Day 3Essay Day 2: Body Paragraphs, Conclusions

and Specific Language

Seating Chart: Team Glen

GraceQamar Yasmin

Laith

FatinaRaghd

Amanda

Shahd

Door Ustaz Glen

MohammadGhamin

Have Introduction Paragraph Out and SeparatedRoll Call: What would you do with 1 billion dollars.

Answer in a Thesis sentence.

Ahmad

Nabil

Seating Chart: Team Rachel

Aseel

SabaNadine Rita

KostyIbrahim

MazenSara

Abdelrahman

Door

Leena

Ustaz Glen

Have Introduction Paragraph Out and Separated

Roll Call: What would you do with 1 billion dollars. Answer in a Thesis sentence.

Seating Chart: Team Radha

Adam

SajaLeen Nada

ElyaaDana

ZeinaSara

Bana

Door

Khaled

Ustaz Glen

Have Introduction Paragraph Out and Separated

Roll Call: What would you do with 1 billion dollars? Answer in a Thesis sentence.

Seating Chart: Team Robin/Alison

ShaimaSari Sewar

GhaithAnas

ZainTala

Nour

Door

Nadeen

Ustaz Glen

Have Introduction Paragraph Out and Separated

Roll Call: What would you do with 1 billion dollars? Answer in a Thesis sentence.

AgendaWarm Up: Roll Call How to Write Body ParagraphsPractice Body ParagraphsHow to write ConclusionsPractice Conclusions

Body Paragraph Outline1. Topic Sentence (Summarizes how 1 of your reasons proves your thesis )2. 1st Example: make sure it’s relevant to prompt3. Explain: Show how the example proves the thesis.4. 2nd Example: make sure its different from 1st5. Explain: Show how example proves the thesis

Example (Find the parts)First, social activists are continually improving the world for the better due to their relentless pursuit of justice for all. For example, since it’s conception America has been a racist state that persecuted it’s black population and denied them fundamental human rights. Social activists, like Martin Luther King and Malcom X refused to accept this and fought constant political, economic, and cultural battles in order to help their brethren. As a result of the actions of these activists, black people in America now have the right to vote, the right to attend any school, and the right to work. However, some may argue that despite these gains, America has reverted back to a point where black children attend terrible schools and have no chance at obtaining decent jobs. However, present-day activists like Michelle Alexander and Professor Michael Apple are working to improve these schools. These activists have helped to stop the unlawful imprisonment of black men and resulted in tremendous improvements in their education system.

Advice on Writing StyleStart Paragraphs with Numbered Transitions

(First, Second)Never use 2nd PersonUse 1st Person rarelyDon’t go into too much detail about the

examples.

Specific Writing ExamplesWhich one of these examples is more specific

When you see an elderly lady struggling with her groceries, you should offer to help carry them.

Last month, I was sitting around with my friends when we saw my neighbor, who is 85 and recently had hip surgery, struggling with his grocery bags. I excused myself and went over to help him

Specific Writing

Try and use as much detail as possible to describe…

Your favorite childhood memory

The perfect day

Practice Partners:Assignment: Is having great wealth always problematic?

1. Understand the Prompt2.Take a stance and find 2 reasons. 3. With a partner brainstorm 4 examples (2 Examples per reason).4. Outline one body paragraph

Conclusions:Go Home and Go Big1. Go Home – Reword Thesis2. Go Big – Look to the future. Make

Prediction if your argument is followed.

Close…

Example ConclusionThe justice secured by the social activists and the freedom delivered from disease and injury brought forth by inventions has improved the world for the better. Although throughout history there have always been people who have used inventions to harm others and advance their personal interests, there are always more people who are willing to stand up and oppose them. Social Activists, leaders, and caring citizens will continue to fight to improve our education and economic systems, so eventually even these selfish individuals will not have a space to develop. The world passed on to the future will be better than the current one.

HomeworkMake changes to introductions from Sama’s

commentsWrite your body paragraphs and conclusions

for the introduction you wrote yesterday.WEBSITE

Exit SlipWhat should the first sentence in each body

paragraph be and what is the purpose of this sentence.

What two things should you do in your conclusion?