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Revising Your Rough Draft
9410017A Ida 9410033A Jack
9424007A Karen
8a-Principles of revision Psychological process For example: Every writer who wishes to write well must learn
to revise “his” work.
Mechanical process grammatical errors, misstatements of opinions, poor word usage,
paragraph is tedious with details.
8a-1 Rereading your writing 1.repeat to reread of the first draft 2.check the paper at least three times
8a-2 Revising the paper from biggest to smallest elements
1.ignore the mistakes such as grammatical errors, misspell word and punctuation.
8b- Revising the opening paragraph
• induce the readers’ interest
• thesis not to be vague and messy
• thesis statement to be more clearly and just one point to explain the purpose
8b-1 Revising the introduction Opening paragraphs consist of two sections: an
introduction and a thesis.
There are three strategies for beginning a paper.A. Use a quotation B. Ask a questionC. Present an illustration
A. Use a quotation : 1. plunge into the topic quickly 2. well-known saying who ever states 3. use the quotation properly to related your topic and
thesis statement For example: Smith (1997) has commented “the
suicidal teen causes severe damage to the psychological condition of peers” (p. 34).
B. Ask a question: 1. lead to do the direction of paper exactly For example: Would you agree that peer feedback can
enhance student English writing ability?.............
C. Present an illustration 1. use anecdotes or examples properly 2. make readers follow you For example, use the one of versions in Cinderella’s
story
8b-2 Check that your paragraphs follow the sequence of topics in the thesis
the topic sentences of your paragraphs must follow the same sequence as the main points of your thesis statement
For example: Thesis statement: Television can have positive effects on
a child’s language development such as introduces new words, reinforces word usage, and come alive verbally.
It covers this sequence of topics: 1. An introduction to television that can have positive
effects on a child’s language development 2. advantages of introduces new words 3. reinforces word usage 4. come alive verbally
8b-3 Revising the body paragraphs
1. cut out wordiness and irrelevant thoughts
2. divide a long paragraph into two paragraphs
8b-4 Check paragraph transitions 1. move the reader effectively from one
paragraph to the next
2. connect the paragraphs together
Variety is easy to recognize and define. Style is conspicuous in its absence but subtle in its
presence. A passage that monotonously uses the same kind of
sentence again and again is not only boring, it is also without style.
Poetry is regarded by many as the highest literary art form. Poetry is seen nowadays as an unpopular form. Poetry used to be read very widely by the middle classes. Poetry no longer enjoys that distinction and today is hardly read by anyone.
Poetry is regarded by many as the highest literary art form. Nowadays, however it has become unpopular. Whereas poetry used to be read very widely by the middle classes, today it hardly is ever read by anyone.
Learn to juxtapose short and long sentence. Follow several short sentences with a long sentences.
Learn to subordinate. It means that you must place lesser thoughts “sub,” or below, the main idea.
(ex. The car still runs well, but it is not worth selling. The car, which still runs well, is not worth selling.
Learn to use parallel constructions.
Whenever you can, use the active voice in your writing. With two exceptions call for the passive voice
◦ For an occasional change of pace◦ For the sake of focus, especially when the action is more
important than the actor
Egyptologists have propounded all sorts of mystical theories, but most experts today have concluded that the Great Pyramid was built by Egyptian citizens using the simplest of tools and technology.
Egyptologists have propounded all sorts of mystical theories, but most experts today have concluded that Egyptian citizens, using the simplest of tools and technology, built the Great Pyramid
Most instructors insisted that research papers be written only from the third-person point of view, in an attempt to keep the writing objective
Only use the first-person point of view only for expressing personal comments, judgments, or experiences.
In your writing, watch for language that reflects the values and biases of a male dominated society.
A doctor should always look after the best interest of his patients.Doctors should always look after the best interest of their
patients.A doctor should always look after the best interest of his or
her patients.
Revising words : Diction Wording choice and usage comes under the
heading of diction.
Using words as following Exactness Appropriateness Accuracy
Revise diction for accuracy and exactness The best writing is concise and to the point. No more, no less.
The ratification of the agreement by the board requires a vote of a majority.
To ratify the agreement, the board needs a majority vote.
The board needs a majority vote to ratify the agreement.
Revise the overuse of phrases for subjects instead of single nouns
Revise redundant expressions -unnecessary words used to repeat During that time period the park area was
populated with Indians who were sullen in appearance and made a living by working with silver metal.
Instead→ During that time the park was populated with Indians who looked sullen and made a living by working with silver.
The problem of world hunger is by and large a matter of business and politics. Basically the two become virtually entwined until for all intents and purposes they cannot be addressed separately in any given city or country.
Instead→ The problem of world hunger is a matter of business and politics. The two become entwined until they cannot be addressed separately in any city or country.
Revise meaningless words and phrases
Revise Snobbish Diction Snobbish diction consists of words used not to clarify
but to impress. A person desirous of an interview must be cognizant
of the fact that interviewer may have dozens of other candidates to evaluate. A smart candidate endeavors to utilize the time wisely, facilitating the interviewer in ascertaining the candidate’s qualifications.
Instead→ A person wanting an interview must be aware that interviewer may have dozens of other candidates to evaluate. A smart candidate tries to use the time wisely, helping the interviewer find out the candidate’s qualifications.
Rules for writers. Not.
43 lists can reference. As the following<pick some to discuss> For example: 1.Verbs has to agree with their subjects. →He thinks. 3.And don’t start a sentence with a conjunction. → I am a teacher. And I can teach. 10.No sentence fragments. →I like to teach. Because I am a good teacher.
16.Eschew ampersands & abbreviations, etc.
→e.g.=For Example 19.The passive voice should never be used. →Two exceptions call for the passive voice 1.for an occasional change of places. 2.for the sake of focus. 25.Use the apostrophe in it’s proper place
and omit it when its not needed. →Chang’s (2006) study showed that… 43.Proofread carefully to see if you any
words out. →Proofread is another revision.