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- THEME Day 6 copy
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- THEME copy Design Photography Copy Workbook pages 1-2 copy
Theme
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- VOICE Choose the right voice and tone for your theme. copy
Theme
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- Your "voice" is the way that you "speak" on paper. It is how
your words come across to the reader, and it will be different for
every writer. Voice depends on the style you choose formal,
informal, technical, chatty, poetic. Voice depends on the words you
choose to express this style - simple words, scientific words,
slang words. copy Theme VOICE
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- Make the first sentence memorable. Write a sentence so good
that the reader continues reading. Hint at what will follow. copy
Theme The 1 st Sentence
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- Call me Ishmael. Herman Melville, Moby-Dick (1851) This account
will be personal. The speaker directly addresses the audience.
There is a biblical allusion. Ishmael was born at Mamre, when
Abraham was 86, 11 years after Abraham's arrival in what would
become the land of Israel (Genesis 16:3). He grew up to be a man of
the desert wilderness, with a wild and hostile attitude toward
people, exactly as God described him to his mother before he was
born. There appears to be a clarification of identity. copy
Theme
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- It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking
thirteen. George Orwell, 1984 (1949) Something is up. Things arent
quite right. copy Theme
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- IF YOU REALLY WANT TO HEAR about it, the first thing you'll
probably want to know is where I was born, and what my lousy
childhood was like, and how my parents were occupied and all before
they had me, and all that David Copperfield kind of crap, but I
don't feel like going into it, if you want to know the truth. J. D.
Salinger, The Catcher in the Rye (1951) First-person account. It is
very conversational in tone. The speaker is cynical. The speaker
knows what is expected, but he doesnt have the inclination or
energy to play the game. copy Theme
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- Time is not a line but a dimension, like the dimensions of
space. Margaret Atwood, Cat's Eye (1988) Very philosophical
statement that causes the reader to ask, What do you mean? Can you
give me an example? It is about simultaneous happenings. It is not
a day-by-day or month-by-month account. The material is organized
around something other than time. copy Theme
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- All this happened, more or less. Kurt Vonnegut,
Slaughterhouse-Five (1969) This is not a reliable narrator. What
would you think if someone asserted that all this happened and
followed it with a disclaimer like more or less? What is he/she
leaving out? What is he/she adding? copy Theme
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- It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the
age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of
belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of
Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it
was the winter of despair. Charles Dickens, A Tale of Two Cities
(1859) Now you try? What do you know about this novel? copy
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- Is the first line memorable? Did you readily identify the song
and the group? Share some memorable 1 st lines from current songs.
(Make sure the lyrics are appropriate.) NOW TRY SOME SONG LYRICS
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- You Belong to Me Taylor Swift: Brown-Eyed Girl Van Morrison:
Treasure Bruno Mars: Live Like You Were Dying Tim McGraw: You're on
the phone with your girlfriend, she's upset Hey, where did we
go/days when the rains came? Gimme your, gimme your, gimme your
attention, baby. He said I was in my early 40's,/With a lot of life
before me Time keeps on slippin' slippin' slippin into the future.
Free Bird Lynard Skynard: Fly Like an Eagle The Steve Miller Band:
If I leave here tomorrow will you still remember me? copy
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- Bohemian Rhapsody Queen: Good Vibrations The Beach Boys:
Friends in Low Places Garth Brooks: Hotel California The Eagles:
Blitzkrieg Bop The Ramones: I Knew You Were Trouble Taylor Swift:
Is this the real life? / Is this just fantasy? I, I love the
colorful clothes she wears / And the way the sunlight plays upon
her hair Blame it all on my roots, I showed up in boots and ruined
your black-tie affair. On a dark, desert highway/ Cool wind in my
hair. "Hey, ho, let's go!" Once upon a time, a few mistakes ago.
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- Share some memorable 1 st lines from current songs. (Make sure
the lyrics are appropriate.) NOW TRY SOME SONG LYRICS copy
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- Be specific
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- Theme: Outside the box, Inside the box Tone: candid
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- From F. Scott Fitzgerald's story "The Crack-Up Seen in a Junk
Yard. Dogs, chickens with few claws, brass fittings, T's elbow,
rust everywhere, bales of metal 1800 lbs., plumbing fixtures,
bathtubs, sinks, water pumps, wheels, Fordson tractor, acetylene
lamps for tractors, sewing machine, bell on dinghy, box of bolts
(No. 1), van, stove, auto stuff (No. 2), army trucks, cast iron
body, hot dog stand, dinky engines, sprockets like watch parts,
hinge all taken apart on building side, motorcycle radiators,
George on the high army truck. copy Theme Consider lists
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- Theme: splash Tone: pride Try a list
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- Theme: without Tone: inquisitive Keep it short
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- Theme: COLLECTIONS Tone: assertive Be a name dropper
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- Theme: bit by bit Tone: provocative Be a name dropper
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- Theme: THINGS LEFT UNSAID Tone: thoughtful
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- Theme: I Go to Johnson Tone: authoritative Try 1 st Person
(multiple)
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- Theme: En Route Tone: conversational Try a conversation
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- Theme: It All Adds Up Tone: reliable Try numbers
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- This sentence has five words. This is five words, too. Five
word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous.
Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The
sound of it drones. It's like a stuck record. The ear demands some
variety. copy Theme Vary the length of sentences
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- Now listen. I vary the sentence length and I create music.
Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a
harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium
length. And sometimes when I am certain the reader is rested, I
will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence
that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a
crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the symbols, and
sounds that say listen to this; it is important. Gary Provost on
the Rhythms of Sentence Length copy Theme Vary the length of
sentences
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- Theme: amplify Tone: animated Vary sentence length
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- Remember the day I borrowed your brand new car, and I dented
it? I thought you'd kill me, but you didn't. d remember the time I
dragged you to the beach, and you said it would rain, and it did? I
thought you'd say, "I told you so," but you didn't. Do you remember
the time I flirted with all the guys to make you jealous and you
were? I thought you'd leave me, but you didn't. Do you remember the
time I spilled strawberry pie all over your car rug? I thought
you'd hit me, but you didn't. And remember the time I forgot to
tell you that the dance was formal, and you showed up in jeans. I
thought you'd drop me, but you didn't. Yes, there were lots of
things you didn't do. But you put up with me, and you loved me, and
you protected me. There were lots of things I wanted to make up to
you when you returned from Vietnam. But you didn't. -Leo Buscaglia
copy Theme Use repetition
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- repetition Theme: bout time Tone: assertive Experiment with:
repetition
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- Use prepositional phrases as in "History will show that he
walked away with _____with _____and with _____. or "She walked down
the _____through the _____ and across the _____." Experiment with:
parrallel structure
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- Try parallel structure
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- Consider an embedded message Theme: unforgettable Tone:
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- Am I just a school? I am senior square at lunch. l am A-1O at
test time. I am Newman Field at kickoff. I am the stage at curtain
call. Am l just a school? I am six building sections A-F. I am your
teacher who helped you after school. I am the step you broke your
heel on at Homecoming. I am what you have made me. Am l just a
school? copy Theme (continued) 1 st person inanimate object
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- I am six feet of green separating you from a birdie. I am the
three-point line at the buzzer. I am fourth and goal and no
time-outs. I am a 3-2 pitch with the bases loaded. Am I just a
game? I am a grandma with a giant foam finger. I am a watered-down
cup of The Thirst Quencher. I am two skinned knees and a bruised
ego. I am a double-fault at game point. Am I just a game? copy
Theme (continued) 1 st person inanimate object
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- I am a high-stepping, prime time trip to the end zone. I am Air
Ball, the grim specter of basketball death. I am the inappropriate
word that was worth the red card. I am RAMS! on the count of three.
Am I just a game? Do you know the depth of defeat? Have you scaled
the peaks of victory? Am I just a game? Go deep. Ace the serve.
Swing for the fences Sink the long one Then youll know, you can
tell me Am I just a game? copy Theme (continued) 1 st person
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- Do you remember your finest hour? Do you remember your worst?
Maybe you dont. I do. So, am I just a school? Cheer wildly. Slap on
the Ram bumper sticker. Paint your faces blue. Make me proud. Then
tell me, am I just a school? Well, am I, friend? Am I? (continued)
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- Alliteration All last year, anytime we asked about the new ABC
schedule, administrators gave us an artful answer, which left us
anticipating academic agony. But when the buildings closed for
summer break, believers in this new set of ABCs broke the news that
wed be battling the books for an extra hour. Built in to the new
schedule was a seventh period to break the boundaries of boring
academic basics. Certainly, changes loomed ahead. Contact period
now came at noon instead of the close of the day, and classes
commenced an hour before the rooster crowed. Clearly, we were
learning a new set of ABCs. copy Theme
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- Onomatopoeia
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- Our four years of high school provide many opportunities to set
out in various directions. Bay High has established many programs
so we may become familiar with different areas. However, we are
also given other alternatives. Everyone tries at least one
direction, wherever it may lead. By trying a particular direction,
we are able to develop an interest which may in turn lead to
another area of interest, and eventually direct us where we are
destined to go. We may take part in many activities: music,
athletics, jobs, clubs, school work, or just taking it easy. Many
times these high school activities are group affairs, but actually
we are individually pursuing our own personal interests. Most of us
are not even near the end of our journey, and some of us have not
yet begun. Difficulty in finding the place where we are headed
should not discourage us. We will have to stop and do some serious
thinking once in awhile when we have more than one path available;
and we may follow only one. High school is just one of the legs in
our journey to find out where we should be headed. At the end of
the year, we will continue our search in other directions. Each one
of us in his own way will explore the new dimensions discovered
this year together. How Often I saw Where I should be going, Only
By Setting Out For Somewhere Else. copy Theme AWFUL THEME COPY
INDEFINITE ADJECTIVES NOT SPECIFIC TOO PHILOSOPHICAL NO ONE WILL
READ IT!
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- What is your themes tone? What voice will work with the tone?
What format will you use? Brainstorm. Write a 1 st draft. Read it
to staff members and have them offer suggestions. Rewrite until it
works. copy Theme YOUR TURN
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