LOSE NOW, PAY LATERBy: Carol Farley

Abby P, Mara K, Amanda J, Kathleen R.

SUMMARYOne day two girls saw a new ice cream shop that was

giving out free ice cream called “swoodies”. Soon everyone in the town found out about swoodies and started eating them. Everyone started to gain weight very quickly. After swoodies had been around of some time, the two girls stumble upon a machine called a slimmer. They must pay a small fee to lose 1 pound instantly with no pain. After a while the town is aware of these machines and thrilled with the result. The narrator tells us that her little brother believes the slimmer's and swoodies are being run by aliens. He believes that the fat that is shed off of everyone’s bodies are being sent to space and used as fuel. We are left at that and never find out if this little boy is correct or not.

FOCUS QUESTION

Are we really making our own decisions, or are we really being influenced by others?

Exposition

INITIAL CHARTERS

Deb and Trinja

SETTING

Swoodies Ice Cream inside the mall

INITIAL ACTION

The girls decide to walk into the swoodies store.

Rising Action

Deb decided to go into the slimmer

Climax

Debs little brother has his own thoughts on the slimmers and swoodies…

He believes that all of the Slimmers and Swoodies are being run by aliens. He thinks that the Swoodies are here to fatten everyone up very quickly, then then everyone uses the slimmer the fat they lose is being sent from the slimmer to space ships and used as fuel.

Falling Action

Deb thought she could stop using the slimmers any time she wanted to…

But her and Trinja thought that the blue marks on their wrist were starting to look like tattoos and they liked them.

SCI-FI ELEMENTSNon-human charters

Future settingLife in space

OUR RESPONSES

Mara Amanda

Abby KathleenWhen Deb says “ I can stop any time I want to BUT me and Trinja think the blue marks on our wrist look cool” I realized that Deb had no control over her actions and was unable to stop.

This story made me realize how much control society has over everyone.

This story made me realize how hard it is to stop once you’re addicted to something, like Trinja and Deb were addicted to Swoodies and the Slimmer and just how hard people look for a way out of their addictions, and how they convince themselves to stop when they know it wont work.

think that this story is really interesting because, to me, it seems to actually be mildly realistic.. I bet that if Slimmers showed up now with no information about them, most people wouldn’t care and use them in a heartbeat.

CITATIONS http://www.wpclipart.com/cartoon/aliens/alien

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q=tattoo+on+wrist&hl=en&rls=com.microsoft:en-us&biw=1366&bih=600&tbs=ic:specific,isc:teal&tbm=isch&tbnid=GWXJaPz5323ymM:&imgrefurl=http://tattoomegi.com/black-wrist-tattoo-design-for-girls/&docid=X8EwJbbDN_Pv1M&imgurl=http://tattoomegi.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/Black-Wrist-Tattoo-Design-For-Girls-5.jpg&w=470&h=470&ei=lTAgT_yIO-OysAK-t-i9Dg&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=304&vpy=256&dur=62&hovh=225&hovw=225&tx=171&ty=230&sig=114303905070834085800&page=3&tbnh=131&tbnw=134&start=43&ndsp=28&ved=1t:429,r:8,s:43

CITATIONS CONTINUED

http://www.google.com/imgres?q=spaceship&hl=en&rls=com.microsoft:en-us&biw=1366&bih=600&tbm=isch&tbnid=O0Ub-n2otYLplM:&imgrefurl=http://weeklyworldnews.com/headlines/26535/alien-spaceships-to-attack-earth-in-2011/&docid=RIwVnhbSSIwOTM&imgurl=http://weeklyworldnews.files.wordpress.com/2010/12/ufo_2011a.jpg&w=300&h=225&ei=GTEgT_q8LrTksQLAmum7Dg&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=325&vpy=177&dur=46&hovh=180&hovw=240&tx=198&ty=118&sig=114303905070834085800&page=1&tbnh=108&tbnw=159&start=0&ndsp=22&ved=1t:429,r:1,s:0

http://www.google.com/imgres?q=ten+year+old+boy&hl=en&sa=X&rls=com.microsoft:en-us&biw=1366&bih=600&tbm=isch&prmd=imvnsu&tbnid=wYaYfZGedPG9lM:&imgrefurl=http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/uknews/6016279/Boy-10-killed-in-quad-bike-accident.html&docid=cBZZiyJmE44ZdM&imgurl=http://i.telegraph.co.uk/multimedia/archive/01461/archie_1461024c.jpg&w=460&h=288&ei=TTEgT765CcrjsQKirYC4Dg&zoom=1&iact=rc&dur=343&sig=114303905070834085800&page=1&tbnh=107&tbnw=139&start=0&ndsp=24&ved=1t:429,r:1,s:0&tx=17&ty=93

Clip art

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