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Original article - 432 wordsVeganism: A philosophy and way of living. Veganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary is a global campaign that launched in January 2014 to help encourage people to try vegan for January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January 2014, the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise awareness of this lifestyle. Veganism not only helps to reduce the suffering of animals and help the planet but also improves personal health. Due to the fact vegans do not eat animals or their products, they must find the essential nutrients they need from plant based sources, vegan alternatives and fortified foods. This means that vegans eat a lot more fruits and vegetables than omnivores. Vegans get the most amount of nutrients they can from their food and are keen to make sure they know how to get everything they need such as iron. However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that can be hard for vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by bacteria but is also added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. A supplement of B12 is the easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet. Not only do vegans tend to be more well informed of what their body needs and what their food contains but avoiding meat and animal products can help to virtually eliminate the most severe diseases such as cardiovascular disease, obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and e.coli infections. A vegan diet can be more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become less intense or disappear altogether. This is due to the elimination of dairy from their diet. Veganism helps the environment and helps to stop excess greenhouse gases. Over 70 billion land animals such as cows, pigs and chickens are specifically bred, farmed and killed for food every year. This does not include sea creatures and other animals bred for fur and skin trades. The meat industry has a big impact on the environment and how use our natural resources. 70% of the fresh water produced is used for the meat industry and takes 2500 gallons of water for 1 pound of beef. This is equivalent to 100 pounds of wheat. 70% of the worlds grain harvest is fed to livestock while the other 30% is used for the entire worlds population. Only 50% of grain harvest could feed all the starving people in the world if only people would stop eating meat.

Fact checking

“With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January 2014”

• https://faunalytics.org/feature-article/veganuary-2014-report/

• With this reference the information provided seems relatively accurate.

“vegans eat a lot more fruit than omnivores”

• https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3967195/

• According to this source vegans do consume more fruit and vegetables on average than omnivores.

“A vegan diet can be more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become less intense or disappear altogether. This is

due to the elimination of dairy from their diet”

• https://medium.com/clued-in/no-meat-no-problem-the-effect-of-veganism-and-vegetarianism-on-the-menstrual-cycle-d78cb32a5245#.1tka4wbkb

• According to this website it is true that the vegan diet does help to reduce several symptoms of PMS and may therefore be beneficial to them.

“Veganism Veganism helps the environment and helps to stop excess greenhouse gases”

• https://www.theguardian.com/lifeandstyle/2010/jul/18/vegetarianism-save-planet-environment

• This source suggests that being vegan does have a positive impact on the environment

“70% of the fresh water produced is used for the meat industry”

• http://www.worldwatch.org/peak-meat-production-strains-land-and-water-resources-1

• According to this source this it would be more accurate to refer to the industry responsible for 70% of fresh water use as the agriculture industry however apart from that it seems to be accurate.

“Takes 2500 gallons for 1 pound of beef”

• http://www.peta.org/videos/meat-wastes-water/

• This website uses the statistic that 1 pound of beef uses 2400 gallons of water but the figures are close so the information is relitivly accurate.

“70% of the worlds grain harvest is fed to livestock while the other 30% is used for the entire worlds

population”

• http://www.earthsave.org/environment.htm • This source claims that the information

provided is accurate

“Only 50% of grain harvest could feed all the starving people in the world if only people would stop eating meat”

• http://www.earthsave.org/environment.htm • This source backs up the information provided

in the article.

Grammar and spelling alterations

“to help encourage people to try vegan for January”

• I have altered the grammar of this sentence so that it is more clear.

• “to help encourage more people to try a vegan diet in January”

“Vegans get the most amount of nutrients they can from their food and are keen to make sure they know

how to get everything they need such as iron”

• I have changed the grammar in this sentence slightly so that it is more clear to read.

• “Vegans try to get all of the nutrients they can from their food and are usually very conscious of the foods that will provide all of the things that they need”

“e.coli”

• I have changes the spelling of this word to the correct one given when I searched I up.

• “E. coli”

Additions made

Why have I made additions

• The optimum word count for the article was around 500 words and the original document was only 432 words long. Therefore I felt as if the article needed a few more words to bring it up to the 500 word mark.

• Original: “However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that can be hard for vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by bacteria but is also added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. A supplement of B12 is the easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet”

• Updated: “However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that can be hard for vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by bacteria but is also added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. This means that you would have to eat a large amount of fortified cereals in order to achieve your RDA. A supplement of B12 is the easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet as you can control the amount you need and not be restricted in the food you have every day.

• This increased the word count to 474 words.

• Original: “Veganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary is a global campaign that launched in January 2014 to help encourage people to try vegan for January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January 2014, the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise awareness of this lifestyle”

• Updated:” Veganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary is a global campaign that launched in January 2014 to help encourage more people to try vegan diet in January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January 2014, the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise awareness of this lifestyle. Its shorter timescale of a month makes the event almost like a short diet or trial run of being vegan and therefore makes the event more achievable and realistic for more people”

• This altered the word count to 508

Updated article - 508 wordsVeganism is a widely controversial way of living that seeks to exclude the exploitation of animals for food, clothing, testing and entertainment. Veganuary is a global campaign that launched in January 2014 to help encourage more people to try vegan diet in January. With a success of 3,200 people ready to commit in January 2014, the campaign has gone from strength to strength to help raise awareness of this lifestyle. Its shorter timescale of a month makes the event almost like a short diet or trial run of being vegan and therefore makes the event more achievable and realistic for more people Veganism not only helps to reduce the suffering of animals and help the planet but also improves personal health. Due to the fact vegans do not eat animals or their products, they must find the essential nutrients they need from plant based sources, vegan alternatives and fortified foods. This means that vegans eat a lot more fruits and vegetables than omnivores. Vegans try to get all of the nutrients they can from their food and are usually very conscious of the foods that will provide all of the things that they need. However, vitamin B12 is a vitamin that can be hard for vegans to obtain as it is found in meat, which is created by bacteria but is also added to fortified foods such as breakfast cereals. This means that you would have to eat a large amount of fortified cereals in order to achieve your RDA. A supplement of B12 is the easiest way to make sure you do not lack it in your diet as you can control the amount you need and not be restricted in the food you have every day. Not only do vegans tend to be more well informed of what their body needs and what their food contains but avoiding meat and animal products can help to virtually eliminate the most severe diseases such as cardiovascular disease, obesity, type 2 diabetes, diverticulosis and E. coli infections. A vegan diet can be more beneficial to women as PMS symptoms become less intense or disappear altogether. This is due to the elimination of dairy from their diet. Veganism helps the environment and helps to stop excess greenhouse gases. Over 70 billion land animals such as cows, pigs and chickens are specifically bred, farmed and killed for food every year. This does not include sea creatures and other animals bred for fur and skin trades. The meat industry has a big impact on the environment and how use our natural resources. 70% of the fresh water produced is used for the meat industry and takes 2500 gallons of water for 1 pound of beef. This is equivalent to 100 pounds of wheat. 70% of the worlds grain harvest is fed to livestock while the other 30% is used for the entire worlds population. Only 50% of grain harvest could feed all the starving people in the world if only people would stop eating meat.