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Original Copy (805 words)Your Body Will Thank You January is a time for resolutions and new beginnings so I would like to introduce you to Veganuary. Instead of giving up chocolate, alcohol and promising yourself that the gym will become your second home, it can be much more simple. You don’t have to fill yourself with empty promises or starve your body to become ‘bikini ready’. There are many health benefits that come when you follow a vegan diet. Veganuary provides you with information that may encourage you to try veganism for a month. The benefits are just so good; many people welcome this lifestyle as a permanent change. Fed up of struggling to lose a few pounds? Good. Then you’re ready to make a change. You don’t need to spend your life in the gym; on the rowing machine next to that guy you like but you’re never going to talk to. It doesn’t take a biology degree to know what you should and should not be putting into your body. You will discover how to enjoy food with significantly less saturated fats and artificial sugars. This isn’t a diet; this is a new, clean, energized and pure way of life. Not only are you highly likely to loose a few pounds but also you will be naturally beaming from having clearer skin, nuts and vitamins give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails, upping your confidence and reviving your sexy. Morning breath, the least attractive thing on a morning, the messy bedhead can be seen as sexy and slid back under the duvet. Bad breath is never sexy, green tea and ginger tea boost you’re digestion while eliminating the chances of disgusting your partner during your morning smooch. Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up, by cutting red meat out of your fatty diet, your skinny self will produce less of this bacteria making you smell like that Victoria’s Secret model you’ve always wanted to be. Premenstrual syndrome is exhausting and you can find yourself both mentally and physically struggling. An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and distress, that’s if you still suffer from the syndrome at all. PMS is a hormonal imbalance that can be helped with prescription medication; why cure your body with unnatural sources when the solution is right in front of you? Low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine can reduce the intensity of PMS and in some cases, make the sleepless nights, back crippling pain and stomach cramps become non-existent. Live happy, young and forever (almost), people following this urban lifestyle have been proven to live longer, this is one step closer to immortality than the animal consumers who’s excessive fat is taking over their unfit body. Tummy Bugs & Disease You’re body is a temple, a sickness filled shrine worshiping the butchers behind the counter at Tesco. With meat comes disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol. Salmonella, a consideration only meat eaters have to be wary of. Salmonella food poisoning can easily occur in any animal product with intent to be eaten; not just the kebab shop round the corner that is rumored to have pigeons nesting in the store room. A lifestyle cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems, the likelihood of a stoke occurring is decreased, you’re vision improves as well as boosting kidney health. If you do so wish to attend the gym, at least you will be able to see that guy you like a lot clearer. When comparing greasy animal eaters to those who don’t consume animal produce, cancer is less likely to develop and it has the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our furry friends. A reverse of the illness has been known to occur from conversion to the livelier, cleaner way of life.Some things are inevitable which we have to accept, macular degeneration (and for those of you who are not biology experts, this is severe vision loss) this is something that most commonly occurs at approximately the age of 60. You can push this back to the age of 80 with a more efficient diet (you definitely wont look 80 either).Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis, scientists in their labs have been researching so you don’t have to, arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from life, your hands, knees, hips and spine will continue to dance you to death; pain free and happy. “Eating all those animals leads to degenerative-and fatal-health conditions like heart disease, kidney disease and cancer. So then man tortures and kills millions more animals to look for cures for these diseases” – Preface from Old MacDonald’s Factory Farm by C. David Coates

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January is a time for resolutions and new beginnings so I would like to introduce you to Veganuary. Instead of giving up chocolate, alcohol and promising yourself that the gym will become your second home,; it can be much more simple. You don’t have to fill yourself with empty promises or starve your body to become ‘bikini ready’. There are many health benefits that come when you follow a vegan diet. Veganuary provides you with information that may encourage you to try veganism for a month. The benefits are just so good; many people welcome this lifestyle as a permanent change. Fed up of struggling to lose a few pounds? Good. Then you’re ready to make a change. You don’t need to spend your life in the gym; on the rowing machine next to that guy you like but which you’re never going to talk to. It doesn’t take a biology degree to know what you should and should not be putting into your body. You will discover how to enjoy food with significantly less saturated fats and artificial sugars. This isn’t a diet; this is a new, clean, energized and pure way of life. Not only are you highly likely to loose a few pounds but also you will be naturally beaming from having clearer skin, nuts and vitamins give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails, upping your confidence and reviving your sexy. Morning breath,; the least attractive thing on a morning, the messy bedhead can't be seen as sexy and should slide back under the duvet. Bad breath is never sexy, green tea and ginger tea boost you’re digestion while eliminating the chances of disgusting your partner during your morning smooch. Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up, by cutting red meat out of your fatty diet, your skinny self will produce less of this bacteria making you smell like that Victoria’s Secret model you’ve always wanted to be. Premenstrual syndrome is exhausting and you can find yourself both mentally and physically struggling. An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and distress,; that’s if you still suffer from the syndrome at all. PMS is a hormonal imbalance that can be helped with prescription medication; why cure your body with unnatural sources when the solution is right in front of you? Low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine can reduce the intensity of PMS and in some cases, make the sleepless nights, crippling back pain and stomach cramps become non-existent. Live happy, young and forever (almost), people following this urban lifestyle have been proven to live longer, this is one step closer to immortality than the animal consumers who’s excessive fat is taking over their unfit body. Tummy Bugs & Disease You’re body is a temple, a sickness filled shrine worshiping the butchers behind the counter at Tesco. With meat comes disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol. Salmonella, a consideration only meat eaters have to be wary of. Salmonella food poisoning can easily occur in any animal product which people intend to eat with intent to be eaten; not just the kebab shop round the corner that is rumored to have pigeons nesting in the store room. A lifestyle cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems, the likelihood of a stoke occurring is decreased, you’re vision improves as well as boosting kidney health. If you do so wish to attend the gym, at least you will be able to see that guy you like a lot clearer. When comparing greasy animal eaters to those who don’t consume animal produce, cancer is less likely to develop and it has the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our furry friends. A reverse of the illness has been known to occur from conversion to the livelier, cleaner way of life.Some things are inevitable which we have to accept, macular degeneration (and for those of you who are not biology experts, this is severe vision loss) this is something that most commonly occurs at approximately the age of 60. You can push this back to the age of 80 with a more efficient diet (you definitely wont look 80 either).Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis. Scientists in their labs have been researching so you don’t have to; arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from their life, your hands, knees, hips and spine will continue to dance you to death; pain free and happy. “Eating all those animals leads to degenerative-and fatal-health conditions like heart disease, kidney disease and cancer. So then man tortures and kills millions more animals to look for cures for these diseases” – Preface from Old MacDonald’s Factory Farm by C. David Coates

Fact CheckingYour Body Will Thank You January is a time for resolutions and new beginnings so I would like to introduce you to Veganuary. Instead of giving up chocolate, alcohol and promising yourself that the gym will become your second home, it can be much more simple. You don’t have to fill yourself with empty promises or starve your body to become ‘bikini ready’. There are many health benefits that come when you follow a vegan diet. Veganuary provides you with information that may encourage you to try veganism for a month. The benefits are just so good; many people welcome this lifestyle as a permanent change. Fed up of struggling to lose a few pounds? Good. Then you’re ready to make a change. You don’t need to spend your life in the gym; on the rowing machine next to that guy you like but you’re never going to talk to. It doesn’t take a biology degree to know what you should and should not be putting into your body. You will discover how to enjoy food with significantly less saturated fats and artificial sugars. This isn’t a diet; this is a new, clean, energized and pure way of life. Not only are you highly likely to loose a few pounds but also you will be naturally beaming from having clearer skin, nuts and vitamins give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails, upping your confidence and reviving your sexy. Morning breath, the least attractive thing on a morning, the messy bedhead can be seen as sexy and slid back under the duvet. Bad breath is never sexy, green tea and ginger tea boost you’re digestion while eliminating the chances of disgusting your partner during your morning smooch. Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up, by cutting red meat out of your fatty diet, your skinny self will produce less of this bacteria making you smell like that Victoria’s Secret model you’ve always wanted to be. Premenstrual syndrome is exhausting and you can find yourself both mentally and physically struggling. An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and distress, that’s if you still suffer from the syndrome at all. PMS is a hormonal imbalance that can be helped with prescription medication; why cure your body with unnatural sources when the solution is right in front of you? Low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine can reduce the intensity of PMS and in some cases, make the sleepless nights, back crippling pain and stomach cramps become non-existent. Live happy, young and forever (almost), people following this urban lifestyle have been proven to live longer, this is one step closer to immortality than the animal consumers who’s excessive fat is taking over their unfit body. Tummy Bugs & Disease You’re body is a temple, a sickness filled shrine worshiping the butchers behind the counter at Tesco. With meat comes disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol. Salmonella, a consideration only meat eaters have to be wary of. Salmonella food poisoning can easily occur in any animal product with intent to be eaten; not just the kebab shop round the corner that is rumored to have pigeons nesting in the store room. A lifestyle cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems, the likelihood of a stoke occurring is decreased, you’re vision improves as well as boosting kidney health. If you do so wish to attend the gym, at least you will be able to see that guy you like a lot clearer. When comparing greasy animal eaters to those who don’t consume animal produce, cancer is less likely to develop and it has the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our furry friends. A reverse of the illness has been known to occur from conversion to the livelier, cleaner way of life.Some things are inevitable which we have to accept, macular degeneration (and for those of you who are not biology experts, this is severe vision loss) this is something that most commonly occurs at approximately the age of 60. You can push this back to the age of 80 with a more efficient diet (you definitely wont look 80 either).Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis, scientists in their labs have been researching so you don’t have to, arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from life, your hands, knees, hips and spine will continue to dance you to death; pain free and happy. “Eating all those animals leads to degenerative-and fatal-health conditions like heart disease, kidney disease and cancer. So then man tortures and kills millions more animals to look for cures for these diseases” – Preface from Old MacDonald’s Factory Farm by C. David Coates

• “nuts and vitamins give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails”- “were asked to eat 50g of peanuts a day for 6 weeks. Two women in particular noticed a huge improvement in their hair and nails... vitamins C, E and beta-carotene help protect the skin from sunburn and improve its resilience... Dermatologists often use high doses of vitamin A to treat acne," http://www.healthyfood.co.nz/articles/2008/june/8-steps-to-healthy-skin-hair-and-nails#sthash.DhINQg1T.dpuf

• “green tea and ginger tea boost you’re digestion”- “Ginger in food, or ideally as a strong tea, helps stimulate saliva, bile and gastric juice production to aid in digestion.” http://flatulencecures.com/ginger-tea-benefits-digestion “Some studies show that green tea could be an aid to digestive health and its antioxidants may be the key.” http://www.everydayhealth.com/digestive-health/can-green-tea-help-digestion.aspx

• “Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up”- “Body odor is the unpleasant smell produced by bacteria on the skin that break down the acids in your sweat.” http://www.nhs.uk/conditions/body-odour/pages/introduction.aspx

• “cutting red meat out of your fatty diet, your skinny self will produce less of this bacteria making you smell like that Victoria’s Secret model” - “Since meat is harder to digest than other foods, Kallel says, your body has to work harder to process it. "As a result," he says, "your sweat glands may respond by secreting more perspiration.”” http://www.nextavenue.org/5-foods-can-increase-your-body-odor/

• “An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and distress”- “women felt so much better [from eating vegan] that when the researchers asked them to go back to their regular diet to test before and after, several women refused, even though they were required to by the study.” http://nutritionfacts.org/2014/04/17/treating-menstrual-pain-with-diet/

• “PMS is a hormonal imbalance that can be helped with prescription medication”- “It is not due to a hormone imbalance or too little of any hormone, as was previously thought.” “A number of treatments are available.” https://www.womens-health-concern.org/help-and-advice/factsheets/premenstrual-syndrome-pms/

• “Low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine can reduce the intensity of PMS”- “Generally you should try to consume less junk food, fat, sugar, salt, caffeine and alcohol, and eat more starch, fiber, vegetables and fruit.” https://www.womens-health-concern.org/help-and-advice/factsheets/premenstrual-syndrome-pms/

• “in some cases, make the sleepless nights, back crippling pain and stomach cramps become non-existent”-• “been proven to live longer”- “Treatments may take several months to work fully and may not cure symptoms completely but symptoms often

become less frequent or easier with treatment.” https://www.womens-health-concern.org/help-and-advice/factsheets/premenstrual-syndrome-pms/ • “With meat comes disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol”- “ANIMALS ARE FED POOR-QUALITY

FEED... MEAT IS ACIDIC... MEAT IS LOADED WITH TOXINS... MEAT IS HIGH IN SATURATED FAT... EATING MEAT CAN INCREASE YOUR RISK FOR CANCER AND OSTEOPOROSIS” http://www.dummies.com/food-drink/special-diets/plant-based-diet/10-bad-things-about-eating-meat/

• “Salmonella, a consideration only meat eaters have to be wary”- “Salmonella is commonly found in raw food products that come from animals, such as eggs, egg products, meat, meat products, unpasteurized milk, or other unpasteurized dairy products.” “Salmonella can also be spread from person to person when an infected individual does not thoroughly wash his or her hands after using the toilet .” http://healthvermont.gov/prevent/salmonella/Salmonella.aspx

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Fact Checking• “Salmonella food poisoning can easily occur in any animal product”- “Salmonella is commonly found in raw food products that come

from animals, such as eggs, egg products, meat, meat products, unpasteurized milk, or other unpasteurized dairy products.” http://healthvermont.gov/prevent/salmonella/Salmonella.aspx

• “cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems”- “A vegan diet can help with high blood pressure. ... Plant foods are low in fat and sodium, contain no cholesterol, and are often rich in potassium, which also helps lower blood pressure.” http://www.yourdailyvegan.com/2013/04/even-vegans-need-to-be-mindful-of-high-blood-pressure/

• “stoke occurring is decreased”- “It appears that a vegan diet strongly protects you against strokes.” http://www.compassionatespirit.com/wpblog/2013/05/31/vegans-and-strokes/

• “vision improves”- “the vegan participants fared even better—they were a whopping 40 percent less likely to develop cataracts than the heavy meat-eaters.” http://prime.peta.org/2011/04/eye

• “boosting kidney health”- “Adjustments to diet can help certain chronic diseases, such as chronic kidney disease. These impacts are positive because a [vegan] diet can balance phosphate levels, positively affect insulin sensitivity and help control the body’s acidity levels.” http://www.globalhealingcenter.com/natural-health/10-health-benefits-vegan-vegetarian-diet/

• “cancer is less likely to develop and it has the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our furry friends”- “vegans had a statistically significant lower rate of cancer than those who consumed meat regularly.” http://www.globalhealingcenter.com/natural-health/10-health-benefits-vegan-vegetarian-diet/

• “reverse of the illness has been known to occur from conversion”- “Chris’ Story: How a Vegan Diet Helped Me Conquer Colon Cancer” http://www.everydayhealth.com/columns/my-cancer-story/healed-colon-cancer-vegan-diet/

• “macular degeneration (and for those of you who are not biology experts, this is severe vision loss)”- “Diets with lots of fresh fruits and vegetables, especially leafy greens, carrots, pumpkin, and sweet potatoes, can help prevent the onset of age-related macular degeneration.” https://uglicoyote.wordpress.com/tag/macular-degeneration/

• “push this back to the age of 80”- cant find proof of fact• “Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis”- “In the UK, 8.75 million people in the UK have sought treatment

for osteoarthritis” http://www.arthritisresearchuk.org/arthritis-information/data-and-statistics/data-by-condition/osteoarthritis.aspx • “arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from life”- “In some people, the immune system sees gluten

as the enemy and will unleash weapons to attack it, causing inflammation in the intestines as well as in other organs and tissues”( this is a cause of arthritis and by eliminating gluten this may be avoided) http://www.arthritis.org/living-with-arthritis/arthritis-diet/anti-inflammatory/gluten-free-diet.php

• ““Eating all those animals leads to degenerative-and fatal-health conditions like heart disease, kidney disease and cancer. So then man tortures and kills millions more animals to look for cures for these diseases” – Preface from Old MacDonald’s Factory Farm by C. David Coates”-Quoted correctly http://www.goodreads.com/quotes/112445-isn-t-man-an-amazing-animal-he-kills-wildlife---birds

Reducing Word CountYour Body Will Thank You January is a time for resolutions and new beginnings so I would like to introduce you to Veganuary. Instead of giving up chocolate, alcohol and promising yourself that the gym will become your second home, it can be much more simple. You don’t have to fill yourself with empty promises or starve your body to become ‘bikini ready’. There are many health benefits that come when you follow a vegan diet. Veganuary provides you with information that may encourage you to try veganism for a month. The benefits are just so good; many people welcome this lifestyle as a permanent change. Fed up of struggling to lose a few pounds? Good. Then you’re ready to make a change. You don’t need to spend your life in the gym; on the rowing machine next to that guy you like but you’re never going to talk to. It doesn’t take a biology degree to know what you should and should not be putting into your body. You will discover how to enjoy food with significantly less saturated fats and artificial sugars. This isn’t a diet; this is a new, clean, energized and pure way of life. Not only are you highly likely to loose a few pounds but also you will be naturally beaming from having clearer skin, nuts and vitamins give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails, upping your confidence and reviving your sexy. Morning breath, the least attractive thing on a morning, the messy bedhead can be seen as sexy and slid back under the duvet. Bad breath is never sexy, green tea and ginger tea boost you’re digestion while eliminating the chances of disgusting your partner during your morning smooch. Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up, by cutting red meat out of your fatty diet, your skinny self will produce less of this bacteria making you smell like that Victoria’s Secret model you’ve always wanted to be. Premenstrual syndrome is exhausting and you can find yourself both mentally and physically struggling. An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and distress, that’s if you still suffer from the syndrome at all. PMS is a hormonal imbalance that can be helped with prescription medication; why cure your body with unnatural sources when the solution is right in front of you? Low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine can reduce the intensity of PMS and in some cases, make the sleepless nights, back crippling pain and stomach cramps become non-existent. Live happy, young and forever (almost), people following this urban lifestyle have been proven to live longer, this is one step closer to immortality than the animal consumers who’s excessive fat is taking over their unfit body. Tummy Bugs & Disease You’re body is a temple, a sickness filled shrine worshiping the butchers behind the counter at Tesco. With meat comes disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol. Salmonella, a consideration only meat eaters have to be wary of. Salmonella food poisoning can easily occur in any animal product with intent to be eaten; not just the kebab shop round the corner that is rumored to have pigeons nesting in the store room. A lifestyle cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems, the likelihood of a stoke occurring is decreased, you’re vision improves as well as boosting kidney health. If you do so wish to attend the gym, at least you will be able to see that guy you like a lot clearer. When comparing greasy animal eaters to those who don’t consume animal produce, cancer is less likely to develop and it has the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our furry friends. A reverse of the illness has been known to occur from conversion to the livelier, cleaner way of life.Some things are inevitable which we have to accept, macular degeneration (and for those of you who are not biology experts, this is severe vision loss) this is something that most commonly occurs at approximately the age of 60. You can push this back to the age of 80 with a more efficient diet (you definitely wont look 80 either).Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis, scientists in their labs have been researching so you don’t have to, arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from life, your hands, knees, hips and spine will continue to dance you to death; pain free and happy. “Eating all those animals leads to degenerative-and fatal-health conditions like heart disease, kidney disease and cancer. So then man tortures and kills millions more animals to look for cures for these diseases” – Preface from Old MacDonald’s Factory Farm by C. David Coates

Final Copy (500 words)Your Body Will Thank You January is a time for resolutions and new beginnings so instead of attempting to give up chocolate or promising yourself a gym membership why don’t you try something new and give Veganuary a go. There are many health benefits that come when you follow a vegan diet; Veganuary provides a range of relevant information encouraging you try veganism for a month. The benefits are so good; you may even welcome this lifestyle as a permanent change. Going vegan will provide a number of health benefits Not only are you highly likely to lose a few pounds from your healthy eating but your skin is also likely to become clearer; nuts and vitamins help to give you strong and healthy skin, hair and nails, increasing your confidence and helping you to feel revived.Another benefit comes from drinking green tea and ginger tea rather than breakfast tea with cow’s milk, the contents of these help to boost your digestion; yet another health benefit of the vegan lifestyle. Bodily odor is produced because of bacteria build up, by cutting red meat out of your diet, you will produce less of this bacteria making you feel and smell cleaner. Premenstrual syndrome is exhausting and you can find yourself both mentally and physically struggling. An animal product free lifestyle can reduce the pain and discomfort you may be feeling at that time of the month. PMS can be helped with prescription medication, but why use unnatural sources when the solution is right in front of you? The vegan diet offers low levels of fats, salt, sugar and caffeine meaning it can reduce the intensity of PMS and in some cases, make the sleepless nights, back pain and stomach cramps non-existent. Meat can carry disease, drugs / hormones, bacteria, pesticides / chemicals, parasites, fat & cholesterol. So why take the risk when you can eat vegan? A lifestyle cutting out meat can lower a high blood pressure, meaning you’re less likely to have heart problems, the likelihood of a stoke occurring is also decreased and your kidney health is boosted these benefits are also accompanied by the possibility of improved vision.Another health benefit to add to the list is the decreased likeliness of developing arthritis. Approximately 8 million people in the UK are affected by arthritis, scientists have conducted research and have found that arthritis can be less likely to occur to those who have eliminated gluten from their life.When comparing animal eaters to those who don’t consume animal produce, cancer is also less likely to develop, meaning vegans have the lowest number of cases amongst those who don’t consume our animal friends. A reverse of the illness has also been known to occur from the conversion to a Vegan lifestyle.After hearing about all of these health benefits which following the vegan lifestyle can provide I hope I have encouraged you to give it a go and take part in this year’s Veganuary. You won’t be disappointed!