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Level 4 exemplars and comments
Paper 1
Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
Comments
This answer discusses a wide range of symbols and how they contribute to the impact of Lord of the
Flies. Extensive analysis is given, in particular, to the symbolic roles of Piggy’s glasses, the fire and
the conch. There are a number of insightful ideas, but also some unnecessary details which, to a
certain degree, diminishes the forcefulness of the argument. Given its importance, the symbol of the
Lord of the Flies should have been greater consideration in the response.
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
Comments
A sound approach to tackling the question is evident in this answer. The candidate selects
appropriate scenes from The Painted Veil and “The Lottery” and analyses in detail the characters’
actions and words, or their lack of communication, to show how mental suffering and physical
suffering are presented. There is also an attempt to explore how filmic techniques such as camera
shots and lighting are employed for such purpose in The Painted Veil. The answer could have scored
even higher if further consideration had been paid to the narrative devices Jackson uses in her story.
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Paper 2
Sample 1:
Section B, Question 6
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 6
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Section B, Question 6
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Section B, Question 6
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 6
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 6
Comments
(i) Effectively points out differences but the candidate needs to pick up on the finer nuances of
meaning in each poem to achieve a stronger mark. Lots of room to develop this answer
critically in terms of symbolism and tone. Describing the tone of (B) as “ambitious and
ruled” weakens this response considerably.
(ii) The andidate selects appropriate adjectives but doesn’t move far enough beyond the
perfunctory in explaining their function or indicating an awareness of word connotation.
(iii) A good range of devices identified and a reasonable attempt to link technique to meaning.
Room for a tighter explanation though.
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Sample 2:
Section C, Question 8
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Sample 2:
Section C, Question 8
Comments
(i) Covers obvious differences in a succinct manner. A tendency to over-analyse and make
assumptions weakens the answer somewhat – e.g. “humans have to know more and more”.
(ii) Demonstrates an awareness of tone and its effect.
(iii) Identifies obvious differences but answer is too basic in scope to merit higher marks. A
stronger answer would explain why the last lines “seem a bit more formal”.
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Paper 3
Sample 1:
Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
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Sample 1:
Extended Essay: The Seemingly Unremitting Bleakness in Philip Larkin’s Poetry
Comments
The essay would have been a more convincing one if the candidate has framed the title into a
question instead of a noun phrase. It is a bit confusing whether the candidate is commenting on the
‘unremitting bleakness’ or is challenging such a description of Larkin’s poems. The use of headings
also mars the coherence of the essay. The connection between the different sections needs to be
more explicitly explained. The tone of the essay is more descriptive than analytical. A more detailed
textual analysis of the two poems to support the thesis is desired. A more comprehensive discussion
of the poetic techniques is needed.
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
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Sample 2:
Extended Essay: Music is the Metaphor for Love – An Analysis of the Treatment of Music in The
Piano
Comments
The candidate has followed the task throughout the essay and some analysis has been made on the
metaphorical meaning of the piano in the movie. It is a focussed and structured essay. However, the
inner feelings of the female character have not been adequately explored. More has to be said on the
emotional piano rendering of the female character. Part of the discussion is descriptive and the
discussion of the screen shots is also factual rather than analytical. The lyrics of the two songs
should have been discussed further, too.
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