be careful now in order to keep you from realizing that
Im calling the shots in the game now. If I make one little mistake,youll realize that I intend to break up with you and you will throw
an out before I have a chance to score. Women always do. I cant talk
about it now, but I really would like to see you tonight.
Your silence is back dropped by the radio as you pause for your
response. I have to talk to Margie, lemme call you back.
Strike!
Ibrought you out to the ive-by-ive platform my parents call theback porch and gathered you in my arms both to give you thechance to redeem yourself and to make the pain of breaking up
easier on you.
You squirm a little in my protecting arms as if you were a newborn
pup, unaware that its master was only trying to comfort it and say, I
think youd better let go.
While recovering from being caught off-balance by such a cutting
remark, I realize that I had made a big mistake by bringing the gameback into play. Then, to put a capstone on game day, you make a
home run by telling me that you would much rather we be friends.
So what now? Im still holding you in my arms, but I dont know
why. I lean my head back against the black wrought-iron railing and
feel the cold of the metal. The breeze tousles my hair and I remember
being in midair and holding my little action-igure equipped with a
parachute. I used to be able to squeeze between these iron bars and
I would jump, holding my action-igure tightly, from the porch intothe sandbox below, rejoicing in watching the parachute open and ill
with air.
I dont know, but I think you need to let go of me so I can go
home, Rick.
My thoughts chatter and somehow I explain to you that I would
be willing to accept the challenge of forming a friendship with you
as I remind myself that I promised I wouldnt get mad at you for any
reason. Ejected for throwing at the batter.
The passing bell rings and I leap for the door. I have to be the irstone out of class so I can get to your locker while youre still there.Youve been getting better at avoiding me, and if I dont hurry I wont
be able to see you and Ill have to wait until after English.
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I turn the corner, and I can see you just down the hall, standing by
your locker. Youre talking to Margie, and I walk by so I can see you.
I decide to say hello only to Margie to make you mad. Margie grins
at me and blushes as I near your locker. I get within earshot when I
hear you accusing Margie of being dumb.My anger explodes, and I feel like Ive grown to twice my size
as I grab both of your arms hard, and say, What did you just call
Margie?
I... But, no...
Who the hell do you think you are? Im beginning to attract
attention, so I realize I must be quick about inishing. First you
break up with me, and now youre degrading your best friend? How
can you live with yourself? I ind myself pressing your shouldersagainst the locker. There you are, inches from my face, and for the
irst time I cant read whats going on in your eyes.
I can nearly see my entire relection framed within your pupil,
and the baleen of your iris presses my anger into the back of my
brain with a whirling vortex of green. Then, nothing else exists but
your lips, and I know what to do now. I reassert my grip and move
a bit closer. I have to steal it now. First, tenderly, then with more
pressure. I know you like it even though youre struggling.I release you and step back. See, thats what its like. Now you
know how everyone else feels when you take what you want and
walk away. I turn and walk away and wave to Mr. Malcom, my
baseball coach, as I turn the corner to the main hall.
Ithink about you as I dial the number, and each tone delivers acrushing blow to your pride. With great effort, I push the greenaway; I must try not to sound too excited, or Ill blow everything.The phone begins to ring: once for every week since the incident
at your locker. Im about to hang up; the fourth ring means that the
answering machine might answer and I cant leave a message. In
resignation, Im beginning to accept the fact that you have won the
game when I hear the voice which will seal my victory over you.
Hello?
I pause, drawing little lines in the dust on the table, as if strip-
mining for silver, while I search for the right words. Hey Margie,
whats up? Long time no see huh?
Rick?
Yeah. Whacha been up to? My relexes snatch a ly in midair
and toss it to the loor, stunning it.
Nothin. Whereve you been?
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Just sittin here thinkin bout you. I reach for the fallen ly and
rip its wings off so that I can watch it walk around in the dust before
I kill it.
A girlish giggle wiggles through the phone line and tickles my
ears, strengthening what I already knew to be true. Thats funny,Ive been thinking about you too, Rick.
Cool. Ive been meaning to tell you how much you mean to me
for a long time now. I just never felt like the time was as right as it
is now, because until now things just havent been working in our
favor. I really like you a lot; I was just hoping that you might have
feelings for me. Silence is the only response, so I know that I have
to make my inal move. I squash the ly as it nears the edge of the
table and take a deep breath to prepare. Im sorry, maybe this wasthe wrong thing to do. Look, Ill just let you go; I guess I understand
if you dont want to talk to me.
No... wait.
I begin to draw concentric circles around the dead ly like a
target, What?
I didnt mean for you to take it that way, I... I was just caught by
surprise, is all.
Im sorry.No, its okay. I just needed a few seconds to sort things out.
Okay. I grab a napkin and vigorously wipe the ly remains off
the table.
I would love to go out with you sometime. In fact, I wish you
would have asked me a long time ago.
Great! Okay, well, Ill see you in school tomorrow, and well set a
time and call it a date. Okay?
Okay.See you tomorrow, Margie. The clean spot on the table leaves
me wishing I had more dust to draw lines in.
See ya.
I beam with pride as I return the phone to its cradle. I have won
the game by taking your best friend from you, and shell make up for
the hugs and kisses you refused to give to me. The napkin sails in a
beautiful arc toward the trashcan and lands, ly guts and all on the
loor next to it. Fucking bitch.
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In the Distance (Hope) Adrian Wong
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The weighty slap of water on rocks
falling waves on rubbled coral
I stand on pronged cold lava
over the pinched glare of crabs
its left salt, the ocean has
a gift for this outcrop
the empty stone bubbles
a memory of ire cupping airnow hold white glittering
nothing so cold as diamonds
but the warm taste of blood
saline and iron where I lick
the palm of the land
kissed by the sea
A child such as I camefrom this womb of earth and heaven
under the early sun I climb out again
to watch it rise in volcanic fog
this time the air is warm and the rock cold
but a few pools over the water trapped
is blue and staring at the sky
in what year will that home
send someone forthsomeone else with salt in their veins
to meet in the crisp air.
Company WaitngMichelle Baker
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Fall into me, like a river falls to bed
and dreams about the sea.
(we dream of more than bones)In our halls of lesh, the drum-skins pulse,
but even the paving-stones beat these
tones loud enough to shiver bones.
(and our drums are more than stones)
We were woven on the lightest ingers -
our ire burned the loom to ash.Be the warp unto my ill - cast off
any other ghost that wears you;
well spin these straws of lesh
to gold and life and waking.
Exhale your song into my lungs.
We sing in rhythm with the sky,
so still our voices cant be heard
for the sound of the Earthchild breathing.
And as long as we lay here entwined
you and I can never die.
EntwinePhil Amy Wright
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W sound of a detuned radio. Open your eyes to thepale gray light just before sunrise and feel the insidious dreadmounting the uncarpeted staircase of your soul.
Hit Snooze.
Drift off to sleep, and have that recurring dream about your teeth
falling out one by one, leaving your mouth a mess of bloody tooth
shards and saliva which you spit out into your cupped hands, while
avoiding the blank staring eyes of the people in the cubicles aroundyou as your face burns with shame.
Wake to the sound of a detuned radio. Open your eyes to the thick
bluish light of morning coating the bedroom walls. Pull the covers
over your head. Suppress a soft, despairing groan. Hit Snooze. Lie
awake in bed and try not to think about the day ahead. Fail. Hear
the click of the radio coming on again. Hit Snooze. Repeat. Repeat.
Stumble out of bed, leaving it unmade: youre just going to be
using it again in sixteen hours anyway. Enter the kitchen, head
heavy with the residue of sleep. Remember that youre out of coffee
because you didnt feel like going to the store after work yesterday.
Decide to stop for coffee on the way to work.
Enter the bathroom. Shed your nightclothes. Regard your
softening physique in the mirror. Note your schlumpy posture, your
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coffee-stained teeth, your bloated stomach. Recall the cover of the
tabloid you saw a coworker reading yesterday: Best and Worst Beach
Bodies!Wonder if this is why youve never found real love.
Turn on the shower. Enter. Remember that Kevin Spacey movie
where he calls playing with himself in the shower each morning thehighlight of the day. Smile. Then remember what happens to him at
the end of the movie. Stop smiling.
Exit shower. Dry off. Remember that you forgot to put your
laundry in the dryer last night and that you have nothing to wear
to work. Wrap a towel around your sad, naked body and go to the
basement. Dig through the basket of uninished laundry and select
clothes that do not smell. Recall that you just wore them two days
ago. Reassure yourself that no one will notice or care. Go backupstairs and dress. Look at the time. See that you are now running
late.
Hurry outside. Get in your car, wait several long seconds for the
trafic to clear, and speed out into the road. Look at the clock and
note that you wont have time to stop for coffee. Exceed the speed
limit to give yourself a few extra seconds. Realize that you should
have taken the time to buy coffee yesterday, because you could have
had it brewing while you were in the shower, and you wouldnt haveto pay a dollar seventy-ive to get it. Shake your head.
Stop at a gas station. Get annoyed because the coffee has gone
up twenty cents. Try to talk yourself out of your annoyance: its only
twenty cents, right?Fail. Drive with one hand on the wheel the rest
of the way to work while sipping your coffee. Consider that you are
displaying a blatant disregard for the safety of yourself and others.
Dismiss the thought and drink your coffee anyway.
Arrive at work. Exit car. Hurry inside, brushing past people whosenames you cant be bothered to remember. Punch the time clock. Let
go of the breath youve been holding:just made it. Feel oddly pleased
with yourself over this small triumph. Drink your coffee in earnest.
Feel the fog in your brain begin to lift a little.
Go to your cubicle. Say good morning to the coworker in the
cubicle next to you, the one youre secretly in love with. Sit down.
Check your email. Try not to indulge yourself in impure thoughts
about your coworker.
Begin working. Work.
Try not to think about how you let your father talk you into going
to business school for accounting, because he refused to pay for
a useless liberal arts degree. Try not to think about how youve
never been able to stand up to him, how being in his presence feels
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like having a stone weight hanging in your chest. Force yourself
not to feel the pain that comes from knowing youve never had an
honest, heartfelt conversation with him, that it always ends in tears
and shouting, and you cant igure out why. Remember how he used
to say, It could be worse. I could be beating you. Wonder why that wassupposed to make you feel better.
Work.
Try not to think about how long its been since youve had an
honest, heartfelt conversation with anyone, let alone a family
member. Try not to remember the long, fascinating talks you used
to have with friends you swore youd keep in contact with but never
did. Try not to remember how you used to debate religion, politics,
music, art, ilm, and philosophy until four in the morning. Try not toremember how alive you used to feel when your future lay unmapped
before you, and how you believed it when your teachers lied to you
about anything being possible, and following your dreams, and other
such insipid advice that doesnt work out in the real world. Try not
to remember the inal line in Fern Hill, about singing in your chains
like the sea. Try, and fail.
Work.
Enter the canteen at lunchtime. Eat too many carbohydrates andnot enough protein. Glance at the paper. Read about war, famine,
loods, hurricanes, madness, and murder. Wonder when everything
started to go wrong. Try to put your own life into context. Realize this
does not make you feel any better. Notice your beloved coworker on
the other side of the room. Smile.
Remind yourself that your beloved coworker is married. Stop
smiling.
Return to cubicle. Work.Try not to think about how long its been since youve held hands
with someone. Not even a kiss, not even sex, just something as
simple and gentle and ordinary as holding hands. Lick your dry lips,
and allow your mind to wander back to your unavailable coworker.
Give in: indulge yourself in impure thoughts. Latermuch later
berate yourself for being so emotionally immature that youd fall for
someone who is married.
Try to focus on work, and not on the physical proximity between
you and this coworker, who is so unlike the cold, conceited sycophants
you used to date. Relect tenderly upon this persons warmth and
kindness, humility and integrity. Feel your mood slip as you wonder
why youve known so few people like this, if its because they are so
rare in this modern world, or if its because youre only capable of
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attracting people as unpleasant as you suspect yourself to be.
Try to focus on work, but instead, remember the very irst time
someone smiled at you. Try not to think about how long its been
since youve seen a smile like that. Think about it anyway. Try not
to hate yourself for being the distant, self-centered, inconsideratephony you know, deep down, that you are. Realize that this is why
you are alone.
Work
Try not to think about it.
Fail.
Leave work. Forget that you need to buy coffee. Stop at a drive-
thru because you dont feel like cooking. Tell yourself that you eat
too much of this stuff and that its probably, very slowly, killing you.Smile.
Arrive home. Enter your empty house. Turn on the TV. Watch
fatuous sitcoms and over-acted dramas, allowing the hollow fodder
to numb your brain so you dont have to think about anything. Eat
your burger and fries.
Turn off the TV. Pull your day clothes off and put your nightclothes
on. Wash your drawn face, brush your dull teeth. Spend several
minutes staring at yourself in the mirror. Turn away.Go to your room. Climb into bed, set your alarm clock. Turn off
the light.
Lie awake in bed. Wonder what youre doing, where youre going,
and why.
Find yourself unable to answer.
Repeat.
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Daisy
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T slid open. This is as far as I can take youtonight, mate, said the taxi driver, almost apologetically. Then,more happily, Thatll be twenty-two quid.
Thanks, Tim said, as he eyed the distant crowd beyond
the windscreen. Coins and chewing gum wrappers and
green and blue notes spilled all over the taxicab loor.
Ah, shit, he muttered as he realized hed opened his wallet upside-
down. Sorry, uh, keep the rest. He wrenched open the side doorand took to the street.
He had intended to run immediately, but something between
awe and fear had locked his feet in place. He was struck at once by
the sheer size of the road, the width of space between the parallel
buildings and the monumental size of those, toohe had never
before been in London, where everything is done bigger, and louder,
and with more money. And, although it was what he had come
for, he was not quite prepared, either, for the volume of human
compression that illed the forecourt of the cinema to such a degree
that the explosion of lashbulbs was rendered as trivial as pinpricks
in a black sky, the red carpet not even visible beyond the crowd.
Tim saw, above the throng, that a tarpaulin had been erected, and
realised that it was raining. The road was empty, but for a line of
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plastic fences and cones, and puddles relecting bright lights, some
constant, some lashing. Tim patted the left side of his jacket to
ensure that the postcard was still there and ran as professionally as
he could towards the mass of people, his eyes all the while pinned to
the starkly silhouetted words:
Lance Kramer and the Stolen Soul | World Premier
Tim slowed to a saunter as he approached the assembly of
photographers and fans, TV journalists and cameramen, biting
his lower lip and lattening down his jacket. By standing on the
tips of his toes he could just about see the opposite crowd of fans
and paparazziand there, just there, popping in and out of viewbetween heads and burst of camera lash, he could see Geoff
Alcomb. The actors must have already entered the cinema by now.
First the actors, then the creatives: that was what premiergoers.net
had said. Tim was about to shout his name when the impotence of
trying such a thing from this distance hit himalmost as hard as the
photographer whose elbow cracked into Tims ribs as he tried to get
a better shot.
Hey, dickhead. The words were yelled into Tims ear. Piss offout of my space. The photographer glared at Tim as he turned away,
lifting the camera up to eye level.
Tim could taste blood with every cough. He was soaking wet, and
cold; the one man he had travelled two hundred miles to speak to
was facing his direction from ive metres away and yet had no notion
of his existence, and the Cockney photographer in front of him had
just unstrapped his camera from his neck and inserted a new roll of
ilm.With a combination of shoulder barge and two-handed grab,
Tim wrenched the camera away from the photographers grip. He
had the element of surprise on his side and, turning the camera
upwards towards its owner, snapped a picture. The lash blew, and
the photographer twisted his head away in shock, eyes closed.
More than anger or spite, more than bravado or bravery, it was
fear of the consequences of attacking a Cockney photographer
with his own camera that made Tim barge his way straight into the
crowd. His earlier trick had given him some conidence, though, and
he plunged his inger again and again, aiming the cameras lens at
anyone who turned his way as he dug ever deeper into the milieu.
He had just about got his breath back when an arm, as hard as
a rock and just as strong, prevented him from moving any further
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forward. A face like marble was locked onto his.
Tim considered using the camera again, but thought better of it.
Somewhere between the security guard and Tim, a voice said,
Oh, no more pictures, please.
The security guard turned towards the voice irst; Tim managedto slip his eyes away to do the same.
And there, standing in front of him with nothing but the red-
ribbon barrier and a security guard between them, a thousand lights
and camera lashes causing his eyes to gleam, was Tims journalistic
target and his artistic goal; his boyhood hero and his manhood idol;
creator of the best ictional detective of all time and the reason his
editor had agreed to pay for him to travel down to London: before
him was Geoff Alcomb.He only had one shot at this, and he knew it. He gulped down as
much of his fear as he could swallow and grasped at as much of what
he had recited during his journey as he could.
Mister Alcomb, he saidit was important to show respect
my name is Timothy Dooleybarely a pause: skip, skip over the
trivial detail and Im from a small newspaper in Chester a
pause, just there, to let this sink in.
Oh? said Alcomb. Well, it was a response.Tim pulled the postcard from his inner pocket and proffered it. It
took an effort to keep his hand steady.
There was a noise a little bit like a hundred eggs cracking all at
once. Tim did not dare look down, but Alcomb had no such qualms.
In fact he looked distinctly amused. Was that your camera?
Not thinking at all straight, Tim had dropped it in order to pull
out the postcard, which was quickly sequestered by a smooth, hair-
gelled assistant.Um, actually
There was a tremor in the crowd behind Tim, and a look of distinct
surprise appeared on Geoff Alcombs face. An angry Cockney man
behind him shouted, Theres the cunt! before he knocked Tims
lights out and sound meant nothing.
The hospital visit did not last long. At irst Tim could not recall
how he had gotten there at all, but the nurse informed him
that a taxi had delivered himapparently the driver had been so
impressed by his tip that he threw in the ride to the hospital for free.
The nurse told Tim that he might feel a little woozy for a few
more hours, but that it did not appear that he had been hit that hard,
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All Tim felt that he was free to do was phone his editor and get
ired. When he left the hospital, he discovered that it was now nearly
morning, but it was still raining.
He spent the next few hours wandering the streets of London.
The sun rose above the Thames; Tim relected that it might havebeen beautiful were it not for the sludge of the river and the smog
of the sky.
By around eleven oclock he lay unconscious on a bench in St
James Park. His contented dreams of Lance Kramer and of Geoff
Alcombs writing of him gave way, after a time, to troubled ones
about Timothy Dooley and Geoff Alcombs perceptions of him.
He awoke at his mobile phones third ring. He had ished it from
his pocket and pressed the answer button before he was truly awake;but less than a minute later he was up from the bench and running
frantically.
It took him an hour and a half and a lot of talking to strangers, butTim was eventually able to locate Shamus Street and, with it, theSherlock Arms. He used the mens room as best he could to tidy
himself up, and then he sat at the bar, and waited.
It was another half an hour before another person enteredthe pub. Tim was on his third pint of water, and still jittery with
excitement and the taste of a failure turned to success, when Alcomb
took up the stool next to his.
Well, well, well, he said. His voice was much huskier than it
had been the previous night, and with its rasp came the scent of
cigarettes and strong alcohol. So you didsurvive the premier. Must
be that Chester spirit shining through, eh?
There was only really one thing that Tim had been planning onsaying to his heroit was the same thing he had been dying to say
to him for the past ten years.
Can I get you a drink? Wait, let me guess a Singapore sling?
A what? Alcomb laughed, through a row of dirty teeth. Oh no, I
wouldnt stoop to sipping that shit!
Oh. Oh, I see. Its just
Its just that my million-book selling main character drinks them
every damn day and cant solve a case without them? Tell me about
it. I tried to make him grow out of that years ago, but Jane, my editor,
she wouldnt stop going on about conventions and reader comfort
and all that. All I can say about the Singapore sling is, it sounds
better than casablanca or mai tai. Nah, you can get me a Hockley
dark, mate.
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Tim didnt know what to say. He ordered the drink, of course: a
thick, heady aleassuredly dark but notably uninspired. Even so, he
ordered another for himself.
He exchanged reluctant words with Alcomb about the previous
night, and about the conlict between himself and the Cockney.Alcomb couldnt stop laughing. That was fantastic, he said.
Bloody fantastic. I just had to get my PR guy to call you up after
that. I didnt think one bugger would take a single picture of me all
night, but after your little stunt and all the police action, the cameras
wouldnt leave me alone. Fantastic! He took a huge swig of his beer
and pulled a battered piece of card from his jeans pocket. No-ones
ever sent me a postcard by hand before, either. Its a novel way of
giving me your number, thats for sure. He dropped the card downon the bar. A postcard. And of my own hometown, too! Yeah, like I
needed reminding of that shithole.
Tim sipped at his drink. He had managed to convince his
editor that a reporter from Chester would be able to charm out an
interview from the Chester-born author. The biographies in all of his
books declared his proud heritage from humble beginnings; andhis
character enjoyed cocktails, not ale that tasted of tar. It was all in his
books: it was all true, surely?Anyway, Alcomb said, after downing what was left of his pint,
must rush. Ive got some pissant signing to do to prove that I still care
about my readers. Just wanted to thank you for the entertainment.
It was a damn sight better than that poxy excuse for a ilm last night,
thats for sure. But, let me tell you, its put a nice wedge in my pocket,
and no mistake.
So, Tim choked, as Alcomb lowered himself down from his
stool, the Lance Kramer series. Did you just write them all for... well,for money?
Hell, what does anyone do anything for? And its not so hard. If
you have to make a load of shit up to get it, who cares? Cheers for the
pint, by the way. And dont stay in Chester for too long, whatever you
fucking do!
Tim opened his mouth to speak, to ask a question, to get Geoff
Alcomb to say the kinds of things he was supposed to say, but Alcomb
just slapped Tim on the shoulder, turned, and walked away, leaving
Tim to plan what the hell he was going to give to his editor in place
of a proper article.
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It turned out not to be so hard after all. It was as if it had all been
in his head for years. If you had to make a load of shit up, who cared?
When he went back to work the next day, he took it to the editors
ofice.
A good intro, the editor said, after a brief scan. Im sure thefans will lap it up. He tossed it onto a pile of paper lying in a tray.
Ill take a proper look at it later. If its any good, we might send you
to more premiers. And then you can start earning some realmoney,
he added, with a wink.
Real money. In the end, Tim supposed, that was what it was all
about.
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W , aim for brevity. While this may not be thesmartest approach to every aspect in life, it is one of the pillarsof good creative writing. William Zinssers famous text, On Writing,
states the problem well. We are a society strangling in unnecessary
words, circular constructions, pompous frills, and meaningless
jargon. Clutter seems to be a universal plague, infecting writers new
and old alike. The Garden of Cyrus proves the disastrous effects ofverbosity all too well.
But the Quincunx of Heaven runs low, and tis time to
close the ive ports of knowledge. We are unwilling
to spin out our awaking thoughts into the phantasms
of sleep, which often continueth precogitations;
making Cables of Cobwebs and Wildernesses of
handsome Groves. Besides Hippocrates hath spoke so
little and the Oneirocriticall Masters, have left suchfrigid Interpretations from plants that there is little
encouragement to dream of Paradise it self.
How can we, as writers, avoid the same fate? When we write and
edit, it is important to remove the excess, stay concise, and get to the
point! The famous adage states, Time is money, and readers will
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not be pleased to read four paragraphs explaining Marks hair color.
Readers are loath to invest time in writing if they feel it will drag. A
writers goal is not only to communicate, but to capture the readers
attention. And while some writers can manage verbosity (Tolkien
and Lovecraft spring to mind), they are the exception rather thanthe rule.
Knowing something and applying something, however, are two
different things, so what can we do to be concise? Concision in
writing is best viewed at three separate levels: in word choice, in
sentences, and in paragraphs.
Being concise in word choice is a matter of careful inspection.
The difference between The salary man went home, and The
salary man trudged home, is only one word, but the second versionconveys an entirely different (and much more speciic) tone.
Concision means not only being brief, but being precise as well. Ask
yourself if each word means exactly what you want. When editing,
scrutinize your words, especially adjectives and adverbs. Run
quickly should become sprint, and big animal should become
beast. This reduces clutter by ensuring that your meaning is
clear, and by forcing yourself to write with strong nouns and verbs,
as opposed to superluous adjectives and adverbs. Many writersmake the mistake of trying to simplify rather than specify, turning
an otherwise ixable sentence into See Spot run. Word choice and
concision go hand in handthe closer your words are to your exact
meaning, the clearer your image is, and the better your prose.
Reviewing sentences is another matter; your main focus should
be clauses and phrases that fail to add to meaning. Empty openers
are oftentimes the worst offenders: There are two guards at the
door can easily be replaced by Two guards stand at the door.You can apply the same kind of analysis to phrases and clauses.
End of the line is the same as last, for example. While reviewing
sentences is more abstract than reviewing words, the same concept
applies: leave in only what is necessary. Ask yourself if you can make
it clearer. Then have someone else edit your work and ask if they can
make it clearer. Editing sentences is about personal style as much
as (if not more) about following a formula. Avoid clichs that add
no depth, avoid overly long phrases, reduce your clauses, and split
your sentences if they are getting too long. If careless, sentences
can become cumbersome paragraphs attempting to display style.
William Zinsser recommends a unique system to reduce clutter that
I ind eficient and effective: put brackets around any part that is not
doing useful work. Unnecessary qualiiers, redundant adjectives,
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Aim for Brevity
wrongly used prepositions, entire sentences or paragraphs, if
necessaryspare none of them.
Paragraphs are unique in terms of clutter analysis because
they usually represent excessive character exposition or plot
development. The goal still remains unchanged, but the reasoningis different. Look at your story in chunks; break each paragraph
into manageable pieces, which is anywhere from two sentences
to an entire scene. Paragraphs are natural boundaries between
sections of your writing and are never a bad place to start. Is the
paragraph an information dump with unnecessary detail? Does
this section contribute to moving along the plot or developing
the characters? Does this part explain the setting suficiently? Are
you overemphasizing this aspect? Concision in terms of editingparagraphs is simply a matter of practice; each persons style will
force them to cut or edit in a different manner, thus general advice is
dificult to give. A good rule of thumb, however, is to proofread each
section while asking if the part fulills a vital aspect of your story. If
you think you can do without it, you most likely can. Dont be afraid
of rewriting or deleting entire paragraphs; you will always be able
to add ininitely more than you can take away, so be as aggressive as
necessary.Achieving concision in writing is not done through knowing.
Practical application is immensely important, and the more you
edit for concision, the more precise and effective your writing will
become. If you constantly look for opportunities to focus, your
writing will undoubtedly improve.
As another famous saying goes, Keep it simple, stupid.
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ContributorsMichelle Baker is the moderator of the Critique subforum of Locu-
tion. She writes at work and works at writing in her spare time. Her
main hobby is prying cat butts off her drafts.
Anna Clare is an unpublished writer and amateur photographer
who has tried, in her way, to be free. She lives in the United States.
Dale Warkentien, though his classical education is English centric,
has a very irm belief in empirical education and the drive to further
his education has taken him to almost all seven continents (hes still
working on Antarctica). For the last ive years he has been living in
Japan while studying Japanese, and working as an editor and trans-
lator for Yamaha motors.
Andy White comes from the unknown town of Devizes, and is cur-
rently studying for a degree in English Literature and Creative Writ-
ing at Aberystwyth University. He writes when not distracted by life.
Adrian Wong has been recognized as a proicient artist in the past
through winning various competitions. He pursues a professional
career as an artist and is therefore very driven and passionate about
what he creates. After all, he feels most accomplished if he manages
to evoke certain emotions in other people through his art.
Phil Amy Wrightlives in Finland, but he has been writing in English
for a few years now, predominantly on peer critique boards. One ofhis pieces, Daisies, was published in the irst issue of Locution. No
other piece of his has been in any publication.
James Zhao is Locutions current lead editor. He is a student at UC
Berkeley, considering a Political Science and Biochemistry double
major. He does neither exceptionally, but manages to fake it very
well. As a starving college student, he has no spare time, but pro-
crastinates occasionally in order to attempt prose.
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