6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

51
July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06 1 6 th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept: Writers prewrite by using a writer’s notebook to generate ideas and experiment with notebook entries. Student Action: Writers generate ideas for personal narratives by thinking about a person or place that matters to them and a small moment experience related to that person or place. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what you want them to do). Elements of a personal narrative should already have been discussed in the immersion phase. If not, you will need to do this. Students should already have a writing notebook prepared. They will need a notebook or loose-leaf paper in a folder for this lesson. Already have writing partnerships arranged. A routine of expectations for classroom should already be set. Prepare students to begin mini-lesson by going over the expectations and sitting them next to their writing partners. If students are struggling with ideas, ask them to focus on school experiences (field trips, fun activities from their school experiences). If students are advanced writers, be prepared to let them move ahead and begin writing about their ideas. Materials Pre-chosen topics to model in front of students (see chart below) Idea for class example in your mind (you will need to create one with kids) Anchor chart with elements of a personal narrative (see attached) I Do It (12-15 minutes) Connection Teach Explicitly define what a personal narrative is. A personal narrative is a true story of something that happened to you. Review the elements of a personal narrative on an anchor chart. Explain to students that over the next 4 weeks they will be learning to write personal narrative stories. Elements of Personal Narrative 1. A nonfiction text that recreates an experience from an author’s life 2. Usually has a strong point of view 3. Communicates a distinct mood or overall feeling 4. Most personal narratives are about important moments or places 5. Writers use sensory details—what they saw, heard, touched, smelled, and tasted 6. Writers use important events, characters, and dialogue 7. Focuses on one particular event in the author’s life—a clear small moment Write a person who matters or a place that matters on the board. Explain to students that today they will be generating ideas to help get their brains ready for developing a personal narrative. By generating ideas we are spending time thinking about what experiences we have had that may be interesting to write about. Explain that we will include a clear, small moment that mattered to you (with that person or that place). A small moment should be something we can remember with crystal clarity. Demonstrate step-by-step the strategy for generating an idea for a story by

Transcript of 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

Page 1: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

1

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1

Concept: Writers prewrite by using a writer’s notebook to generate ideas and experiment with notebook entries.

Student Action: Writers generate ideas for personal narratives by thinking about a person or place that matters to them and a small moment experience related to that person or place. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Elements of a personal narrative should already have been discussed in the immersion phase. If not, you will need to do this.

Students should already have a writing notebook prepared. They will need a notebook or loose-leaf paper in a folder for this lesson.

Already have writing partnerships arranged. A routine of expectations for classroom should already be set. Prepare

students to begin mini-lesson by going over the expectations and sitting them next to their writing partners.

If students are struggling with ideas, ask them to focus on school experiences (field trips, fun activities from their school experiences).

If students are advanced writers, be prepared to let them move ahead and begin writing about their ideas.

Materials Pre-chosen topics to model in front of students (see chart below)

Idea for class example in your mind (you will need to create one with kids)

Anchor chart with elements of a personal narrative (see attached)

I Do It (12-15 minutes)

Connection

Teach

Explicitly define what a personal narrative is. A personal narrative is a true story of something that happened to you. Review the elements of a personal narrative on an anchor chart. Explain to students that over the next 4 weeks they will be learning to write personal narrative stories.

Elements of Personal Narrative 1. A nonfiction text that recreates an experience from an author’s life 2. Usually has a strong point of view 3. Communicates a distinct mood or overall feeling 4. Most personal narratives are about important moments or places 5. Writers use sensory details—what they saw, heard, touched, smelled, and tasted 6. Writers use important events, characters, and dialogue 7. Focuses on one particular event in the author’s life—a clear small moment

Write a person who matters or a place that matters on the board. Explain to students that today they will be generating ideas to help get their brains ready for developing a personal narrative. By generating ideas we are spending time thinking about what experiences we have had that may be interesting to write about.

Explain that we will include a clear, small moment that mattered to you (with that person or that place). A small moment should be something we can remember with crystal clarity.

Demonstrate step-by-step the strategy for generating an idea for a story by

Page 2: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

2

creating your own list in front of them. Make sure to include the small moment concept in your modeling.

Example:

A Person/Place That Matters

Person or Place Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

My son Sam Our first swim in the pool on vacation

The forest/woods behind my house when I was growing up

Playing with my neighborhood friend Stephanie when she broke her leg

falling out of a tree.

teacher/student (self) Students walked into classroom on the first day of school. The first hour.

Remind them: A small moment is one particular part of an experience. It narrows down your viewpoint. A good concept to remind students of is seed vs. watermelon (Lucy Calkins). The watermelon is the whole broad/big topic, the seed is the small moment story within.

Think Aloud: I am going to list myself (from a teacher point of view) and focus on the moment that students walked into my classroom on the first day of school. I remember how nervous I was, and how my stomach felt like it had butterflies in it. I remember exactly what specific students were wearing and how many of you looked at me with a bit of nervousness in your eyes.

After completing the example, offer a non-example. Non-Example:

A Person/Place That Matters

Person/Place Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

My son Sam Going to Florida for our first Spring Break

The forest/woods behind my house when I was growing up

Playing every day with my friends in the woods

Teacher/Student First day of school

Explain that the clear small moments in the non-example are too broad and would be too much to write about at once.

The non-examples would make better books with chapters.

When we write too broadly (about too much) it is difficult to describe with clear details and our writing can become like a list.

Page 3: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

3

We Do It (10 minutes)

Active Engagement

Ask students to think about a person or place that matters to them and the clear small moment they experienced—Write it down.

Ask students to turn and talk with a partner about what they wrote down.

Ask students to write down his/her partner’s ideas. This is an explicit instruction technique to keep students on task during share. They write their partners ideas in order to keep each other accountable.

Circulate and write down 2-3 examples you hear being talked about.

Share out the few ideas you recorded as you circulated through the room. Example: Teacher says, “As I was moving around the room Sarah shared that she was going to write about getting a pedicure with her grandmother. I also heard that Josh was going to write about his football coach and the first game when he scored a touchdown for his team.”

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point

(3 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (20 minutes)

Link

Students create a t-chart (like above) in their notebooks.

Students develop a minimum of three examples of people or places and clear small moments that matter.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

(5 minutes)

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Collect the t-chart and evaluate whether students identified people or places and clear small moments which mattered to them.

Page 4: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

4

Elements of Personal Narrative Anchor Chart A nonfiction text that recreates an experience from

an author’s life

Usually has a strong point of view

Communicates a distinct mood or overall feeling

Most personal narratives are about important

moments or places

Writers use sensory details—what they saw, heard,

touched, smelled, and tasted

Writers use important events, characters, and

dialogue

Focuses on one particular event in the author’s life—

a clear small moment

Page 5: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

5

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 2

Concept: Writers prewrite by using a writer’s notebook to generate more specific ideas and experiment with notebook entries.

Student Action: Writers generate ideas for personal narratives by thinking about a turning point in their lives. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Students should already have a writing notebook prepared. They will need a notebook or loose-leaf paper in a folder for this lesson.

Already have writing partnerships arranged.

A routine of expectations for classroom should already be set. Prepare students to begin mini-lesson by going over the expectations and sitting them next to their writing partners.

If students are struggling with ideas, ask them to focus on school experiences (field trips, fun activities from their school experiences).

If students are advanced writers, be prepared to let them move ahead and begin writing about their ideas.

Materials Pre-chosen topics to model in front of students (see chart below)

I Do It

Connection

Teach

Remind students of the explicit definition of a personal narrative. A personal narrative is a true story of something that happened to you. Remind them that over the next 4 weeks they will be learning to write personal narrative stories.

Write turning points on the board. Explain to students that today they will be generating additional ideas to help get their brains ready for developing a personal narrative. By generating more ideas we are spending time thinking about what additional experiences we have had that may be interesting to write about.

Explain that a turning point is a time in life when you feel like you have learned something really important. Often it can be the first or last time you did something. If a writer thinks about a time he or she learned something or a time of change, this is apt to produce a powerful story.

Explain that we will include a clear, small moment that mattered to you (related to that turning point). A small moment should be something we can remember with crystal clarity.

Demonstrate step-by-step the strategy for generating an idea for a story by creating your own list of turning points in front of them. Make sure to include the small moment concept in your modeling.

Page 6: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

6

Example:

Turning Points

Turning Points Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

Meeting my little sister for the first time at the hospital

I remember the very moment I first looked into her eyes.

Earning a black belt in karate The test to earn the black belt was really intense and I had to complete several tasks in front of an audience.

PUT CLASS CREATED EXAMPLE HERE

Remind them: A small moment is one particular part of an experience. It narrows down your viewpoint.

Think Aloud: I am going to list the first time I went to the hospital to meet my little sister. I was so scared and confused because I felt a little jealous. I wasn’t sure I wanted to have to share my mom with someone else. Once I looked into her little blue eyes I melted. She smelled so sweet like baby lotion and her tiny fingers would grab onto my finger.

After completing the example, offer the non-example:

Non-Example:

Turning Points

Turning Points Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

Meeting my little sister for the first time at the hospital

The day building up to when she was born and the day she came home

Earning a black belt in karate Learning karate

Explain that the clear small moments in the non-example are too broad and would be too much to write about at once.

The non-examples would make better books with chapters.

When we write too broadly (about too much) it is difficult to describe with clear details and our writing becomes like a list.

We Do It

Active Engagement

Ask students to think about a turning point that matters to them and the clear small moment that goes along with it—Write it down.

Ask students to turn and talk with a partner about what they wrote down.

Ask students to write down his/her partner’s ideas.

Circulate and write down 2-3 examples you hear being discussed.

Share out the few ideas you recorded as you circulated through the room. Example: Teacher says, “As I was moving around the room I heard Jasmine shared that she was going to write about the day she brought her puppy home. I also heard that Eli was going to write about his solo on stage singing for the first time.”

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

Page 7: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

7

You Do It

Link

Students create a t-chart (like above) in their notebooks.

Students develop a minimum of two examples of turning points and clear small moments that matter.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Collect the t-chart and evaluate whether students identified turning points and clear small moments which mattered to them.

Page 8: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

8

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 3

Concept: Writers prewrite by using a writer’s notebook to generate ideas and experiment with notebook entries.

Student Action: Writers generate ideas for personal narratives by identifying a strong emotion to match people, place, or turning point experiences. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

If you have not already taught about emotions you will need to spend some time discussing different emotions and what they mean (see attached chart).

Thesaurus resource could be useful if you have taught how to use this. Person/Place/Turning Points Chart from previous two days needs to be

completed.

The third example on the chart is not filled out because it is part of the “we do” portion of this lesson.

Materials Pre-chosen emotions to match your previous examples. Be prepared to model in front of students (see chart below).

Word List (attached)

I Do It

Connection

Teach

Review the T-charts from the previous two lessons with students. Explain that today we will be adding a strong emotion to each of the identified people/places/turning points.

Explain that it is easier to write well if we are writing about a small moment that has strong emotion tied to it. Strong emotion can help us to visualize the person/event/place and clearly describe it with our senses.

Add a third column title “Strong Emotion” to each of the charts from previous lessons (see below).

Demonstrate step-by-step the strategy for adding a strong emotion to each of the charted ideas. Think Aloud, modeling the “Mind-Movie Strategy.” Make sure to refer only to the emotions which tie to the small moment. Use the chart following this lesson to show how to make a general emotion much more descriptive by using the Emotions/Feelings word list for ideas.

Example:

A Person/Place Who Matters

Person/Place Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

Strong Emotion

The forest/woods behind my house when I was growing up

Playing with my neighborhood friend

Stephanie when she broke her leg falling out of a tree.

Fear, panic, shaking and queasy stomach, screaming with adrenaline, worry

PUT THE CLASS CREATED EXAMPLE HERE

Page 9: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

9

Turning Points

Turning Points Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

Strong Emotion

Meeting my little sister for the first time at the hospital

I remember the very moment I first looked into her eyes.

Heart pounding quickly, my heart melted, caring, protective

PUT THE CLASS CREATED EXAMPLE HERE

Remind them: A small moment is one particular part of an experience. It narrows down your viewpoint. The emotion you record should match specifically to that clear small moment.

Think Aloud: I am going to use the mind movie strategy to try to remember emotions for each of these people/places/turning points I have listed. I am going to think about which emotions are connected to my time with meeting my little sister for the first time (close your eyes and think aloud as you replay the event aloud, stop frequently and add emotion for specific portions of the mind movie). I am using the make a mind movie strategy because it helps me to remember more clearly. By replaying the event like a movie, I can remember things I might have otherwise forgotten. Once I have a general emotion in my mind, I can refer to this list to help me find a word that is really descriptive of my emotion.

After completing the example, offer the non-example: Non-Example:

A Person Who Matters

Person/Place/Turning Point

Clear Small Moments That Matter to You

Strong Emotion

The forest/woods behind my house when I was growing up

Playing with my neighborhood friend Stephanie when she broke her leg falling out of a tree.

scared

Meeting my little sister for the first time at the hospital

I remember the very moment I first looked into her eyes.

excited

Explain that the strong emotions in the non-example are too broad and make for boring writing. The more descriptive you can get with emotion, the better picture you create for readers.

Page 10: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

10

We Do It

Active Engagement

Have students use the class example from the t-charts they have created and complete the sentence starter below 1. When I ___________________ I felt ________ ______because

________________________. 2. Example: When I met my little sister for the first time I felt protective

because she was so little and helpless.

Have students turn and talk with a partner using the sentence starter language you have provided. Ask them to practice the mind-movie strategy (closing their eyes and placing themselves back in the moment).

Circulate and write down 2-3 examples you hear being discussed.

Share out the few ideas you recorded as you circulated through the room.

Example: Teacher says, “As I was moving around the room I heard Sonya share that... I heard Thomas say that....”

Record the strong emotions you share with the class on the chart.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It

Link

Students add a column to each of the t-charts (like above) in their notebooks.

Students develop a minimum of three examples of emotions to enhance their people/places/turning points from previous two lessons.

Students will place a star/circle/etc. next to the topic that they would like to write about. Encourage students to choose the topic which they have identified emotion with.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Collect the t-chart and evaluate whether students identified strong emotions or not.

Page 11: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

11

Page 12: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

12

Page 13: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

13

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small

moments you remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small

moments that occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small

moments that occurred related to that turning point.

(lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings.

(lesson 3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it.

(lesson 3)

Page 14: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

14

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 4 (2 days)

Concept: Writers begin to draft by examining strong student samples in order to deeply understand narrative structure.

Student Action: Writers learn how to plan and organize their thoughts by recording them onto a plot diagram. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

If a plot-diagram is too complex for a struggling student, you may opt to use the Story Frame instead (attached)

Review components of a personal narrative 1. A nonfiction text that recreates an experience from an author’s life 2. Usually has a strong point of view 3. Communicates a distinct mood or overall feeling 4. Most personal narratives are about important moments or places 5. Writers use sensory details—what they saw, heard, touched, smelled, and tasted 6. Writers use important events, characters, and dialogue 7. Focuses on one particular event in the author’s life—a clear small moment

Materials Narrative Samples (see attached)

Plot diagram completed (see attached)

Blank plot diagram (see attached)

Story Frame (see attached) for struggling students only

I Do It (12-15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Read through the student sample provided. Facilitate conversation around the craft of the narrative (ex: What do you like about this writing? What do you think is done well? Can you tell what the small moment is? What sensory details can you identify?)

Introduce the completed plot diagram. Point out that a plot diagram is a tool which can be used to plan and draft a narrative. Explain the important points identified on the plot diagram. Draw connections between the plot diagram and how it can be helpful in planning a well-written narrative.

Example

completed plot diagram (attached) typed personal narrative (attached)

Non-Example

use non-example attached to show students what can happen if you do not plan out your narrative

We Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Active

Engagement

Guided Practice—Using the class created example topic (from previous lessons) and map out your plot diagram step by step together.

Before recording each idea, give students 1-2 minutes to discuss with a partner on which events will be recorded next. By completing this activity together, and yet allowing for some think time for students to process, you will be able to give instructional feedback and hopefully clarify confusion.

Model how you draft the plot diagram by thinking aloud in front of students.

Page 15: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

15

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point

(3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2)

Link

Review plot-diagram from yesterday’s example.

Students plan their own story with plot diagram.

Teacher circulates.

After the Workshop Share

(5 minutes)

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Collect the plot diagram and evaluate whether students have a well drafted plan for their personal narrative.

Page 16: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

16

Climbing the Snow King—Personal Narrative Example

Author: Sam

My parents have always taught me to give it my all. They

have told me over and over that I can do anything I put my

mind to, even if it scares me a little. I knew what I was about to

do was going to take some perseverance…but I was ready.

Slap! I shut my book as Mom called to me. “Ready to

hike?” she asked.

“Absolutely!” I nodded and replied.

It was a sunny August morning in Jackson, Wyoming. We

were on a family vacation. Even though I had been there three

times, I had been eager to return. Last summer, Mom, Dad, and

I hiked up a mountain named Snow King. It is used for skiing in

the winter. I loved the challenge of the hike so much that we

decided to do it again. I wanted today’s hike to be as much fun

as last year’s. I hoped it would be even more fun because my

grandparents were hiking with us this time.

We walked out of our hotel and onto a street. It was a fairly

long walk, but soon enough we were at the base of the

towering mountain. Horses trekked up a winding, steep path.

Their riders bounced around as the horses jogged. Their tales

swished back and forth, swatting at flies that were buzzing in

the tall mountain grass. It seemed kind of mean but I was

Page 17: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

17

secretly hoping the flies would get filled up with horse blood. I

shivered at the idea of bites all over my legs and arms. That is

one thing I could definitely do without on this hike.

The walking trail was beside the horse trail. I pointed to a

steep shortcut on the trail while I raced toward it yelling, “Let’s

go!”

I had to take big, running strides to climb the trail. After a

while I was breathing quickly and needed to stop. The sun was

intense. I was afraid that if climbing this part of the trail was so

difficult, we wouldn’t be able to make it to the top.

When my grandmother reached the shortcut, she was

struggling. “You know what folks, I have to say I think I am

going to need to take the lift up the rest of the way. There just

isn’t enough giddy-up in this old mare,” she giggled. “I’ll meet

you at the top,” she called as she headed toward the lift.

“I’ll tough it out with you,” my grandfather grumbled,

unwilling to give up. I could tell it was tough for him as we

moved up the steep trail.

It was so hot that we had to rest frequently in the shade.

People would jog by us and we marveled at their energy. We

often had to grab rocks on the steepest inclines just to keep

from slipping back.

Page 18: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

18

The sights along the way made it totally worthwhile. We

passed a graveyard in a steep decline right next to the trail and

joked, “That’s where people who die hiking the trail are

buried.” I noticed workers on the mountainside putting their

supplies in a shed bearing a warning sign: “Explosives! Stay

out!”

My favorite sight was the wildflowers. They bloomed

abundantly all over the mountain in vivid patches of orange and

blue. They brought an oasis of color to the drab mountainside.

The scent of sweetness filled the mountain air. I breathed in

deeply…enjoying every moment. I thought about all the

wonderful things I had to look forward to in the next couple of

days…I just love vacation.

Suddenly we came to a fork in the road. “Which way

should we go now?” we wondered. Two ladies who lived in

Jackson told us that a shortcut was to the right. Tired and hot

we took their advice. The shortcut trail seemed more like a

“longcut.” We zigzagged up the mountain. There were so many

switchbacks that it was almost dizzying. Plus, the trail was very

narrow. We could walk only single file, in a line, not side by

side. The sun continued to beat down on us without mercy.

Still, we continued on. Soon we were rewarded with a stretch

of trail where we were surrounded by different grasses and

wildflowers. Then we came to a place under the ski lift where

Page 19: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

19

the ground slanted sharply. “Stay on the trail!” a sign

commanded. We didn’t need to be warned. One misstep and

you could go rolling along way down.

Finally we could see the top of the mountain. We ran up a

steep trail. An hour and a half after we had started we crossed

a finish line of flowers and bugs. We were so happy! We are

from flatland Michigan. We had just climbed 7,808 feet high.

My grandmother rode up the ski lift as she had planned.

We took pictures and stared at the beautiful view below. After

that, we rode down the ski lift together.

It would have been quicker and easier to simply ride up the

ski lift. But I have long lasting memories because my family and

I hiked up the Snow King together. We would have missed out

on so much if we rode up the mountain: the flowers we

smelled, the pictures we took, and the laughs we shared. It

makes me realize that when you get out in nature to a special

place you can make memories for a lifetime.

Page 20: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

20

Page 21: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

21

Page 22: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

22

Page 23: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

23

Florida—Non-Example Personal Narrative

Author: Tyler

In Florida at the hotel I got my bathing suit on and ran

downstairs to the pool. In the pool there is a waterfall and my

mom took lots of pictures. We were sitting on the edge of the

step under the waterfall.

“Is that enough pictures?” I ask. I went on the big

waterslide and the first time I said, “Ouch!”

“There is a lot of gaps in between the pieces of the water

slide.” I said.

The water slide leads into the lazy river. Then we all got

goggles and my sister Tara got a big tube so she can go down

the lazy river.

“Thanks dad.” We all said.

Then we played volleyball and my mom lost her toe ring

but we found it. I miss Florida. I wish we could go back again.

The End.

Page 24: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

24

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small

moments you remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small

moments that occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small

moments that occurred related to that turning point.

(lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings.

(lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of

the event. (lesson 3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it.

(lesson 3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your

story. (lesson 4)

Page 25: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

25

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 5 (2 days)

Concept: Writers draft their personal narrative by crafting leads.

Student Action: Writers craft a lead for their personal narrative (as defined on the plot diagram). Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Teacher will be creating the model lead based on the plot-diagram (class example) which was created as a class. Make sure to have copies or a projected copy available for all of the students.

Materials Plot diagram created with the class projected OR copies for each student

Student sample of action or setting leads (see below and attached)

I Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Review the plot diagram which the class created together in Lesson 4. Explain to students that today they will be using their plot diagrams to continue the drafting process. They are beginning to move from organizing/planning into the writing stage. Explain that they will begin to take the events on the paper and turn it into a personal narrative focusing especially on the beginning of the narrative—called the lead. The lead in the story is so important because it grabs the reader’s attention.

Explain to students that there are several ways to create leads. Authors use many different styles. In sixth grade, writers will be practicing crafting a lead in two ways-- either thoughts or flashback.

In a thoughts lead the author starts with a thought from inside the character (see example below)

In a flashback lead the author takes the reader back to a specific event in the past that relates to the topic

Share examples of both types of leads by reading through them and pointing out the strengths.

Feel free to add additional lead examples from favorite classroom literature

Example: From “Climbing the Snow King” A Thoughts Lead: I have always been taught to give it my all. My parents have told me over and over that I can do anything I put my mind to, even if it scares me a little. I knew what I was about to do was going to take some perseverance…but I was ready. From “Climbing the Snow King” A Flashback Lead: The temperature was hot…very hot. Sweat dripped down my forehead and into my eyes. Even though they burned from the salty sweat, I had to fight the urge to close them. My fear of falling down the steep embankments on either side of the narrow mountain path was motivation to keep my eyes open—wide open.

Explain to students that leads can start from different points in a story. Refer them to the Plot Diagram and identify where each example lead

Page 26: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

26

from “Climbing the Snow King” begins.

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1-2) Active

Engagement

Students work in partnerships.

Using the class example (the one that was done on a plot diagram), have students turn and talk about a thoughts lead. Use a sentence starter to frame this discussion. 1. I would start my lead from the ________________ of the story.

(example: setting, resolution, etc.)

Craft a thoughts lead as a whole group.

Using the class example again, students turn and talk about a flashback lead.

Pairs or whole group craft(s) flashback leads.

Have pairs share with other pairs.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (35 minutes)

(DAY 2)

Link

Students draft a thoughts lead for their personal narrative.

Students draft a flashback lead for their personal narrative.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

(5-10 minutes)

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Collect leads to assess how students are doing.

Page 27: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

27

From “Climbing the Snow King” A Thoughts Lead

I have always been taught to give it my all. My parents have

told me over and over that I can do anything I put my mind to,

even if it scares me a little. I knew what I was about to do was

going to take some perseverance…but I was ready.

From “Climbing the Snow King” A Flashback Lead

The temperature was hot…very hot. Sweat dripped down my

forehead and into my eyes. Even though they burned from the

salty sweat, I had to fight the urge to close them. My fear of

falling down the steep embankments on either side of the

narrow mountain path was motivation to keep my eyes open—

wide open.

Page 28: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

28

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small

moments you remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small moments

that occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small moments

that occurred related to that turning point. (lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings. (lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of the event.

(lesson 3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it. (lesson

3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your story.

(lesson 4)

Craft a lead using either thoughts or flashback. (lesson 5)

Page 29: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

29

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 6 (2-3 days)

Concept: Writers draft their personal narrative.

Student Action: Writers learn how to draft a whole story as it comes to mind including snapshots. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Snapshots will need to have been introduced in the immersion unit. Materials Plot diagram created with the class projected for everyone to see OR

copies for each student

Student sample of “Climbing the Snow King” from previous lesson

I Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Review the plot diagram which the class created together in Lesson 4. Explain to students that today they will be using their plot diagrams to continue the drafting process. Refer back to the work done yesterday on leads and remind students that leads (introductions) are how we begin. Today we are focusing on continuing that story.

Explain that today students will begin to draft the remainder of their personal narrative. Remind students that learning to write in physical detail is often the process of slowing down our senses and truly observing the world around us. The activity that we are going to do today will help us to dig for details as we write.

Explain that you are going to be using a strategy called “The Magic Camera.” Tell students that writers have a magic camera that they can point at the world and create snapshots that contain sensory details (smells, sounds, colors, light, etc).

Refer to the plot diagram for “Climbing the Snow King” Using a copy of the personal narrative, point out the examples below and

show students how the writer looked at the plot diagram and slowed down in spots where he could really remember the sensory details.

Examples: Horses trekked up a winding, steep path. Their riders bounced around as the horses jogged. Their tales swished back and forth, swatting at flies that were buzzing in the tall mountain grass. My favorite sight was the wildflowers. They bloomed abundantly all over the mountain in vivid patches of orange and blue. They brought an oasis of color to the drab mountainside. The scent of sweetness filled the mountain air. I breathed in deeply…enjoying every moment.

Page 30: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

30

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1) Active

Engagement

Students and teacher work as a group to examine the plot diagram from the class example.

Teacher and students discuss one or two spots where the writer could slow down and use the magic camera strategy.

Student partners decide where they will slow down and include a snapshot.

Student partners work together to craft the snapshot based on the class example.

Students share with another pair.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2-3)

Link

Review yesterday’s lesson.

Students draft snapshots and the body of their narratives.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see one snapshot in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 31: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

31

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small moments you

remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small moments that

occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small moments that

occurred related to that turning point. (lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings. (lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of the event. (lesson

3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it. (lesson 3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your story. (lesson 4)

Craft a lead using either dialogue or character description. (lesson 5)

Include snapshots in your writing in order to include sensory details. (lesson

6)

Page 32: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

32

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 7 (2-3 days)

Concept: Writers draft their personal narrative.

Student Action: Writers learn how to draft a whole story as it comes to mind including thoughtshots. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Snapshots will need to have been introduced in the immersion unit. Materials Plot diagram created with the class projected for everyone to see OR

copies for each student

Student sample of “Climbing the Snow King” from previous lesson

I Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Review the plot diagram which the class created together in Lesson 4. Explain to students that today they will be using their plot diagrams to continue the drafting process. Refer back to the work done yesterday on snapshots and remind students that snapshots allow us to add sensory details. Today we are focusing on continuing the story through thoughtshots.

Explain that today students will continue to draft their personal narrative. Remind students that learning to write in physical detail is often the process of slowing down our senses and truly observing the world around us. The activity that we are going to do today will help us to go inside of the character by including thoughts on how a character feels. These thoughts are called thoughtshots.

Refer to the student sample “Climbing the Snow King.” Using a copy of the personal narrative, point out the examples below and show students how the writer used thoughtshots, after snapshots in order to move from physical detail to thoughts, and then back again.

Examples: Horses trekked up a winding, steep path. Their riders bounced around as the horses jogged. Their tales swished back and forth, swatting at flies that were buzzing in the tall mountain grass. It seemed kind of mean but I was secretly hoping the flies would get filled up with horse blood. I shivered at the idea of bites all over my legs and arms. That is one thing I could definitely do without on this hike. My favorite sight was the wildflowers. They bloomed abundantly all over the mountain in vivid patches of orange and blue. They brought an oasis of color to the drab mountainside. The scent of sweetness filled the mountain air. I breathed in deeply…enjoying every moment. I thought about all the wonderful things I had to look forward to in the next couple of days…I just love vacation.

Page 33: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

33

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1) Active

Engagement

Students and teacher work as a group to examine the plot diagram from the class example.

Teacher and students discuss one or two spots where the writer could add thoughtshots.

Student partners work together to craft the thoughtshot for the class example.

Students share with another pair.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2-3)

Link

Review yesterday’s lesson.

Students draft snapshots and the body of their narratives.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see one thoughtshot in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 34: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

34

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small moments you

remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small moments that

occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small moments that

occurred related to that turning point. (lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings. (lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of the event. (lesson

3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it. (lesson 3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your story. (lesson 4)

Craft a lead using either dialogue or character description. (lesson 5)

Include snapshots in your writing in order to include sensory details. (lesson

6)

Include thoughtshots in your writing in order to balance sensory details and

character reflections or ideas. (lesson 7)

Page 35: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

35

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 8 (2 days)

Concept: Writers draft their personal narrative endings.

Student Action: Writers learn how to draft the ending of a narrative so that they can provide insight as to why the event is memorable, creating a sense of closure. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

The student personal essay example has a great ending to share but feel free to use excellent endings from great literature as well.

Materials Plot diagram created with the class projected OR copies for each student

Student sample of “Climbing the Snow King” from previous lesson

Plot diagram from “Climbing the Snow King”

I Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Explain to students that the ending of a narrative is meant to provide insight or reflection on the experience you have just written about. An insight is to explain why an event was memorable and can bring a sense of closure

Explain to students that today they will be studying the ending of “Climbing the Snow King” in order to understand how strong endings might look. They will then be working as a whole class to write an ending to the class narrative you have created.

Refer to the plot diagram for “Climbing the Snow King” Reread what marks the ending of the narrative. Then go back to the “Climbing the Snow King” and reread the entire narrative. Before you get to the ending stop and think aloud. Sometimes it helps me to reread my entire narrative before I craft my ending. After I reread my entire story I can stop and think, what can I do to leave readers with a lasting impression and to give them a sense of closure? Let’s see what the author Sam did:

Example: It would have been easier to simply ride up the ski lift. But I have long lasting memories because my family and I hiked up the Snow King together. We would have missed out on so much if we rode up the mountain: the flowers we smelled, the pictures we took, and the laughs we shared. It makes me realize that when you get out in nature to a special place you can make memories for a lifetime.

Explain to students, that in the example above, the author uses strong feelings and wonders to reflect upon the experience.

Share a nonexample of how to end a narrative

Page 36: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

36

Nonexample: Climbing the Mountain was an adventure. The End. I am glad I am brave enough to climb, how about you?

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1) Active

Engagement

Students and teacher work as a group to review the ending on the plot diagram from the class example.

Teacher asks partners to discuss how they could frame an ending from the class example, with strong emotions. Use a sentence starter to help guide the discussion. If I were using an ending with strong emotions I would use ____________ (emotion) to show that I had learned _____________(lesson or important memory).

Student partners discuss.

Teacher circulates and records student names and their ideas (2-3).

Teacher shares those ideas with the class.

Class selects one emotion/memory

Teacher and students draft ending.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2-3)

Link

Review yesterday’s lesson.

Students draft endings and the body of their narratives.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see ending in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 37: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

37

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 9 (2-3 days)

Concept: Writers revise their personal narratives by adding dialogue.

Student Action: Writers learn how to add dialogue to their narrative to move the story forward and to reveal character. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

The student personal essay example has some dialogue to share, but feel free to use dialogue from great literature as well.

Materials Student sample of “Climbing the Snow King” from previous lesson

I Do It (15-18 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Teacher defines: What is dialogue? Dialogue is the conversation that takes place between characters in a story. You can tell more about your characters’ thoughts and feelings if you include dialogue in your stories.

When writing dialogue you must remember to: 1. Use quotations marks around the speaker’s exact words 2. Identify who is speaking 3. Indent each time the speaker changes 4. Use punctuation

Read through the sample narrative, “Climbing the Snow King.” Identify the dialogue used. Look for a place where the author included dialogue to share more of the character’s feelings/thoughts. Think aloud for students about how the dialogue is used to help reveal the characters. Example:

When my grandmother reached the shortcut, she was struggling. “You know what folks, I have to say I think I am going to need to take the lift up the rest of the way. There just isn’t enough giddy-up in this old mare,” she giggled.

“I’ll meet you at the top,” she called as she headed toward the lift. “I’ll tough it out with you,” my grandfather grumbled, unwilling to give up. I

could tell it was tough for him as we moved up the steep trail.

Ask students to think about how this conversation helps to move the story forward?

Allow students to share their experiences. (2-3 minute brain-break through sharing). Example answers: 1. You learn that grandma isn’t able to make the long walk 2. Grandpa is in better shape than grandma 3. Grandpa is really stubborn and won’t give up

Now, using your own modeling and student suggestions, show students how the following sample from “Climbing the Snow King” could be improved by adding dialogue.

Example: Suddenly we came to a fork in the road. “Which way should we go now?” we wondered. Two ladies who lived in Jackson told us that a shortcut was to the right. Tired and hot we took their advice. Suddenly we came to a fork in the road. “Which way should we go now?” we

Page 38: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

38

wondered. “If you would like to take the short cut, it is to the right,” said a friendly local woman who was standing at the fork for a break. “If you are feeling tired at this point, that would be my recommendation.” She shared with a smile.

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1) Active

Engagement

Students and teacher work as a group to find places in the class example where dialogue could be added.

Remind students that the conversation should move the story forward and reveal the characters thoughts/feelings. The dialogue should sound natural.

Partners should revise by adding 2-3 lines of dialogue to the class example in two separate places (if possible). Remind them to use dialogue rules such as indenting every time someone new speaks and placing quotation marks around a speaker’s words.

Teacher circulates and records student names and their ideas (2-3).

Teacher shares those ideas with the class.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

Getting the punctuation correct will be difficult. Focus on 1. indenting when someone new speaks 2. placing quotation marks around a speaker’s words 3. placing end punctuation within the dialogue

Advanced writers will be able to separate speaker tags from the quote with commas and use proper punctuation to punctuate inside the quote.

You Do It (40 minutes) (DAY 2 or 3)

Link

Students revise their own narratives by adding dialogue. Dialogue could be written on another piece of paper and a caret used to show where in the narrative it will be inserted.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see dialogue in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 39: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

39

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small moments you

remember with that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small moments that

occurred in that place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small moments that

occurred related to that turning point. (lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings. (lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of the event. (lesson

3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it. (lesson 3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your story. (lesson 4)

Craft a lead using either dialogue or character description. (lesson 5)

Include snapshots in your writing in order to include sensory details. (lesson

6)

Include thoughtshots in your writing in order to balance sensory details and

character reflections or ideas. (lesson 7)

Craft an ending that includes a reflection or a lesson learned. (lesson 8)

Include dialogue to move the story forward and reveal character. (lesson 9)

Page 40: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

40

6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 10 (2 days)

Concept: Writers revise their personal narratives by adding transition words.

Student Action: Writers learn how to add transition words or phrases to help move the story forward or to help sequence information. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Be careful not to focus solely on transition words which are geared more for expository writing. By just focusing on those, writing can begin to sound redundant and boring (first, next, then).

Too many transitions are not good for writing, when a specific skill is taught it can tend to be overused.

Materials Student sample of “Climbing the Snow King” from previous lesson

A copy of the transition word list for each student

I Do It (15 minutes)

(DAY 1) Connection

Teach

Teacher explains: Transition words are words or phrases at the beginning of sentences that help to move the story forward or to help sequence information. Transition words can show time passing.

Look at the transition word list and discuss what transitions students have used in the past. Tell them that they have worked hard to make revisions on their personal narratives and now they will learn how to make sure the different parts of their writing are connected with transitions.

Project the class sample writing, “Climbing the Snow King.” Point out all the transitions they can find. Also, show students how transitions can be added to help writing flow from one idea to the next.

Examples: Even though I had been there three times, I had been eager to return. It was a fairly long walk, but soon enough we were at the base of the towering mountain. Suddenly we came to a fork in the road. “Which way should we go now?” we wondered. Non-Example: My favorite sight was the wildflowers. They bloomed abundantly all over the mountain in vivid patches of orange and blue. They brought an oasis of color to the drab mountainside.

Point out that the above sample sounds choppy. The ideas are not flowing together as well as they could.

Ask Students: What words could be used to transition one sentence to the next?

After hours of hiking I can say that my favorite sight was the wildflowers. Wherever you looked they were abundantly blooming all over the

Page 41: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

41

mountain in vivid patches of orange and blue. They brought an oasis of color to the drab mountainside.

We Do It (15 minutes)

(Day 1) Active

Engagement

Students and teacher work as a group to find places in the class example where transitions could be added.

Remind students that transitions are used to help sentences flow together so they don’t sound choppy and disconnected.

Partners should revise by adding transitions where they are needed.

Teacher circulates and records student names and their ideas (2-3).

Teacher shares those ideas with the class.

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

Students may try to use too many transitions. It may be necessary to help them see that a few well-placed transitions are all that is needed.

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2)

Link

Students revise their own narratives by adding transitions.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see transitions in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 42: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

42

Transition Words/Phrases for Narrative Writing

After First At first

As soon as Second It all began

Before Once It started

Next In the meantime After that

Initially Later on During

Now In the beginning At the end

When After a while At last

Immediately When we finished Pretty soon

Meanwhile The last thing Soon after

Last Just then At this point

Later Before long Fortunately

Since After_____minutes Of course

Suddenly When we were done By this time

Whenever Right after At that instant

Soon In an instant Suddenly

In a matter of seconds

Page 43: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

43

Strategies for Generating a Personal Narrative

Think of a person who matters to you, then list clear, small moments you remember with

that person. (lesson 1)

Think of a place that matters to you, then list clear, small moments that occurred in that

place. (lesson 1)

Think of a turning point in your life, then list clear, small moments that occurred related

to that turning point. (lesson 2)

Identify a strong emotion which describes your feelings. (lesson 3)

Create a mind movie to help you recapture the details of the event. (lesson 3)

Choose a topic which has the strongest emotions tied to it. (lesson 3)

Use a plot diagram to help you plan and organize your story. (lesson 4)

Craft a lead using either dialogue or character description. (lesson 5)

Include snapshots in your writing in order to include sensory details. (lesson 6)

Include thoughtshots in your writing in order to balance sensory details and character

reflections or ideas. (lesson 7)

Craft an ending that includes a reflection or a lesson learned. (lesson 8)

Include dialogue to move the story forward and reveal character. (lesson 9)

Include transition words or phrases to help move the story forward or to help sequence

information. (lesson 10)

Page 44: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

44

6th Grade Personal Narrative

Lesson 10 (2 days) Concept: Writers will use a revision checklist to make final changes to drafts before editing. Student Action: Writers will review, evaluate and revise writing for meaning and clarity. Pre-Corrections: Remember Example—Non Example—Example (always end with what

you want them to do).

Teacher will review narrative techniques taught throughout the unit and correct any misunderstandings.

The I do it/We do it is combined so be sure to give students moments to process and share ideas as you work through this lesson as it involves more focus on guided, direct instruction. (Remember 10-12 minutes teaching, 2 minutes student processing)

Students will provide evidence of the strategy by color coding and cannot underline if checkpoint items are missing.

Materials Revision checklist for every student

Colored pencils

A copy of the sample writing used throughout the unit for every student

I Do It/We Do It (30 minutes)

(DAY 1)

Connection

Teach

Active Engagement

Display a copy of the revision checklist. Explain that this is a checklist with the important techniques of personal narrative writing we have been learning.

Explain that some of the techniques on this list will already be in their personal narrative, others will need to be added.

Start by modeling how to make revisions on the class sample writing. 1. Display the class sample. (See example text attached to understand how end product will look) 2. Reread the writing. Refer to the first technique on the checklist:

matching a strong emotion to a person or place and writing a small moment story about it

3. Choose a pre-selected colored pencil for underlining words that show emotion connected with a small moment story. Think aloud and ask yourself, am I writing a seed story rather than a whole watermelon story?

4. Partners underline strong emotion words on their copy while teacher does the same on the projected copy.

5. The teacher will continue modeling this revision process by rereading for each of the following checkpoints and underlining them with a different colored pencil.

beginning, middle and end (choose a different color for the beginning, middle and end)

Page 45: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

45

attention grabbing lead

snapshot (sensory details)

dialogue

transition words

ends with a lesson learned, reflection or a lasting impression

Mid-Workshop Teaching Point (3-5 minutes)

Notice common errors students are making and teach to them

Make sure students are engaged and invested in the revision process. They cannot underline if checkpoint items are missing.

You Do It (40 minutes)

(DAY 2)

Link

Students use the checklist to revise their own writing.

Teacher circulates to give support as needed.

After the Workshop Share

Review the day’s teaching point

Highlight a student’s work that is in line with focus for the day (or have the student do it)

Have students partner up to share

Assessment Check Point

Ask to see color coded drafts in order to assess how students are doing.

Page 46: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

46

Page 47: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

47

Page 48: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

48

EDITING CHECKLIST

Title__________________________________________________________

Reread your writing carefully. Put a check in each box under Author as you

complete each item. Once all the boxes are checked, give this checklist to the

teacher for the final edit.

Revise for the following: Author Teacher

1. Write about a small moment. Ask yourself,

Did I write about a small (seed) moment that matters to

me?

Did I connect the moment to a strong emotion?

Did I include a beginning, middle and end?

Did I include a lead that grabs the reader’s attention?

Did I include a snapshot?

Did I include a thoughtshot?

Did I include dialogue?

Did I include transition words?

Did I end with a lesson I learned or a lasting impression?

Edit for the following:

2. Sentences and paragraphs.

Each sentence is complete.

Varied sentence structure is present.

Each paragraph is indented.

Indent when someone new speaks when writing dialogue.

Commas are used to punctuate dialogue

End punctuation is included inside of the quotation

marks.

3. Capitalization.

Use capitals at the beginning of each sentence and for

every name.

4. Punctuation.

Use periods, exclamation points, question marks, and

quotation marks correctly.

5. Spelling.

Spell grade-appropriate words correctly.

Use a dictionary or ask a teacher for words you don’t

know how to spell.

Page 49: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

49

Text Type: Personal Narrative

GENRE FOCUS

Level 4.0 In addition to Level 3.0 performance, the student writer goes beyond what was taught:

Voice captures audience – creative word choice

Uses figurative language to create imagery

Varied sentence structure

Level 3.5

In addition to 3.0 performance, in depth inferences and applications with partial success.

Level 3.0 PROFICIENCY TARGET

Includes an attention-grabbing lead

Focused on a small moment story elaborating single event or events

Step-by-step sequence of events signaled by time evident or transitional words or phrases (first, next, then, at that time, when it happened, etc.)

Includes dialogue to develop experiences or show the responses of characters in situations

Includes sensory details to convey experiences precisely

Includes a conclusion that ties to the story

Level 2.5 Demonstrates no major errors or gaps in the 2.0 content and partial knowledge of the 3.0 content.

Level 2.0 Includes a lead

Step by step sequence of events loosely connected to small moment (may lack focus)

Includes limited details

Includes a conclusion (may not tie to the story)

Level 1.5 Demonstrates partial knowledge of the 2.0 content with major gaps in the 3.0 content.

Level 1.0 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and some of the 3.0 content.

Level 0.5 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and none of the 3.0 content.

Page 50: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

50

Personal Narrative—6th grade

Text Type: Personal Narrative

MECHANICS FOCUS

Level 4.0

Students should demonstrate 90% proficiency in Level 3 mechanics. Mastery in conventions.

Level 3.5

In addition to 3.0 performance, in depth inferences and applications with partial success.

Level 3.0 PROFICIENCY TARGET

Students should demonstrate 80% proficiency in the following areas. Lapses in writing conventions are not a distraction.

Paragraphing

End punctuation

Capitalization

Commas and quotation marks to punctuate dialogue

Varied sentence structure present

Words spelled correctly

Level 2.5

Demonstrates no major errors or gaps in the 2.0 content and partial knowledge of the 3.0 content.

Level 2.0 Students should demonstrate 60% proficiency in Level 3 mechanics. Lack of control makes writing difficult to understand.

Level 1.5 Demonstrates partial knowledge of the 2.0 content with major gaps in the 3.0 content.

Level 1.0 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and some of the 3.0 content.

Level 0.5 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and none of the 3.0 content.

Page 51: 6th Grade Personal Narrative Lesson 1 Concept

July 2014 W.06.03, W.06.04, W.06.05, W.06.06, W.06.08, W.06.10, L.06.02, L.06.03, L.06.06

51

Grades 3-6

PROCESS FOCUS

Level 4.0

With little support, writer uses planning, drafting, revising, and editing

Level 3.5

In addition to 3.0 performance, in depth inferences and applications with partial success.

Level 3.0 PROFICIENCY TARGET

With some support, writer uses planning, drafting, revising, and editing

Level 2.5

Demonstrates no major errors or gaps in the 2.0 content and partial knowledge of the 3.0 content.

Level 2.0 With considerable support, writer uses planning, drafting, revising, and editing

Level 1.5 Demonstrates partial knowledge of the 2.0 content with major gaps in the 3.0 content.

Level 1.0 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and some of the 3.0 content.

Level 0.5 With help, a partial understanding of some of the 2.0 content and none of the 3.0 content.