Malaysia, a Unique Country

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Malaysia is a multiracial country. Malaysia has a population of 23.27 million consisting of

61 percent Malays, 30 percent Chinese, 8 percent Indians and 1 percent of other ethnic

groups. Malaysia is unique because of its diversity of races, religions and cultures, the

stability of the country and many places of interests. Besides, there are many

international achievements which are the pride of our nation.

Diversity of races, religions and cultures is a significant characteristic of our nation.

Malaysia is a multiracial country with a rich cultural heritage. Unique to Malaysia is the

'Open House' concept where during the various cultural and religious festival like Hari

Raya, Chinese New Year, Deepavali, Gawai Day and others, friends and families and even

strangers would visit the homes of those who are celebrating the festival, to wish them

well and enjoy the feast prepared by the hosts. Although the visitors may be from

different races, they still can tolerate with each other and live under the same roof where

they celebrate the festival together. This will help to strengthen the ties among

themselves.

Moreover, the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is also a uniqueness of us. We live

harmoniously in a country where there are no wars and conflicts among Malaysians. War

is dreadful and it may deteriorate humans' lives. We are fortunate that our country is

safe and runs off the war. So, people can live safely here. Somehow, Malaysia is a

paradise for those Iraqis or Pakistanis. Besides, our country is freed from natural

disasters such as earthquakes. Earthquakes may bring death and destroy many

buildings. Therefore, Malaysia is unique because of the stability and peaceful

environment.

On top of that, there are many places of interests in country such as beaches, islands

and rain forest. Malaysia's rain forest is considered as the oldest in the world. The diverse

species of animals and plant life continue to excite a great deal of scientific research.

Many believe that some undiscovered plant may hold cures to many currently incurable

human diseases. There are many islands in our country such as Pulau Langkawi, Pulau

Redang, Pulau Ketam and many others. Pulau Langkawi has a lot of historitical

informations. Those who are in favour of history can go there to explore the history of

that place. All the beaches in those islands are beautiful. The sand is soft and white. The

accommodation is well-established and that makes those islands ideal places to visit.

Following this, there are also international achievements of our country. Those

achievements include the existence of Kuala Lumpur International Airport (KLIA), Formula

One (F1) racing circuit and the Petronas Twin Towers. KLIA is unique because it has all

that is needed for business, entertainment and relaxation within its boundaries. The

airport is part and parcel of the Multimedia Super Corridor where high technology

industries are being actively developed. Nevertheless, there is a Formula One Race Track

near the airport, so foreign car racing enthusiasts from all over the world can come for a

visit to gather here. Besides that, Petronas Twin Towers which is a building that soars

452 metres into the sky is once upon a time, the tallest building in the world and yet it is

a national pride to the people of Malaysia.

In short, Malaysia is unique that it has diversity of races, religions and cultures, a stable

and peaceful environment, places of interest and some internal achievements. Those are

important characteristic of our nation. It is rich of cultural heritage; it would be worth to

play a visit here.

Corrections made in the essay above:

Do not put an extra hyphen - multiracial is correct, multi-racial and multi racial are

wrong

Use noun instead of adjective - diversity of races, religious and cultures is wrong; it

should be diversity of races, religions and cultures; a unique of us is wrong, a uniqueness

of us is correct

This sentence is wrong because there should be two phrases in the sentence where you

use the conjunction although - Although the visitors may be from different races.

However… It should be ‘Although the visitors may be from different races, they…’

Article – an unique is wrong, a unique is correct

Subject-verb agreement - the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is should be the

stability and peacefulness of Malaysia are – Wrong: there is no wars and conflicts.

Correct: there are no wars and conflicts

Use adverb instead of noun – we live in a harmony country should be we live

harmoniously in a country or we live in harmony.

Singular or plural - humans' life is wrong, humans’ lives is correct, human beings is

more appropriate

No plural form – Wrong: historitical informations. Correct: historical information

Avoid using informal word - has lots of is informal, has a lot of is formal

Essay Rating: 3.5

Good points and examples are discussed in the essay. However, there are some gross

and minor grammatical and spelling errors. Gross errors include subject-verb agreement

errors and wrong use of nouns and adjectives. All in all, there is still room for

improvement. Keep up your writing effort!

Corrections made in the essay above:

Do not put an extra hyphen - multiracial is correct, multi-racial and multi racial are

wrong

Use noun instead of adjective - diversity of races, religious and cultures is wrong; it

should be diversity of races, religions and cultures; a unique of us is wrong, a uniqueness

of us is correct

This sentence is wrong because there should be two phrases in the sentence where you

use the conjunction although - Although the visitors may be from different races.

However… It should be ‘Although the visitors may be from different races, they…’

Article – an unique is wrong, a unique is correct

Subject-verb agreement - the stability and peacefulness of Malaysia is should be the

stability and peacefulness of Malaysia are – Wrong: there is no wars and conflicts.

Correct: there are no wars and conflicts

Use adverb instead of noun – we live in a harmony country should be we live

harmoniously in a country or we live in harmony.

Singular or plural - humans' life is wrong, humans’ lives is correct, human beings is

more appropriate

No plural form – Wrong: historitical informations. Correct: historical information

Avoid using informal word - has lots of is informal, has a lot of is formal

Essay Rating: 3.5

Good points and examples are discussed in the essay. However, there are some gross

and minor grammatical and spelling errors. Gross errors include subject-verb agreement

errors and wrong use of nouns and adjectives. All in all, there is still room for

improvement. Keep up your writing effort!