Unit 1 English Outcome 2: Creating and

Presenting During outcome 2 you will complete

two SACs SAC 1 will be an imaginative piece

based on the Holocaust and referring specifically to ‘Night’ by Elie Wiesel

SAC 2 will be an expository piece which will require you to write a feature article based on a prompt about survival

Unit 1 English: Creating and Presenting

You will be required to complete an IMAGINATIVE piece of writing as SAC 1 for the Creating and Presenting outcome

Your piece of writing MUST be linked to the context of survival and specifically to the novel ‘Night’ by Elie Wiesel

Aims of this PowerPoint

To teach you how to use descriptive language to set and describe a scene and characters

To teach you to write with emotion which connects your audience to the prose

To provide a stimulus for ideas to assist you in planning for your SAC

To allow you to see the difference between mediocre descriptive writing and powerful descriptive writing

To become more brutal and critical of your own and others’ writing to improve the overall quality

To give you experience in writing descriptively and imaginatively prior to your SAC and to year 12

How to be a human camera

OBJECTIVE:How to shape or structure your writing to describe.

Writing to Describe...A Fish ‘n’ Chip Shop on a Friday Night

Write the opening line

• Compare it with the person next to you who has the best line ?

Which opening is better than the rest ? Why?Which opening is the weakest? Why?

  A full line of perfectly wrapped parcels, awaiting their customers

mouths, sat simmering in a greasy tray. Heavy smells of grease, fat and oil were present around the overpowered flyers that cooked so noisily and so briskly.

    'Savaloy and chips!' comes the strongly accented shout. A hand is

thrust out and the miasma of fumes clears to reveal a disappointingly normal body. The hustle and bustle of strangers, trying not to catch each other's eyes is whipped into a chaotic frenzy.

    As I walked through the fish and chip shop door on that busy Friday

evening, I could smell the chips cooking. The sound of the paper as the chips were wrapped for people to take away made me even more hungry.

    Everybody on Queen's Road knows that 'The Codfather' is extremely

busy on a Friday night; they also know it’s the best 'chippy' in the whole of Perth. That's why when the customers went in it was a special treat.

 

Criteria

Use close and well-selected observation of the people in the scene, their appearance and behaviour and the interaction between them (for example, couples, individuals, and the other characters who enliven the scene)

Move from the general to the particular, observing details precisely and individually (such as facial expressions or physical objects)

Criteria

Demonstrate close observation of body language and the emotions of characters

Skilfully use of snatches of dialogue to establish atmosphere and a sense of character

HUMAN CAMERA

Your camera will start by focusing on external images then ZOOM in on the action and individuals that are in the action.

•YOU ARE DESCRIBING A SCENE!

•DO NOT TELL A STORY!

•NO PRONOUNS (I OR ME)…

•AVOID CHARACTERS!

Write three sentences describing the external appearance of the setting.

Remember to include SIMILE AND METAPHOR!

Write three sentences describing the external appearance of the setting.

Remember to include SIMILE AND METAPHOR!

Golden light engulfs the horizon resembling a beautiful, peaceful sunset. However, the false hope of a setting sun vanishes as giant embers attack the surroundings like warriors. A giant, dull cloud creeps gradually over burning trees revealing the tragic truth of a horrific fire. The smell of smoke dominates as its thick presence rapidly suffocates lungs. The sound of flickering flames and burning habitats echoes in fearful ears. Crumbled possessions revealing the dangerous inferno, these once valuable objects reduced to smouldering charcoal-coloured ash.

Now write three sentences describing the activity within the setting.

Consider: appearance, behaviour and the interaction between people

Now write three sentences describing the activity within the setting.

Consider: appearance, behaviour and the interaction between people

The fireman’s brightly lit suit stood out against the shattered, blackened area. His lonely figure a stark contrast to the lifeless location. As he awkwardly stumbles around the remains of someone’s home, the path of destruction left by this tyrant fire is discovered. Sizzling sounds stay engraved in his mind as tears stream down his ashen face, revealing the scars and pain buried beneath. A loud roar from above briefly tears his focus from the devastation, lifting his eyes to acknowledge the helicopter above. Tearing through the sky, whipping the air like butter.

Focus on objects or individuals. REMEMBER: DESCRIBE their body language instead of what you think they are feeling.

Focus on objects or individuals. REMEMBER: DESCRIBE their body language instead of what you think they are feeling.

Trembling hands lay delicately across the head of a victim. The scene confirms the aging man’s worst nightmare; his precious, cherished home destroyed in minutes. He hopelessly leans forward, his body thrust forward in despair. His crushed stance illustrates his agony, his hope vanishing as the fire persists with fury. The ravaging fire consumes the town in seconds. In its wake, a path of destruction that burns deeper wounds in the victims that will never heal.

REMEMBER YOUR SENSES

THE SIEGEBy Helen Dunmore

Leningrad, September 1941. Hitler orders German forces to surround the city at the start of the most dangerous, desperate winter in

history.It is ten past midnight. Darkness, stillness, cold. A savage

cold that is strong enough to halt the beat of blood, strong enough to turn the dead into logs of frost.

All four of them huddle together, sharing their body heat. They’re fully dressed down to hats with ear-flaps, gloves

and scarfs. At the foot of the mattresses four pairs of boots stand ready. The ventilation window has been mended with layers of cardboard where a shell burst

shattered it weeks ago. The other windows are crusted with frost, inside and outside. Outside, an ice-laden wind

sifts the snow into whirling demons at empty street corners.

But it’s dark, dark. Nothing of this can be seen. There’s only the savagery of the cold, like an animal prowling the

room, lashing at every inch of exposed skin (Page 254)

Writing to describe‘SURVIVAL’

Your task is to describe one of the following settings. Remember to write in third person, use plenty of adjectives and remember to evoke the senses.

Writing to describe- Survival

You are required to choose three of the following images from the Holocaust. For each of the three you must use the skills you have just learnt to describe the scene from the third person perspective. Each description should be approximately 150 words in length. (You should write between 450-500 in total)

You will be assessed on: Use of powerful adjectives, adverbs and overall

description of the scene Ability to focus (remember you are a camera!) on

specific elements of the photographs Appropriate use of spelling, punctuation and grammar Proof of editing by yourself and a peer (Remember you

are trying to improve the quality and expression of the ideas/description)

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust

The Holocaust