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Lesson 1

WALT: To write a diary entry

WINS: To include the date and/or time.

To write in the first person.

To use past tense for main events.

To include an introduction to set the scene.

To tell events in chronological order.

To include personal emotions and feelings.

When you write a diary entry you are writing about a day in the life of a real person or character. The diary entry needs to sound as if the person or character

has written it so it needs to be written from their point of view. It also needs to be exciting and interesting to read. To get this right, just follow a few easy steps...

Diary writing must…

include the date and/or time

Diary Writing Must…

• The date or time can be written at the top of the page like this...

Over the past month, I have self isolating. This is a new term now widely used around the world and is keeping many families safe. In this time, I have spent some glorious days in the garden with my family and it’s been very enjoyable having my parents teach me rather than my teachers.

• When can also be included in the first few sentences of a diary entry like this...


be written in the first person.

• This means including pronouns such as ‘I’, ‘my’, ‘we’ and ‘our’.

• These words are special because they tell us the diary is being written by someone and they are talking about themselves.

• Look at these two examples. Which one uses the correct words to be

written in the ‘first person’?

As I looked down from our lofty home, I noticed a group of humans. They seemed to be holding loud, bright monsters with sharp, glistening teeth that were tearing our trees from the ground.

As she looked down from their lofty home, she noticed a group of humans. They seemed to be holding loud, bright monsters with sharp, glistening teeth that were tearing their trees from the ground.



As I looked down from our lofty home, I noticed a group of humans. They seemed to be holding loud, bright monsters with sharp, glistening teeth that were tearing our trees from the ground.

As she looked down from their lofty home, she noticed a group of humans. They seemed to be holding loud, bright monsters with sharp, glistening teeth that were tearing their trees from the ground.


First person

Not first person


use past tense for the main events.

• Diaries are usually written about an event that has already occurred so should be written in the past tense.

• Which of these examples is written in the past tense?

Two days ago, something incredible happened – Hannah and I escaped life in quarantine and saw what life was like in the future!

Today, something incredible will happen – Hannah and I will escape life in quarantine and see what life will be like in the future!


use past tense for the main events.

Two days ago, something incredible happened – Hannah and I escaped life in quarantine and saw what life was like in the future!

Today, something incredible will happen – Hannah and I will escape life in quarantine and see what life will be like in the future!

Future tense

Past tense


tell events in chronological order.

After breakfast, I made the most of the glorious sunshine and planted some seeds.

Without warning, my Dad got a call from Miss Gorvin. She knows our phone number?! I nervously questioned to myself.

Fortunately, she told my Dad I was a shining star… well words to that effect (I may be exaggerating a bit).

As a treat from work, we started a Joe Wicks work out.

All of a sudden, Joe asked Hannah and I if we wanted to go into the future!

• In a diary we usually write about the events of our day in the order they happened.• We only include the most important or interesting events.• Quickly jot down four things you’ve down so far today in chronological order (they can be fictional!), here are

mine:


include personal emotions and feelings.

• A diary is usually a secret place to write the truth about how you feel about what has happened to you in the day.

• In a diary you might include feelings, hopes or fears that you wouldn’t want anyone to know about.

• Look at the examples below. Where have these diary writers described their feelings?

I was excited but also some what apprehensive about where we had suddenly landed. With a tremor to my voice I nervously asked my sister, “Do you think we will be able to get back home?” Fortunately, Hannah as always, was logical about the whole unusual situation and put my mind at ease by saying, “Well we got here safe and sound, I’m sure the return will be no different.” With that I was filled with a sense of calm again.


include personal emotions and feelings.

I was excited but also some what apprehensive about where we had suddenly landed. With a tremor to my voice I nervously asked my sister, “Do you think we will be able to get back home?” Fortunately, Hannah as always, was logical about the whole unusual situation and put my mind at ease by saying, “Well we got here safe and sound, I’m sure the return will be no different.” With that I was filled with a sense of calm again.


Lesson 2

WINS:

To include the date and/or time.






Which features can you see in the following example?

Dear Diary, Mon 31st October

Yesterday started as usual but changed very suddenly. As soon as I entered the kitchen, I knew something was wrong.

My witch was nowhere to be seen. My food was not in the bowl and the door was wide open. I began to feel anxious as I noticed the broom and wand were missing…

Dear Diary, Mon 31st October

Yesterday started as usual but changed very suddenly. As soon as I entered the kitchen, I knew something was wrong.

My witch was nowhere to be seen. My food was not in the bowl and the door was wide open. I began to feel anxious as I noticed the broom and wand weremissing…

introductiondate

feelings

past tense

first person

time conjunctions and adverbials

Today we’re going to write our introduction.

Lets remind ourselves what we needs for an introduction.

include the date and/or time

Diary Writing Must…

• The date or time can be written at the top of the page like this...

• When can also be included in the first few sentences of a diary entry like this...


include an introduction to set the scene.

For now I must catch up on eating and

sleeping and hope that they do not

return tomorrow.

• It is important to set the scene when writing a diary to ensure that it is clear what you are writing about.

• You might answer the questions who, what, where or when.• Which of the following extracts is an introduction? How do you know?

Today has been an unusually busy day for me! When I woke up this morning, I noticed that the usual calm atmosphere within our group had been replaced by one of panic.

Wednesday 1st April 2020Dear diary,Well, it’s the start of a new month and after eleven solitary days in the house, guess what…? I’m still in the house! Fortunately, I have my conniving big sister, Hannah, to keep me company. My parents aren’t so bad; they’re helping me with my mind-numbing home learning (poor them!). Fortunately, we’re all well and safe, I am incredibly thankful for that!

Include the date you are writing the diary on.

Start with: Dear diary,

Where

When.

What. Who

Feeling and emotion


Have a go at writing your own introduction of your diary entry. If you are stuck for what to write you can make it fictional. I’ve tried to write my example as if I was at home, like

you, doing home learning .

Press here to get onto a thesaurus

online!

I used a thesaurus to find solitaryand conniving.

What new vocabulary can

you use?

https://www.thesaurus.com/

Lesson 3

WINS:







As soon as I woke up, my Mum had made an incredible breakfast for us all. It was a breakfast good enough for royalty. Fresh blueberries and strawberries burst colour onto the pine table. Sweet maple syrup filled the air like a rose in bloom and the warmth of the golden plate of pancakes bought genuine, loving smiles to everyone’s faces. Breakfast is no longer run like a military operation; we now wear our pyjamas, laugh and talk- it is the silver lining to this unusual situation of working from home.


In our second paragraph we’re going to start the chronological order of the day. A good start for everyone will be breakfast!

As soon as I woke up, my Mum had made an incredible breakfast for us all. It was a breakfast good enough for royalty. Fresh blueberries and strawberries burst colour onto the pine table. Sweet maple syrup filled the air like a rose in bloom and the warmth of the golden plate of pancakes brought genuine, loving smiles to everyone’s faces. Fortunately, breakfast is no longer run like a military operation; we now wear our pyjamas, laugh and talk- it is the silver lining to this unusual situation of working from home.

In our second paragraph we’re going to start the chronological order of the day. A good start for everyone will be breakfast!

Simile.

Smell.

See.

Taste

Hear

Fronted adverbials.

Feel

Have a go at writing your second paragraph of your diary entry. Think about your senses!


online!

I used a thesaurus to find fragrant.


you use?

As soon as I woke up, my Mum had made an incredible breakfast for us all. It was a breakfast good enough for royalty. Fresh blueberries and strawberries burst colour onto the pine table. Sweet, fragrant maple syrup filled the air like a rose in bloom and the warmth of the golden plate of pancakes brought genuine, loving smiles to everyone’s faces. Breakfast is no longer run like a military operation; we now wear our pyjamas, laugh and talk- it is the silver lining to this unusual situation of working from home.


Lesson 4

WINS:







The bliss of breakfast soon faded away, when the reality of maths sank in. My teacher seems to think we all love school work because we have an awful lot! We’re doing subtraction this week, it’s a piece of cake or a piece less cake, I should say! After approximately fifty minutes of agonising column subtraction, Hannah and I had a break and set up Joe Wicks for a workout. To our amusement, Dad decided to join us. Well, all I’ll say on that is I think he ought to join us more often, it was like watching an elephant attempting yoga!

In our third paragraph we’re going to continue in chronological order of the day. What happens after breakfast?

Opinion

similecontractionsFronted adverbials

First person


online!

I used a thesaurus to find agonising.


you use?

The bliss of breakfast soon faded away, when the reality of maths sank in. My teacher seems to think we all love school work because we have an awful lot! We’re doing subtraction this week, it’s a piece of cake or a piece less cake, I should say! After approximately fifty minutes of agonising column subtraction, Hannah and I had a break and set up Joe Wicks for a workout. To our amusement, Dad decided to join us. Well, all I’ll say on that is I think he ought to join us more often, it was like watching an elephant attempting yoga!

Have a go at writing the third paragraph, continue in chronological order of the day. What happens after breakfast?


In our fourth paragraph we’re going to continue in chronological order and write a summarising sentence of the day and the day to come.

Opinion

similePast tenseFronted adverbials

First person

The afternoon soon past by, I spent many glorious hours in the garden in the hunt for new spring life for this week’s project about Easter. As the sun faded away as though the darkness was rubbing it out, Hannah and I played a rather violent game of dobble. It is lovely being at home with my family and I appreciate it more every day. I wonder what tomorrow will bring.


online!

I used a thesaurus to find faded.


you use?

The afternoon soon past by, I spent many glorious hours in the garden in the hunt for new spring life for this week’s project about Easter. As the sun faded away as though the darkness was rubbing it out, Hannah and I played a rather violent game of dobble. It is lovely being at home with my family and I appreciate it more every day. I wonder what tomorrow will bring.

Have a go at writing the fourth paragraph, continue in chronological order and write a summarising sentence of the day and the day to come.


Lesson 5

WALT: To edit and improve a diary entry

WINS:







Read your work through. Check for any corrections or any words you could up - scale.

I do: The afternoon soon past by I spent many lovely hours in the garden in the hunt of new spring life for this week’s project about Easter and then I made our Easter project. As the sun began to faid as though the darkness was rubbing it out, hannah and I a rather valiant game of dobble.

Press here to get onto a thesaurus online!

Press here to get onto a dictionary online!

played

I’ve missed a comma.

I need a capital letter for a proper noun.

I’ve made two spelling mistakes so I’ll check them in the dictionary.

fade

glorious

,

H^

I’m going to up- scale the word lovely in the thesaurus. I’ve repeated myself

here.

I’ve missed a word here so I’ll edit in played.


https://www.dictionary.com/

Write two stars about what you like about your work and one wish of what you would like to do better at.

I think I was really good at using _____________.

I partially liked how I was able to _____________.

I would like to work on _____________ for my next piece of writing.

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