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Commerce_ Year 3
Business Correspondence
E F F E C T I V E B U S I N E S S W R I T I N G
Questions that govern the process of writing
Why? Why do I write?
gives the reasons why that piece of writing is produced
For whom? For whom do I write?
makes the writer concentrate on the reader's interests and needs
What?
What do I write? the writer focuses on the subject that should meet the reader's
needs
How?
How should I write? selection and combination of vocabulary and structures;
order - to create sentences
- to develop them into paragraphs
will enable the reader to interpret the message as intended by the
writer
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STAGES OF THE WRITING PROCESS
1. Evaluating the circumstances and the reasons for writing
Why?
2.
Assessing the readership / audience
- anticipating the reader's
interests
level of understanding
For whom?
3.Deciding on the core information that should be transmitted and its relevant
aspects
What?
4.Working on the message and letting your personality show through
- adapting your writing style to that particular communication situation
How?
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From another point of view:
- planning your writing (why? and for whom?)
- developing a strategy for writing
FACTORS THAT MAY INFLUENCE THE QUALITY OF WRITING
1. THE WORDSa. Denotation and connotation
b. Concrete and abstract words
c. The tone of the message
d. Short or long words?
e. Familiar and unbiased words
1. a. Denotation and connotation
the two co-ordinates of the meaning of every word
words have potential meaning
context
the sender's intention and knowledge
the receiver's understanding and attitude
Denotation = the factual definition of an object / situation / quality / idea etc.
Connotation = how a person feels about a word
A word
- may have more than one denotative meaning
letter
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graphic symbol for a sound A, D, M
information / message sent to somebody
- connotations vary significantly [sometimes antagonistic connotations may be given to the
same word]
ignorant "lack of knowledge"
usually: negative connotation
in legal disputes: positive connotation
My client was totally ignorant of any misuse of funds.
When we write:
to take into account both the denotations and the connotations of the words
to create adequate context
to use dictionaries (synonyms, spelling, cross-reference) creativity
to increase the reader's interest
to create a good impression
Uniqueness of individual writing style
starts to develop in childhood
through the whole learning process
during our whole life
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b. it reflects:
our background
education
life experience
career training
etc.
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c. necessary:
to help the reader interpret the message in the way we want
additional knowledge about words
1. b. Concrete and abstract words
Concrete words:denotation sends to tangible persons, objects, events, places
Examples: ball, house, excavator, smile, town etc.
They are:
- direct
- precise
- specific in nature
The use of concrete words:- avoids misunderstanding (+)
- cannot express fully what the reader intended (–)
Abstract words: Concepts
Ideas
Feelings
Impressions
Examples: professionalism, friendship, honesty, quality control,
decision-making, debate
Their meaning: more difficult to express
Necessary: - to define them
- to illustrate them
- to place them in adequate context
- to use them with caution
- the reader should know exactly what we mean
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Examples:
1. Group
– a group of close friends
– your office colleagues
– specialists in the same field
– mathematical concept
2. majority, most, few, several – interpretation left to the reader
Business writing – clarity = a main objective
Abstract words Concrete words
1. The amount the client has to pay is large.
The client has to pay $ 20,000
2. The draft will be due in several months.
The draft will be due in three months.
3. We are ready to cover part of these expenses.
We are ready to cover 40 % of these expenses.
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1. c. The tone of the message
Combination of words range of impressions tone of the message
positive
neutral
negative
Difficult task: it involves:
- finding the most appropriate words
- careful selection
- creating adequate context
- dealing with positive and negative words
Generally thought:
negative words negative communication
Examples: no, disappoint, unable, cannot, delay, defect
However:
Examples: "On inspecting the shipment, we were unable to find any flaw".
negative words positive meaning
importance of context
- to convey bad news
- to say no with a negative word
depends on the relationship with the reader/partner
two possibilities
Examples:
a. No complaint will be taken into account after 45 days.
b. Complaints will be taken into account if made within 45 days.
1. d. Short or long words
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Requirement: writing in business is short and simple
Yet the use of short, simple words does not always guarantee clearness
Necessary:
- to consider the reader first
- to decide on the level of writing
Sometimes: short/simple words overused + lose their power
Necessary:
- to use vivid/lively words
- impact on the reader
Examples:
Overused
1. Pursuant to your request, we are enclosing herewith a copy of our financial report.
improved version
2. Here is the financial report you requested.
1. e. Familiar and unbiased words
Recommendation:
to avoid
- jargon
- slang expression
- words showing gender, age, race discrimination
to be more sensitive to people's feelings
to select words that express sensitivity.
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Business letters
General aspects
Communication between companies various means
telephones
fax machines
the Internet
a certain degree of informality that may not illustrate the real nature of the relationship
Consequently any important element in business, discussed or agreed upon the
phone, should be confirmed by an official, formal letter
For this reason (and for many others) writing ability appears in the top three activities
of a business person
Businesses value effective communicators:
being an effective writer can enhance your professional career
people in other departments of the company get to know you through your writing
your letters may get your superiors’ attention showing how effective (or ineffective)
you are as a business communicator.
The layout of a business letter
The layout of a business letter some specific elements
Information about:
the two companies that communicate by letters
the people authorized to communicate on behalf of each company
or may refer to the filing system that enables tracing a letter (or a number of letters in
the correspondence file)
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Letterhead
Date
Inside address
Salutation
Subject line
Main body of the letter
Complimentary line
Author’s signatureTyped namePosition
Enclosures
Reference line
Fig. 1. Main parts of a business letter
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The letterhead
Information about the sender:
the logo
the company’s name and status
its address
telephone/fax number/ e-mail address
The date
There are various ways to express date:
2.11. 2011
2/11/2011
The 1st of November 2011
November 1st, 2011
In business correspondence pattern recommended:
The reference line
Your ref. (“your reference”)
Our ref. (“our reference”)
helps tracing a letter in the file
the name of the person who signed the letter
the name of the typist
the filing code
Example: Your ref.: FW/ms/P25
- the letter was written/signed by Frank Warrington
- it was typed by Mary Storm
- is located in the file P (“petrol”) 25
"Our ref." gives similar information about the sender
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2 November 2011
The inside address indicates the following:
name and address of the addressee
position in the company (e.g. The Supply Manager, The Chief Accountant etc.)
department
mail address – written exactly as given by your partner
The salutation
Forms of address used to open business letters
depend on: the addressee’s status
the social distance between the partners
Dear Sir – when the addressee is a gentleman whose name we do not know;
Dear Sirs – used to address a company;
Dear Madam – the addressee is a lady whose name we do not know;
Dear Mr Robertson/ Dear Mrs/ Ms/Miss Watson – to address a person whose name is
known to the writer;
Dear Bill - used to address a person with whom the writer is on friendly terms
High officials or personalities:
(the addressee’s name is associated with)
- courtesy titles
- titles deriving from appointment or honours
- rewards
Useful information:
- no special form of address for the Prime Minister and members of the
Ministry
- ambassadors are addressed as:
Your Excellency (formal)
Dear Mr Rodson or Dear Lord Bart
The subject line
below the salutation and underlined
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tells what the letter is about
helps the reader direct the letter to the right person
facilitates fast processing of correspondence
Dear Mr Winter
Tax collection
The body of the letter the main text of the letter (the message of the letter)
the rule of the “ four Cs”
clear, concise, correct, courteous
divided into paragraphs
information distributed according to the role of each
paragraph
The opening paragraph
makes connection between the subject line and the rest of the text (" above" or
"above-mentioned")
refers to the source of information, which is used as a basis for the letter you are
writing
The following two or three paragraphs
the proper message of the letter
describe facts/give arguments/ make complaints/ make suggestions etc
(according to the purpose of the letter)
The closing paragraph
emphasises the main idea of the letter
restate the writer’s point of view
conclusion of the letter
The last sentence of this paragraph often contains the formula:
We look/are looking forward to hearing/ receiving news from you
We look/are looking forward to your answer/reply/letter
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The complimentary line
depends on the level of formality
the relationship between the writer and the addressee
directly related to the salutation
Differences between British and American English:
British English
Salutation Complimentary line
Dear Madam / Sir(s) Yours faithfully
Dear Mr/Mrs/Ms/Miss Waters/ Dear
colleague/friend/customer
Yours sincerely /Best regards/ wishes/ Kind
regards
Dear Mary Yours/ Best regards/ wishes/ Kind regards
American English
Salutation Complimentary line
Gentlemen:/ Dear Madam / Sir(s) Truly yours/Yours truly/ / Faithfully yours/
Yours faithfully
Dear Mr/Mrs/Ms/Miss Hudson Sincerely yours/ Yours sincerely/ Best regards/
Best wishes/Cordially yours
Dear Nicholas Best regards/ Cordially
The signature given together with
the writer's typed name
the writer’s position in the company
If the writer is not the person authorised to sign the letter:
the printed name is preceded by:
“p.p.” (per procurationem) or
“for”:
Mary Smith
p.p. Tom Richard
Supply Manager
Enclosure line the last point of a business letter
abbreviated to Enc./encl.
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gives the list of additional documents sent with the letter:
Encl.: 2 copies of the Monthly Statement
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Fig.2 Business letter (sample).
MEDEQUIP Ltd. 78 Bell Street
Washington DC, WA 5312427 January 2002
Our ref. CG/mn/ T 99
Mr Paul LevinWashington Marketing Society
667 Seventeenth StreetWashington DC
WA 64702
Dear Mr LevinTraining course
We are writing to you in connection with the above-metioned subject, following your article on new trends in marketing published in the December issue of the Marketing Review.
Since your ideas seem very interesting to us, we would like to invite you to deliver some lectures to our sales people within a two-week training course at the beginning of April. We are sure that the new strategy you propose for selling medical equipment will be of great interest to our people.
Could you please confirm, by 15 February 2004, if you would accept our invitation? All the other details will be discussed as soon as we receive your confirmation.
We look forward to your answer.
Yours sincerely,
Marion EvansHuman Resources Manager
Types of business letter layout
Layout patterns/ styles:
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indented style
block style
semi-indented style
The indented style requires:
letterhead
inside address
complimentary close
signature block
each line be indented as compared to the line above
closed punctuation (full stops, commas, etc) is used after each element and line of
these layout items
letter body
the first line of each paragraph is indented
reference line
date line
complimentary line
are placed on the right-hand side
The block style
all layout items are placed on the left-hand side
punctuation is omitted from all the items except for the main letter body
each line of the paragraphs starts in the left-hand margin
paragraphs are separated by double space
The two patterns differ from many points of view
However, the use of punctuation in the main body of the letter is compulsory in both
cases.
Combinations of the two patterns:
semi-block style - (when some elements are placed in the centre of the paper or on the
right-hand side)
semi-indented style indentation of the first line of each paragraph
full punctuation (inside address, salutation, complimentary
line, signature block and enclosure
line)
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Figure 7. Indented style layout (sample).
(letter head)__________________________________
(date)______________(ref. Line) ________
(inside address)_________________
_______________ _____________
___________
(salutation)____________________
__(subject line) _______________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(complimentary line)______________(signature)
(typed name)___________________(position)_________________
(Encl.)______________
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Figure 8. Block style (sample).
(letter head)__________________________________________________
(date)________
(ref.line)________
(inside address)___________________________________________________________________________
(salutation)__________(subject line)_____________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(complimentary line)____________________(signature)(typed name)__________(position)_____________
(Encl)_______________
MAKING AN ENQUIRY
Complete the following letter and then answer the questions:
1. Who writes on behalf of SUNSHINE Hotels?
2. Who is the addressee?
3. What information is given in the first paragraph?
4. What does Mr Carlson say in the second paragraph of his letter?
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SUNSHINE Hotels10 Lion Street
7 AHD AmsterdamThe Netherlands
15 December 2003Your ref:Our ref: AC/gc/ Amst 03
The ROMFAST Bank12 Queen Mary StreetDistrict 3 BucharestRomania
Dear SirsRe: Banking services
We …1… your …2… from Mr Toma Dănescu, General Manager of "RomTour"- Bucharest, who has …3… you as one of the most reliable banks in Romania.
We are …4… the hotel…5… and our …6… of hotels is well-known …7… Europe. We have recently …8… the Romanian market, with two …9… in Bucharest and we would …10… to …11… your bank for paying …12…our staff …12…our suppliers.
We would …14… if you …14… send us …15… about the card system and credit lines you can …16… us.
We look …18… to …19… from you soon.
Yours …20…SCarlssonSteven CarlssonHead of Finance Department
5. Which of the phrases below would you use to refer to Mr. Carlson’s action?
He is arranging a meeting
making payment
sorting out letters
giving a presentation
making an enquiry
making a proposal
Letters of enquiry asking for information
You make an enquiry in order to find out:
where you can find the product
how much you have to pay for it
if you can get a discount
what quantities of that product are available
how soon the supplier may honour your order
what similar products are available on the market
The paragraphs of an enquiry letter have clear functions:
ParagraphFunction Examples
1st introduction
(how you found information about the addressee: name, address, type of business etc.)
"We have found the September issue of your magazine in the library of "RomTour"-Bucharest."
"Mr. Steven Robson, Managing Director of FINDAS Corporation, one of our partners, has recommended your company to us and …"
"We have heard of your firm at the 3rd Fair of Consumer Goods in Tokyo last year."
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2nd ; 3rd giving additional information about the situation;
giving brief information about your company;
offering to give further information;
launching the request.
- "We are in the hotel industry and our chain of hotels is well-known throughout Europe"
- "Our company is involved in road building."
- "We will be happy to offer you further details."
- "We would like your comments on the possibility of organising a joint conference."
- "We would appreciate if you would consider our proposal for a partnership."
"Could you please send us your catalogue and price list?"
last paragraph
- ending the letter (a formal sentence to close politely)
"We look forward to hearing from you."
The general structure of an enquiry letter:
may begin directly with the request
information about the sender + his interest in the request made
has to indicate the source of information, which has facilitated the enquiry
A letters enquiring about people more specific
it shows clearly who you are enquiring about
describes the situation that has led to the enquiry (promotion to a top position,
new employment, a prospective merger/partnership etc.)
Recommendations:
include a set of clear questions that will help the respondent to structure the answer
accordingly
these letters should be very objective
should rely on facts
the information supplied should be used for business purposes only
getting or giving information about someone with the permission from the person
concerned
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such information must be treated confidentially
REPLIES TO ENQUIRIES
A serious businessperson will always answer an enquiry.
Answers:
- positive an order or a contract will follow
- negative (refusal)
Interested in the proposal answer it promptly!
Experienced business people move fast:
confirm the letter: orally, over the phone, by e-mail
a formal letter will be sent later
Read the enquiry reply letter below and then find in its text the parts that comply with the functions given in the list below:
a. confirming receipt of enquiry and thanking for the letter
b. expressing satisfaction for being contacted
c. giving specific information in answer to the questions in the enquiry
d. taking action
e. closing optimistically, expressing hope for future co-operation
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ROMFAST BANK23 King Ferdinand Bulevard
District 1, Bucharest Romania
20 December 2003
Your ref: SC/gc/Rom.03Our ref: OD/ms/ Amst 03
The SUNSHINE Hotels10 Lion Street 7 AHD AmsterdamThe Netherlands
Dear Mr Carlsson,Re: Your letter of 15 December 2003
Thank you for your above-mentioned letter enquiring about our banking services. As you have found out from some of our clients, our standards are high and our services prompt and efficient.
We have recently developed our range of products, including some new credit lines, which are successfully used by many large Romanian firms and foreign companies working in Romania.
We are sending you enclosed a detailed description of our products and hope that you will find them suitable for you. Please contact us by phone or e-mail if you have additional questions. Our staff will be glad to help you make the best choice.
We look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerelyODumitrescuOana DumitrescuHead of Marketing Department
2. Giving negative replies to enquiries
2.a Complete the following sentences that are often used in letters expressing refusal:
1. We are __________ that we ___________ send the goods so soon.
2. We ________sorry ______ we ________ unable to help you ______ developing the
project.
3. We are sorry to _________you that we __________invest in hotel industry.
4. We _________ that we are __________to grant you such a big loan without third-
_______ guarantee.
5. We ____________ inform you _______ the C12 video projectors are _____ of stock.
6. We _________to inform you that the opening you are interested in was filled two
weeks ago.
7. ____________, you have failed to supply the goods as per the contract.
2.b Now fill in the paragraphs below taken from two letters of refusal:
"We …1… to inform you that we no …2… manufacture the projector type you are …3… in.
Instead, we could …4… you a similar product at an affordable …5… and significantly …6…
characteristics."
" Thank you for …1… letter …2…20 June 2004 …3… about a bank …4….
After careful …5… of your documents, we …6… to …7… you that we are …8… to help
you.
…9…, you do not …10… sufficient collateral, as it results …11…your documents."
A letter of refusal
carefully worded
the general tone of the letter respect and understanding
to create a favourable atmosphere for a possible relationship in the future
Stages:
confirm receipt of the enquiry letter
express regret (for not being able to help)
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give reasons for your negative answer
offer an alternative (if possible)
end on a friendly, encouraging tone
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STAR Bank5 Long Street
Edinburgh3E 56 EG
Great Britain
Grungwald and Son24 Forest StreetAmsterdamThe Netherlands
Dear Mr GrundwaldReply to enquiry
Thank you for your letter …1…18 May 2002.
…2… your proposal is very attractive, we …3… that we are …4… to invest in your project for the moment.
…5… some management changes, we …6… restricted our …7… funds for a certain …8…of time. We …9… move back to our …10… investment …11… as …12… as some old …13… will …14…been …15…. We estimate that this will not …16…more …17…six months. …18… your proposal is really interesting; we can take your project as a priority at that time.
Thank you again for your…19….…20… our proposal does …21…fit you, we would like to …22…you every success in the future.
Yours …23…MBrayMary BrayHead of Investments Department